VN RPGM My Girlfriend Fulfills My Netorase Dreams [v0.1] [Fanorase]

[robertgr3y]

yeah, so I really like this suggestion. Doing it in this way would actually fix an issue I would've had further down the line where you would get an option to let the GF go on her own. I'm a big fan of the "minigame" where you have to go around the map looking for a love interest that's doing something in secret. So I was having trouble figuring out how exactly I'd do that. This way would give me a few options. I'm already thinking of some scenarios where such build ups can happen. And it'll make the progression I had in mind make so much more fucking sense LMFAO. Great suggestion.



Yep! I agree. As of right now, I'll keep going with her having unprotected sex with her ex just to finish up what I have in mind. I think it'll hit even harder after considering other options for buildup, where she'll use condoms with everyone else before. (Yuuji's the main story, just in case I'm not beating a dead horse here LOL). It's just what I find hot.

But when I finish that route up, I have an idea of a variable system that'll be decided through dialogue about how scenes will go: where the MC makes all the choices, GF does, or somewhere in between. So in the mid-point where the GF wants to go raw with yuuji, if the player skewed more towards a dominant/confident persona previously, he will get the decision if she can or not. That's a waaaaay down the line thought, though, so I'll stick with what I'm doing for now lmao.



I put out this prologue exactly because I wanted productive critiquing so I'm glad to hear it.

Overall big agree. I've been writing stories since I was a kid, and my biggest problem even 'til now is making the small meaningful moments in between the climactic ones. So... Guess that's something I can work on here for once lol. But rewriting something like this should be easy (fingers crossed). Finishing up this prologue took, I dunno, a couple months? Most of that time was spent learning how the fuck to do anything basically LOL. (I didn't know how event movement worked until two weeks ago, and efficient in-game images until last week).

You make a real good point on that last part. Definitely gonna keep that in mind.

Thanks y'all for the comments! It's definitely helped broaden my horizon on how to make this better.

The plan right now is to continue what I originally had in mind, while trying to have much, much better pacing, player agency, and flow in order to make the GF's sluttiness feel more earned.

Here's a rough sneak peek of an idea I have for a first event after the confession.

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I realy like long stories, and when it comes all together. what about kinks? sex toys in school? bod mods (piercing, tattoos)?

 

[lazyboldandfat]

I wish there were pauses in the story where I could save the game and continue later.

Will there be more slutty, gangbangy routes for the girl to take in future? She was quite roaring to go full send into that sort of direction, wanting everyone to creampie her immediately was pretty hardcore (and fun) after all.

Like they planned that she'd sometimes go off on her own and just tell him later kind of thing, she could go on to explore her wilder side with many different men, all over town and countryside even maybe.

Spoiler: spitballing

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[jackbob24]

Some people didn't like the condom thing very much. Others did like it but explained it as a power dynamic with Kanade holding the power. A power dynamic miiiight be a part of it, I have no clue really, but here is my explanation as to how I think Kanade's actual reasoning goes which is actually really sweet.

You know how some food, while quite tasty, you don't really care about so you sometimes just down it quickly so you can feel satiated? Maybe you're running late on your lunch break and you need to eat fast to be on time. But some food is different. Those select few or single favorite food item? You'd hate to rush it. If you don't have time for it you put it in the fridge until you do have time. Because you want to savor every single bite and sensation. You want to fully finish tasting one section of the food before moving on to the even better tasting other sections. That's kinda like her boyfriend to her.

There's also the special connection she feels. The emotional connection and infatuation you can only feel with the one person you are totally and hopelessly in love with. Maybe even someone you've known your whole life? The pleasure of a raw dick is great and all especially if it's a big and fat one, but ultimately she just doesn't put much value on who takes her first rawdogging or creampie. She doesn't care about other dicks that aren't her boyfriend's beyond the physical pleasure they give her. She considers her boyfriend's feelings of course and she knows the importance society attributes to it, but to HER it isn't a significant event.

But the idea of finally becoming one in heart and flesh? With the person she loves more than anything in the whole world? Not even hindered by the separation provided by the flimsy material that is a condom. Quite frankly the closest you can ever be with your soulmate? It must seem absolutely mind blowing to her. Like, once she has had a taste of that she would fall even deeper in love with MC. That's why she wants to savor the feeling of this stage in their relationship, basically when they're still dating and everything's relatively casual, perhaps not even that different from their friendship before. Or maybe it's just the sheer state of arousal and love she knows she'd feel in that instance that she just straight up needs to prepare her heart for.

