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Great advice and thanks for the feedback!
What I'm considering is smaller, but more frequent updates. For example, the next update will be small: the conclusion of the "Gifted Tease" Day 1 thread. The update after that could be a big one--Day 2 for all three personalities--but that would take awhile. Alternatively, the update could also be Day 2 for just the "Innocent Angel" threads, for example. That shouldn't take as long.
Right now I'm leaning toward the latter update strategy--smaller, more frequent. But I might be convinced to change if good arguments exist.
. Hopefully I'll be able to put enough content in the game that you like to keep players like you following.
Definitely. I still have much to learn, both in DAZ, Renpy, and general VN storytelling.
That's a solid point. I hope to make the decisions difficult, and their ramifications intricate. It's a fantasy-world, of course, but if it gets too absurd and sloppy, it'll generate eyerolls instead of the other physiological responses I'm hoping for.
Yeah, I hear you. If you look at the plans I've detailed in an above post, you'll see that this thing is going to be expansive and the multiple threads won't intersect very much. This will indeed be more time-consuming.
What I'm considering is smaller, but more frequent updates. For example, the next update will be small: the conclusion of the "Gifted Tease" Day 1 thread. The update after that could be a big one--Day 2 for all three personalities--but that would take awhile. Alternatively, the update could also be Day 2 for just the "Innocent Angel" threads, for example. That shouldn't take as long.
Right now I'm leaning toward the latter update strategy--smaller, more frequent. But I might be convinced to change if good arguments exist.
Thanks again for the kind words! And huge thanks for saying that NTR isn't your thing without turning into a frothing, spluttering maniac
. Hopefully I'll be able to put enough content in the game that you like to keep players like you following. "In "My Virgin Bride", you play a troubled young genius"
Quote lifted from the description of the first post. Nothing about your character screams genius. Every idiot move is glossed over and jealousy needs to be mentioned a lot to try to explain stupidity.
So she comes from a traditional family believing to save herself for marriage and tells you all about how she took it seriously in the story laid down. Yet now has no problem marrying you and disbanding that for the green card and you are supposed to be a genius......
O and she is going to some creeper church as part of her traditional background also and her shear respect for marriage ??
Story is a shambles and everything is just fobbed away. Here in lies the problem I see time and again in these games when the ground work for a decent story with depth is not there. When you try to be a game for everything. Sadly usually one route seeps into the others or hints of its existence, because you need to lay the groundwork for the other routes and lead to the choices so they are inter woven into it.
Poor choice of music, scripting for story and never a need to explain anything in detail, why something is happening, or why even when you select certain answers your MC is acting like an idiot or saying things a creeper would say or an idiot, the story just jams it in there until it fits.
I will give an early game example, so this is early game, so no need to cover it up, as you will run into it fast. The whole park scene, no matter what you are looking for out of that scene, it is poorly structured. You choose vanilla and MC character stands there like an idiot letting some old dude grope the wife and talk about a seminar to take her on and she even suggests you don't need to go. Also, your character says you are getting aroused, like the level of flawed logic here ...... my god.
Now the genius which is supposedly your MC could simply state as follows, get your hand off my wife. Honey can I talk to you one second dear wife, walk a few steps away and go yea this is not the marriage I thought we would have, you can go with them and when you return your bags will be outside the door and the divorce papers will be on the way. All you have to say then is drop a hint to the authorities she must of been using you for the green card. Now this asserts dominance and clearly asserts what you want out of the marriage to your wife. That is called a different clear path as she will choose to stay with you and then that is called a route to work on based on some logic. Not for your character to stand there watching your wife get groped and just mumble you will go on the retreat.
All in all further backing up my point what happens when lazy story telling comes into play and you muddy the waters jamming all the routes into one path, they start to blur and you see traces of ntr on a vanilla path. Just poorly worked and lazy. The scene after this with the "wife" chat at home and I could break it down very easily why it is devoid of logic and stupid things happen in that conversation because it needs to happen. Also, I don't want to spoil too much making points. I believe I have said enough.
I didn't enjoy it as the story does not ring true and things happen because they need to happen no matter how flawed the foundation it is built on. The foundations need to be built to support what you are really trying to aim for.
Quote lifted from the description of the first post. Nothing about your character screams genius. Every idiot move is glossed over and jealousy needs to be mentioned a lot to try to explain stupidity.
So she comes from a traditional family believing to save herself for marriage and tells you all about how she took it seriously in the story laid down. Yet now has no problem marrying you and disbanding that for the green card and you are supposed to be a genius......
O and she is going to some creeper church as part of her traditional background also and her shear respect for marriage ??
Story is a shambles and everything is just fobbed away. Here in lies the problem I see time and again in these games when the ground work for a decent story with depth is not there. When you try to be a game for everything. Sadly usually one route seeps into the others or hints of its existence, because you need to lay the groundwork for the other routes and lead to the choices so they are inter woven into it.
