Raziel_8

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Dec 4, 2017
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Well, it's bad.
We have a MC which looks like he hasn't finished puberty, has a very punchable face and his personality just intensivies the desire to punch him.
For some reason this kid is supposed to be a military veteran, really i don't get why even trying that...
The MC looks like a 15 year old kid, personality is somewhere between a creep and a complete asshole (so standart trope for a shota looking 'college kid' who creeps on his family and all others), the military aspect just doesn't make any sense here.

The sandbox is bad.
No quest log, no hints, not much content, even the lockpicking minigame is bad (and it's the same as Skyrim has, a game which is over a decade old...just bad implemented here), also no status screens for the girls or the MC and no information if you have seen all the current content.

For the girls, really not much to say here. The black girl and the fathers gf are pretty much insta sluts without anything to add.
The family also seems to follow the classic formula, bitchy older 'sister', innocent younger one and a divored mom.
Althought the family relation is a bit nonsensical...
There is the lil sis (real sister), she and the MC got adopted together.
Then you have the divorce foster mother (for some reason not a adoptive one) and her daughter, the bitchy step sister (where the 'step' comes from, i don't know).
Personality wise that's pretty much all there is to say about them, barely any screentime or dialogue with any of them.

And the typical approach of this kid MC is like this.
Comes to his dad, jerks off on his father fucking his gf...
Comes home to his mom after years of ''military service'', sees his innocent little sis doing loundry, so first thing pulling her pants down and commenting how he's making nice progress with her...
 
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Trojaner

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Apr 4, 2018
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Wasn't worth downloading ... The thing i learned pretty fast that this is for sure nothing for me. But good Luck with this Project. Never understood how People like this sort of Bad-Style VN's.
 

CamaroFan432

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Mar 13, 2020
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Yeah I know my "Engrish" is bad, it's not my native language. But at least I create a visual novel to entertain people, I'm not like you, writing "critical novels" like a frustrated!
If you don't like it play other games, sorry but I didn't force you to play it and I didn't make you pay for it!
Well, see this as critic for points, where you need to improve yourself and your game. Without negative critic you can't improve. Getting already defensive this early on, well, let's put it like this: this could probably follow the same path, that your last game went.
 

EvolutionKills

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Jan 3, 2021
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Yeah I know my "Engrish" is bad, it's not my native language. But at least I create a visual novel to entertain people, I'm not like you, writing "critical novels" like a frustrated!
If you don't like it play other games, sorry but I didn't force you to play it and I didn't make you pay for it!
Here's the thing. You have every right to create poorly written games in a non-native language, just as I do. But I also have the right to comment about how it is poorly written, just as you do. However critique is not limited to just those who create. We don't limit movie reviews to just film makers, or game reviews to just game developers. That's insane, and supremely ignorant.

Yeah, you made something and you put yourself out there. If you don't want to be criticized for not being good at it, either get better, or go do something else. I'm not obliged to give you a free pass just because you made something. Also, there is no way in hell I'd ever pay for anything of that quality, visual novel or otherwise; refunds and charge backs are a thing.

Writing that critique was my way of recuperating some form of enjoyment from the experience of playing your game, because the act of playing it wasn't enjoyable in and of itself.
 
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Midnight Ghost

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Dec 9, 2020
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Not much content. There's sleep stuff which honestly isn't much or appealing.
The sandbox doesn't have much, there isn't a quest or hint system so you'll have to wander around through the day looking for whatever events to do, this is what usually kills sandbox mode and why people usually hate them.
 

El Tanque

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Game Developer
Jul 29, 2017
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Yeah I know my "Engrish" is bad, it's not my native language. But at least I create a visual novel to entertain people, I'm not like you, writing "critical novels" like a frustrated!
If you don't like it play other games, sorry but I didn't force you to play it and I didn't make you pay for it!
I agree with a lot of what he said, and I do make a game, if you want to lock yourself in "Everything I do is perfect" then that's up to you. I have learned to take the good as motivation to keep making my game, and the bad as a way to see where I can improve. Obviously not everything they tell you you have to take it.

But in this case, almost everything he said, are things that I also thought when I played your game, and on the other hand, his criticism of your level of English was not even remotely the most relevant of all the criticisms he made. :ROFLMAO: He's more focused on the senselessness of the game, in the relationships; In the ease of some girls (sluts), in the stereotypes of the characters and in the absurd way in which the mc behaves and acts.