Basically like if I had the opportunity to make out with a random hot model, I probably would. But it's just not the same as finally getting to kiss your (high school) crush.

idk
(but I absolutely love this character)

 

[Rastafoo]

Starting out with hardcore cuckolding creampie sex with an ex was a bold move.
It caught everyone's attention. But will the developer be able to write well enough to keep people interested?

 

[GiGiGus ニクヤセベ!]

You know what, AI art in this VN is surprisingly ok-made, consistnent and pleasing to view. The writing is not braindead too. The main feature of this game is that there a literally less than ten games that use/explore netorase with elements like "I do/did it for him, but not for you", power dynamics and all this. But, while the first part of the game was well-made, albeit fast-paced (bonus points for creampie), the other part with Ford factory scale sluttification is a real downer. Like... Just... No. She can have the best of the best! Why fuck with some losers? You know what I mean?

I wish it was less fast-paced, no sluttification (like, really, that half/fake prude image is hot) and maybe add elements like why the love each other, many games lack that aspect. Maybe other secrets with her ex. Or more specials for him, like deepthroat, anal and so on. Otherwise, we will watch your career with great interest.

Also... WHAT ABOUT "THAT" THING?

 

[LaudeMonk]

This one has a lot of potential for sure. As others have already said a million times, the lack of build up and instant corruption is the big downside here.

Other than that... honestly, after having beaten it earlier and stewing in my thoughts... I'm really looking forward to more.

Some people didn't like the condom thing very much. Others did like it but explained it as a power dynamic with Kanade holding the power. A power dynamic miiiight be a part of it, I have no clue really, but here is my explanation as to how I think Kanade's actual reasoning goes which is actually really sweet.

You know how some food, while quite tasty, you don't really care about so you sometimes just down it quickly so you can feel satiated? Maybe you're running late on your lunch break and you need to eat fast to be on time. But some food is different. Those select few or single favorite food item? You'd hate to rush it. If you don't have time for it you put it in the fridge until you do have time. Because you want to savor every single bite and sensation. You want to fully finish tasting one section of the food before moving on to the even better tasting other sections. That's kinda like her boyfriend to her.

There's also the special connection she feels. The emotional connection and infatuation you can only feel with the one person you are totally and hopelessly in love with. Maybe even someone you've known your whole life? The pleasure of a raw dick is great and all especially if it's a big and fat one, but ultimately she just doesn't put much value on who takes her first rawdogging or creampie. She doesn't care about other dicks that aren't her boyfriend's beyond the physical pleasure they give her. She considers her boyfriend's feelings of course and she knows the importance society attributes to it, but to HER it isn't a significant event.

But the idea of finally becoming one in heart and flesh? With the person she loves more than anything in the whole world? Not even hindered by the separation provided by the flimsy material that is a condom. Quite frankly the closest you can ever be with your soulmate? It must seem absolutely mind blowing to her. Like, once she has had a taste of that she would fall even deeper in love with MC. That's why she wants to savor the feeling of this stage in their relationship, basically when they're still dating and everything's relatively casual, perhaps not even that different from their friendship before. Or maybe it's just the sheer state of arousal and love she knows she'd feel in that instance that she just straight up needs to prepare her heart for.

Basically like if I had the opportunity to make out with a random hot model, I probably would. But it's just not the same as finally getting to kiss your (high school) crush.

idk
(but I absolutely love this character)

At first, I did hate that she just easily lets another guy rawdog and creampie her, after her whole speech to MC that she wants to save their first raw penetration for a special occasion that she isn't ready for. But I totally get what you're saying. With anyone else it doesn't matter and doesn't give her the same feeling. But with MC, it's special, and she wants to savor it as much as possible. I'm on board with this now.

I love love LOVE how much MC and Kanade adore and love each other. That's a big thing I enjoy in Netorase, when the couple clearly show how much they love each other, and the kink is all about the love. I also really love that MC isn't useless here and sex between him and Kanade is actually really good, and he can make her cum multiple times, especially after the reclamation sex when they get home near the end.

So, yeah, to Fanorase, my only issue is the neckbreaking speed of the build up to instant sluttification. Work on that and slow it down some, and this could be a banger Netorase game that we so sorely need.