Poor choice of music, scripting for story and never a need to explain anything in detail, why something is happening, or why even when you select certain answers your MC is acting like an idiot or saying things a creeper would say or an idiot, the story just jams it in there until it fits.
I will give an early game example, so this is early game, so no need to cover it up, as you will run into it fast. The whole park scene, no matter what you are looking for out of that scene, it is poorly structured. You choose vanilla and MC character stands there like an idiot letting some old dude grope the wife and talk about a seminar to take her on and she even suggests you don't need to go. Also, your character says you are getting aroused, like the level of flawed logic here ...... my god.
Now the genius which is supposedly your MC could simply state as follows, get your hand off my wife. Honey can I talk to you one second dear wife, walk a few steps away and go yea this is not the marriage I thought we would have, you can go with them and when you return your bags will be outside the door and the divorce papers will be on the way. All you have to say then is drop a hint to the authorities she must of been using you for the green card. Now this asserts dominance and clearly asserts what you want out of the marriage to your wife. That is called a different clear path as she will choose to stay with you and then that is called a route to work on based on some logic. Not for your character to stand there watching your wife get groped and just mumble you will go on the retreat.
All in all further backing up my point what happens when lazy story telling comes into play and you muddy the waters jamming all the routes into one path, they start to blur and you see traces of ntr on a vanilla path. Just poorly worked and lazy. The scene after this with the "wife" chat at home and I could break it down very easily why it is devoid of logic and stupid things happen in that conversation because it needs to happen. Also, I don't want to spoil too much making points. I believe I have said enough.
I didn't enjoy it as the story does not ring true and things happen because they need to happen no matter how flawed the foundation it is built on. The foundations need to be built to support what you are really trying to aim for.
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I'm trying to fix the tags, but I don't know how... I also want to add a "virgin" tag.
Hmmm....
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Don't know why this game has a romance tag when every option forces you to watch other dudes lay their hands on your fiancee.
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Thanks for checking it out!Holy crap you finally pushed out, we at 0.7 already ? jesus. Anyways downloading now and giving it a go and also props on a good and unique name
And it's actually 0.07... got a looooooooong way to go!
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Can report the OP saying/explaining it's missing tags, though might help more if you get the 'Game Developer' title.I'm trying to fix the tags, but I don't know how... I also want to add a "virgin" tag.
Hmmm....
Great! Man, we've been waiting so long for this...Hope more update coming soon.
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This is an amazing start. Interesting and original setting (well done!). Already different storylines to choose from. Though visually not bad at all (I like the different ways my wife dresses) there's room for improvement. Looking forward to how this all will unfold.
Good job Sukebe_Sensei
Good job Sukebe_Sensei
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This is an interesting start ... but I wonder if the dev might be stretching themselves a little thin with the 3 personalities as they're basically 3 entirely independent storylines (each I presume with multiple variations), and maybe it'd be better to get one finished and then work on a second and third...
But I'll give it another whirl if/when I see a bunch more content has been added.
But I'll give it another whirl if/when I see a bunch more content has been added.
Good start, like your story and writing more than 3diddly nonsense storytelling
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Not a stupid question. Clearly, NTR will be a big theme of the game. I like the conflicting energy that is brought about by jealousy and voyeurism. I've noticed some games have big flashing lights that clearly-marked decision points carry NTR ramifications. Some games even have a switch on at the beginning to turn off NTR for the duration of the game.
I'm not planning on doing anything like that. I realize that will make lots of people angry, and it will make many others never try the game. I'm OK with that. I wish those souls best of luck in finding games better suited to their unique kinks.
Just like in real life, NTR is never 100% avoidable. That said, I'm not interested in torturing the MC down every narrative path. If he plays his cards right, he's gonna get some action with his lovely bride.
BUT there will be prices to pay, and the road won't be easy. Thanks for the question!
Thanks for the answer!
It's just that some games make it seem that the NTR could be avoidable in the beginning, but after a couple of updates it turns out it's simply not. (Pandora's Box being a "good" example of that).
That will upset people.
As I see it, the NTR can be initiated by the wife, but then she must be really dissatisfied and/or have no moral compass.
Or it can be initiated by another man (e.g. rape) but then the MC must be strong or smart enough to prevent it.
These things are more or less easy enough to spot and avoid, in a choice-based game.
If you are genuinely nice and caring for your wife, she should not have a reason to cheat.
If you avoid dangerous situations and/or are strong or smart enough to get out of them, you don't need to worry about someone else forcing your wife to do something.
I do like challenges and it doesn't always have to be fully straightforward but if it is not avoidable that the wife will have sex with someone besides the MC, that makes it a different type of game. Besides, if your wife will have sex with another man, you (the MC) likely missed a couple of steps/signals that usually come before the sex.