VN Ren'Py Abandoned Lurking in My Destiny [v0.2.0] [SenseiDaimon]

[Look-see]

Yes, I went too far with some of the messages, I probably have to redo some of the dialogues and clarify.

i saw the mom has tattoos are those permanent or just heavily painted.

i havent written this game off yet despite some things it is interesting. i had to cheat to get the alternate sister scene and it was wayyyy better minus the slap. could've gotten the same result if we just grabbed her head and forced her.

but yeah as for the sister. i'm not usally concerned if characters are virgins but sisters or daughters are usually the only ones i think should be. didnt mind if she had a BF for story reasons. did suck he already got to her.

i'll wait and see for the changes and see how that works out.

for a first release there was a good amount of story content though. even if i had issues with some things.

 

[poopisthebest]

You had me at Marin.

 

[YadenYu]

Spanish Patch V0.2.0

 

[Archenemystry]

seems interesting

 

[ugz2]

The change to the sister's dialogue was good and natural without feeling like an overcorrection. As an aside, given her character and dynamic with her brother, it was possible the old dialogue was teasing and she wasn't actually getting any from her boyfriend as she always returns home and still uses her brother as an outlet. Regardless, given the moment at breakfast, she implicitly has feelings for her brother already.

The mother changes are the opposite. Very stiff and she may as well have turned to the player and told us directly. I have a hard time believing that the previous intent was that she never did anything at the club--actually there are still a few lines earlier in the game that read to me she already slept with clients. It seems to me this was a complete change in response to negativity (and that's fine and your prerogative).

What is the purpose of seeing Kiriha's tights ripped specifically like that?

 

[SenseiDaimon]

The change to the sister's dialogue was good and natural without feeling like an overcorrection. As an aside, given her character and dynamic with her brother, it was possible the old dialogue was teasing and she wasn't actually getting any from her boyfriend as she always returns home and still uses her brother as an outlet. Regardless, given the moment at breakfast, she implicitly has feelings for her brother already.

The mother changes are the opposite. Very stiff and she may as well have turned to the player and told us directly. I have a hard time believing that the previous intent was that she never did anything at the club--actually there are still a few lines earlier in the game that read to me she already slept with clients. It seems to me this was a complete change in response to negativity (and that's fine and your prerogative).

What is the purpose of seeing Kiriha's tights ripped specifically like that?

She just likes it that way, there's no message there.

 

[Catzaking]

Android?

 

[Ghost'']

Lurking In My Destiny [Prologue Part 1 Fix1] Unofficial Android Port (Fixed)

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[MythMackay]

Added to watchlist, but based on what I've read here, there are some things to sort out. I'll check back in a couple of updates. Good luck dev.

 

[Look-see]

so some of the issues i had seemed to have been changed. moms and sisters dialogue for one.

for now i'll keep an eye on the game.

the Scene where Mc finishes on himself still a mood killer though. i'd honestly prefer the dream scene to be avoidable just so we can avoid that scene.

one major thing im worried about is the Mc's appearance. the whole "MC is a Loser" thing could've been done without making him fat/ugly. in my experience his appearance alone will drive away most players. generally the few times i've seen games start off with an ugly MC alot of players wont wait for his workout transition for him to get hot.

the story is interesting with the drama and such. not like i'm a vanilla player. if MC can do some bad stuff i'm all for it. so in that regard the game has my intention. buy yeah how long is MC expected to stay looking like that?

 

[SenseiDaimon]

so some of the issues i had seemed to have been changed. moms and sisters dialogue for one.

for now i'll keep an eye on the game.

the Scene where Mc finishes on himself still a mood killer though. i'd honestly prefer the dream scene to be avoidable just so we can avoid that scene.

one major thing im worried about is the Mc's appearance. the whole "MC is a Loser" thing could've been done without making him fat/ugly. in my experience his appearance alone will drive away most players. generally the few times i've seen games start off with an ugly MC alot of players wont wait for his workout transition for him to get hot.

the story is interesting with the drama and such. not like i'm a vanilla player. if MC can do some bad stuff i'm all for it. so in that regard the game has my intention. buy yeah how long is MC expected to stay looking like that?

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[loikl]

If it's any consolation, she's been working at the club for two days, and no one has fucked her like a prostitute, she's only been performing on stage. I didn't originally conceive of her as a love interest at all, and I'm not sure what will happen to her at all. Originally the game was supposed to be without a prologue at all, and I certainly wasn't going to add NTR here. I'm just walking that line to maintain some sort of dislike and a sense that something bad might happen.