 

[Mrnewb]

well i left a comment back then, But the more i play the game the more i start thinking of certain issues tho,
Firstly i want to say that the game and story telling is really great but some points not so good...
As other people have said, The point where the female mc goes raw instantly and all slutty feels to rushed...
As some and me as well, I feel like their should be a build up before she accepts doing it raw and then starting go full slut,
I have a few opinions tho, I think that going with the EX BF was a good idea but i think you should make a build up before the MC spectates them, For example he should let her contact her ex and sleep privately and later on she reports what they have done, leaving up to ones imagination on what her report entails, and one of these reports she comments on how they did it raw but it ends with no creampie until the MC hides somewhere to spy on them which the FMC would later get creampied.

2nd thought: Their should be choice of people who the MC would want her to sleep with, Like your typical Neterose hentai games, For example could be another friend, or the janitor, Principal, Black transfer student, Homeless guy, neighbor, boss from the part time job, The bully, You get the point.

Overall the game has potential, it's the road you wish to take.
Tho i wish you goodluck and I look forward In seeing how you flesh out the game in the later future and I wish you goodluck

 

[GV10]

when the rls of new update?

 

[daylanjr33]

I don't know why the pain is so intense even though I'm a netorare lover

 

[hendrixx77]

wow this game has a ton of potential i really like the way Kanade and Mc interact with each other and show they have complete faith and love for one another.

however maybe i sound like an echo chamber now with the other comments at this point but i feel like she just goes insta slut mode way too fast. Also the whole making mc wear a condom cause she wants it to be "special" but then goes straight into letting her ex bf and others go raw and creampie her without a care doesn't make any sense to me.

IMO when the game releases fully it will be way hotter if she keeps the condom rule for everyone But the ex bf (secretly) since she clearly feels at least something for him. maybe a scenario where she tells the mc she makes everyone wear a condom but then he spys on her and ex bf only to see them going raw and her letting him end it with a creampie. it would really hammer in the fact she could get completely taken from mc because of his fetish.

 

[Oscar Granja]

Check

 

[Enlight432]

Fuck, the writing of this game is amazing, the dialogues here were very, very great and high tension

 

[SolarEclipsed]

I quite enjoyed the prologue, but as others said it ran faster than it should.

Some ideas set some rules, including a x amount of fucks rules, so Yuuji has only so many left (guessing he is the main antagonist)
determine who is the dom and sub, as the GF is trying to please your kink it would make sense for the MC to be the dom so she can't do XYZ without permission including use of condoms.
Are you going to have her stolen away (multiple endings) or are you going to have a happily ever after? If so maybe determine that she uses condoms until she is ready for the MC. In this situation it makes sense if he is the first to cum in her as she wants him to be the first for most things.

 

[Enlight432]

This game is a gem, I really enjoyed it

1: we can give it a score of 5 out of 5 only because of its writing, its writing is so strong, it means that you can enjoy every dialogue very much! It does not contain extra dialogue at all, it does not contain weak dialogue at all, every dialogue has been worked on, every dialogue is either full of love or full of feelings related to sharing

2: This game has a strong point that I have not experienced until now, even though it is an NTS game, this game also induces feelings related to the NTR tag! I mean the feelings of jealousy and fear etc, this is great because I never want to see NTR in this game, I never want to see drama between this very cute couple

3: FMC's appearance and personality are extremely great, that means I officially fell in love with this girl, she drives me crazy every moment

4: The relationship between MC and FMC is very deep, and this is very, very great. The romance is very great. Strong romance is rarely seen in the Adult Game, and the stronger the romance, the more enjoyable NTS is

5: The story of the game is excellent, it is relationship-oriented, there is a lot of tension, we are not on the side of simple and boring relationships

and Etc

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I hope we will never see NTR or its path will be separated from NTS, so I have no problem with NTR, the separation of this lovely couple is definitely not enjoyable.

A wish:
I hope that many choices will be added to the game, for example, a choice that leads to the continuation of fmc's sexual event with another, and a choice that prevents fmc from continuing, in this way, more weight is given to mc, which means that mc does not become a loser, for example, when fmc sex with another choose whether the mc wants to witness NTR's dialogues or not, when the first option is selected, the mc and the player will no longer feel like losers,i just want there to always be the fact that MC is in control, it doesn't matter when it comes to sex, I mean whether or not it happens, two choices, in the first one, the mc accepts, in the second one, he does not accept, after he accepts, if the mc has no control over that sexual event, there is no problem, it is even great!

