- Mar 21, 2018
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Enjoying the update, a few grammar things though.
You say "Trans" a few times, you mean "Trance"
MC says "Toddles" which should be "Toodles"
You call the obsessive stalker person "Taylor" at one point, when he's trying to punch you outside the party, which is incorrect.
And that's all the bitching I have for you today![Smile :) :)](data:image/gif;base64,R0lGODlhAQABAIAAAAAAAP///yH5BAEAAAAALAAAAAABAAEAAAIBRAA7)
You say "Trans" a few times, you mean "Trance"
MC says "Toddles" which should be "Toodles"
You call the obsessive stalker person "Taylor" at one point, when he's trying to punch you outside the party, which is incorrect.
And that's all the bitching I have for you today