I see, if you allow me I will give you some advice, continue with the plan you have and ignore the comments that appear here, many very good games end up in nothing because they end up becoming fanservice because the dev just wanted to change things to please people without more.

It looks good and I understand the "motivation" part for the MC to do something (save his mother) looks good, and the ironic thing is that I think the game is going to be about something completely different from this "debt of the mother" XD

Good luck.

 

[Drunkendeathknight]

Lurking In My Destiny [Prologue Part 1 Fix1] Unofficial Android Port

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[BillyBat12]

If it's any consolation, she's been working at the club for two days, and no one has fucked her like a prostitute, she's only been performing on stage. I didn't originally conceive of her as a love interest at all, and I'm not sure what will happen to her at all. Originally the game was supposed to be without a prologue at all, and I certainly wasn't going to add NTR here. I'm just walking that line to maintain some sort of dislike and a sense that something bad might happen.

I like it so far, no real complaints. And feedback/criticism can be good but just remember you can't make everyone happy and ultimately its you're game and vision so you should do what you want with the story. A lot of people seem to have issue with the Mom in one way or another, but she can just be the hot mom you care about and not be a LI if that's what you want. And while I personally don't want anything to happen to her, I'm fine if it does. But if something bad does happen to her, I just hope we are able to get equal or greater retribution. Anyway, its good so far and I'm looking forward to more.

 

[Tatsuya25]

game will be unremarkable and unexplainable plot? yea yeah

 

[roguerats27]

Intro music... I'm here to bust a nut, not to bust a move

 

[Kionashi]

I just got to play this game, I have a few comments.

Having a fat MC and giving him opportunities to have sex was a bold move, I liked it!, not because Im into fat guys, but because I kinda dislike the tired power fantasy trope of presenting a "loser fat MC" that can't get a girl to save his life until he magically becomes fit and all the bitches fall for him, I mean, fat people can get laid, and there are already a few girls falling for him not because he is handsome, but because his actions and personality. He decided to help the prostitute, he decided to stand up and fight the bully and show her classmate his worth, he is a pretty cool guy even while overweight I like that because is rare to see that kind of things in this games, even though him becoming handsome seems to be inevitable . It would be nice if the change happens by his own actions and not by just some dumb magic.

The MC strikes a little bit as a psycho, molesting his sister while she sleeps is a creepy thing to do, I believe it should be optional even if it doesn't affect his karma or whatever.

I actually don't mind the dream sex scene, after all is a good vehicle to deliver sex scenes even if there is no time in the plot to be having sex. (Even though the whole virgin thing is lame and gross)

I don't get why the MC is so overprotective of his mother, I mean, I know she is the only one that treats him with care, but at least throw us a hint that she doesn't like working as an escort before making us follow her and trying to get her out of there. Also I don't like the double standard of the MC internal thoughts on her mother working there, I mean in one hand he doesn't seems to mind using escorts himself, but he also thinks is shameful for her mother to be working there?, it is shameful or it is not? her mother had sound arguments and I think is pretty brave to be willing to do sex work in order to provide for her children the MC needs to cool off and understand that her mother is a fucking adult and can make her own decisions because right now it sounds like a dumb shonen protagonist. But if you reaaaaaaaly want us to "rescue the mother" at least it should be evident she doesn't like working there but somehow is "trapped" before jumping to the conclusion that she needs to be rescued.

The trans girl is cool, just one suggestion, is not the biggest deal, but I think it would be nice if you didn't use the word "tranny" it can be offensive for some people and the MC already used the word trans which is quite better, so why not just stick to it and call it "trans content on/off" instead of "trannies on/off" ?

The friend is quite entertaining, I hope to see more of him.

I know as a straight guy I don't want to see no fucking dick on a woman but if you ask that it seems you are attacked and condemned so be it! Is it damn well avoidable because I am hetero and seeing a dick on a woman is disgusting as a hetero person!

So is it avoidable or not?

Except for the futa/trans it really looks like it maybe a good game and a strange one on top of that.

Lol, sure dude, don't worry we totally believe you, you are super hetero

 

[DeathzTheAwesome]

Good game i enjoyed it personally can't wait to see where it goes in future updates and hopefully u don't stop on it ... it makes me sad how many games end up getting abandoned and i hope this one doesn't come to that.

 

[luxxord]

I hope there will be a proper explanation as to why MC's sister is into him. It is quite jarring when MC describes his sister as being cold towards him and having a boyfriend but then our first introduction to her character she is all tsundere. Is she a cheater and MC is just a toy or is it something else? I enjoyed the game otherwise and look forward to the next update.