Most importantly, I hope that this amazing couple never gets upset with each other or that something bad happens to them

Amazing Game

 

[melantha]

10/10 so far, considering its in early stage. keep up the good work!

while I do have feedback, I feel like most people already said this in previous posts, but I don't have time to read pages right now, so I'll just point them out

• would have preferred if the scene where she adjusts her uniform, and they do open relationship to the whole class is at the rear end of the story. still depends on how you implement the classmates, if it's just recurring thing, or each one has a different "kick". it's not like she became a cumdump right there, and she did say one person a day, so I'll understand if it's not in the late game. but i feel "sex with anyone" is towards the end - and we should first do selective/limited sharing first.
• I'd like her to go through less extreme things first. day 1 with yuuji raw sex, although very hot and should still happen, I feel like we can open up our desires more before this. e.g. doing some exhibistionism stuff, and lots of teasing at first. this way, when it happens, it will have bigger kick than current scene, imagine that.
• smh I felt that thing about dating yuuji was out of nowhere. it pretty much felt like she was making it up just because now she knows about your fetish. maybe a hint before you reveal your fetish to her, maybe you guys pass by yuuji and she looks uneasy or something similar effect. very simple, but reinforces that things happened beforehand, not caused by your fetish revelation. something protag can be worried and fantasize about, maybe the thoughts that actually lead you to the revelation.
• one time with yuuji is good, the second one is fine, but I feel like we should not make him a recurring character after this. to me, more people that's less intimate > less people that's more intimate. I do feel she is still most intimate when with mc even while already doing NTRS (good work with this), I wouldn't want her to be more intimate with yuuji after this.
• more discreet exposure. while similar to the first point, this one focuses on her exposure. while her uniform adjustment wasn't that too extreme (or maybe it is?), I feel like she can do this gradually rather than immediate one day she comes to school like that. more of those accidental flashing, or when she's aware, discreetly teasing everyone, maybe some skirt lifts here and there, PE uniforms in gym class, swimsuit in swimming class, etc. more "innocent" but revealing stuff first. make the classmates crave more skin before doing the slut look.

I probably have more feedback, but would have to sleep for now. will cheer on you dev

I understand many of this is pacing stuff, and pretty much shouldn't apply to early development game. but I'd still like to express that as you progress development, what we have here right now should be spread throughout the story. i'd like more things to be added in between the scenes we have now, not just after it. basically, asking for a slowburn.

not sure if anyone linked this before but this game reminds me alot of Blurring the Walls, which is also NTRS and pretty much same plot - couple is partner in crime with sharing the girl, but in the end sticking together through it all.

 

[Rastafoo]

Strongly disagree with the two latest posts but if it brings in the Patreon bucks its worth doing. I mean Blurring the Walls got 300 Patrons off that strategy so it may be effective, even if the ultimate end product is forgettable.

 

[Enlight432]

Nice. I was too focused on actually making the thing work without thinking about the pacing. For now, at least, I wanted to get a demo out to see what people think of it so far. You all have very valid critiques and suggestions, so this is very good feedback. A method I can think of is to just make the last half of the prologue the mid-point of the game, and make it more buildup/teasing in the first half. And you're all right, the no condom sex is the end game, but if I change it as y'all are suggesting here, I can definitely think of other options. Thanks for the comments.

And I do plan on having the MC get involved more. Not only with the threesomes/gangbangs, but also just general dates and getting to know their dynamic more in the middle of the game.

I already said that I enjoyed this game a lot, and it is one of my favorite top games, but I also agree with this person's comment
if it is reworked a little, this game will be much better than it is now
for example, I really hope that the first have raw sex with mc, have the first creampie and anal ana dp with mc ,I mean, little feelings from Netorare is not a problem, but this game is supposed to be a Netrorase game, now some secret between fmc and yuuji she didn't tell MC, I'm afraid these secrets contain anal sex and dp! It means that Yuuji experienced all the things first and then handed them over to MC, In these cases, I felt the emotions associated with Hard NTR, which were heartbreaking
I hope these things will be reworked
Again, this game is a diamond

 

[mrvyrin]

hey fanorase are you planning on making a patreon? love it so far

 

[okarin27]

Does the game has an official page, like the ones in ithc.io, so we can accompany the development of game?

 

[GV10]

any news for new update?