Obviously it's your game, do what you want with it, but I think you can always learn from any criticism, take what you can use to improve, discard the rest, just don't take it so much to heart.;)
 
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The ArcKnight

Nylon enthusiast, Harem enjoyer.
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I closed the game the second you were forced to watch your "Foster" dad fuck a girl and masterbate to it and then flash forward to an Older MC cackling on how he's going to fuck her. Nope, nope, nope. I thought the MC was a military guy, not some pervy creep peeping on people and trying to fuck his dad's gf? Hearing there is a shitty sandbox right after only vindicates that decision for me.
 

chaucerguy

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Dec 5, 2018
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I'm so fed up with the negative comments here. It's a FIRST RELEASE, and you're critiquing it as if it had been out for a few years. Of course there's little content at this point. But the art is actually pretty good, the gameplay is decent, and it seems promising for those who enjoy a little incest hentai. I think this is the most interesting NEW incest game I've seen hit the hentai game boards for the last month. My congratulations to the developer, whom I hope will ignore the idiot critics and continue to develop his game for those who can appreciate what he's trying to do.
 
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Beaupere

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Mar 7, 2019
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So the "dev" is called out for is BS, he do not respond to any constructive critics, cherry pick the few "good" comments and vow to ignore anything else ... I'm now invested in this shitshow, this is YandereDev level hilarious !

Ps : Luzy, mec , fait pas honte a tes compatriotes, valide pas ce genre de trucs.
 

Soichy

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Aug 14, 2018
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I'm so fed up with the negative comments here. It's a FIRST RELEASE, and you're critiquing it as if it had been out for a few years. Of course there's little content at this point. But the art is actually pretty good, the gameplay is decent, and it seems promising for those who enjoy a little incest hentai. I think this is the most promising NEW incest game I've seen hit the hentai game boards for the last month. My congratulations to the developer, whom I hope will ignore the idiot critics and continue to develop his game for those who can appreciate what he's trying to do.
Listen to this guy! He waited 4 years in the wings to write this comment! Show respect for his patience!
 

VIGOR GAMES

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Game Developer
Feb 27, 2021
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I just want to express solidarity with the developer and advise him not to take everything to heart. I know from experience how some words can hurt after you have spent a lot of time and effort to do something. But over time, your skin gets thicker and you start to pay less attention to the hate and look only at criticism that can improve your game. Good luck dev!
 

punisher2099

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Feb 25, 2020
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I'm so fed up with the negative comments here. It's a FIRST RELEASE, and you're critiquing it as if it had been out for a few years. Of course there's little content at this point. But the art is actually pretty good, the gameplay is decent, and it seems promising for those who enjoy a little incest hentai. I think this is the most interesting NEW incest game I've seen hit the hentai game boards for the last month. My congratulations to the developer, whom I hope will ignore the idiot critics and continue to develop his game for those who can appreciate what he's trying to do.
Alt account.
 

Havenless_

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Oct 12, 2020
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I agree that many people (including myself) can be a bit harsh with criticism.

While we don't expect a plot written by Scorsese himself, we do expect a halfway decent plot. That's why those of us here 'play' visual novels. If I want something like "Help me stepbrother, I'm stuck in the washing machine" I'd watch porn. It's easy to look up any video and I can fast forward to the part where there's sex.

This game brings together many, many things that have been repeated ad nauseam. Shota-like pervy rapey creep MC, returning home after many years for whatever reason, older sister hates you just because, younger sister is super innocent, divorced mother, poorly implemented sanbox... And to that you add that we see the father fucking his girlfriend and even worse, the MC masturbates to that... Not much motivation to play this game. It's very frustrating to see the same game over and over again.

That said, there's nothing wrong if you want to make this type of game. Do what you want, by all means. But you have to keep in mind that it takes something else to attract a large audience. Like I said, these kinds of games have been seen many, many, many times.

A vanilla player is not going to play a game where the MC is a fucking perverted kid. And I highly doubt a more kinky player is going to take the time to infinitely click around a map without knowing what to do just to fingerfuck a girl in her sleep or spy on her while she takes a shower.
 

Revan Shan

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Game Developer
Aug 5, 2017
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Here's a quick tip, if you plan on making it a sandbox game include a quest/hint system. It helps the player find content while not wasting their time just clicking to find them randomly.
 
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