- Jun 23, 2017
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naughtyroad The only real problem I have is the punishment from the 3 for not showing another way. I mean there is nothing wrong with dirty sex and if the 3 were interested in a nice guy why not just continue to sleep with their BF/Husbands. Also there is a balancing act to the way you are writing things when you write confusion/misunderstandings please make sure to A) The elder sister isn't a complete cunt even moreso then she already is B) The misunderstandings aren't used as a plot device to prevent the story from advancing
To see what that looks like take a look at daughter for desert endless needless drama that could easily be solved with simple communication between the two parties. It hasn't gotten to that point with the elder sister but it is getting there.
To see what that looks like take a look at daughter for desert endless needless drama that could easily be solved with simple communication between the two parties. It hasn't gotten to that point with the elder sister but it is getting there.