- Oct 4, 2017
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Damn that is one fugly chick
*Sounds of screaming and tea*Run for your lives .. the native English speakers are coming!
This is an instant classic!
I know what Doctor Who is, but I've never watched this. One day I'll probably have to.Is the phone box an oblique reference to Doctor Who?
Yes thanks, I am going to so later this day.Skidmoria follow this link and make a request to claim the dev tag if you wish to do so and don't forget to update the tags using that list, best of luck !
That's odd, I've tried it myself now and everything is fine here (Windows 10 with Defender).downloaded file from workupload is giving virus alert (both from firefox browser before download & norton & windows defender after download). file from Anon file is okay
As I've written already above, I've decided to do something about the "incessant internal monologues thing". I plan to move some things that would otherwise make the text too long into some kind of info screens that can be called from the main menu or the current screen. Actually, as for the "not horny enough", I've already had an idea for some time, I just don't know when I will include it. I just didn't know whether the way I did the beginning would be liked by most. This will take some time though. Admittedly, for some it might be better to revisit the game at a later time.The title and premise looked so weird I had to try it out. But I was just left bored out of my mind. The start is very weak. Not weird enough, not funny enough, not horny enough. Just a truckload of exposition. There are attempts at jokes but they can't carry all the weight. I gave up right before MC's friend picks him up on the airport.
On hindsight, and I don't know if this was intentional or not, on the very screen you insert MC's name, the game seems to brag it doesn't contain "incessant internal monologues" just to then treat you with one very boring incessant internal monologue. And that was the funniest thing to me.
It was the blue British Police phone box that Dr. Who operates out of which was the only connection I could figure out to explain the old red British public phone box (from the same era) being in the picture.I know what Doctor Who is, but I've never watched this. One day I'll probably have to.
The title image was kind of improvised. In fact, it was the last thing I did before releasing the first version. So the phone box was nothing really thought out. I have another theme in mind that will take some more effort. Something for a future update.It was the blue British Police phone box that Dr. Who operates out of which was the only connection I could figure out to explain the old red British public phone box (from the same era) being in the picture.
I understand. I want to unfold the story into more unexpected territory later. So not just check what native speakers do and say and report back. Admittedly something for the future, this demo was maybe a bit short for it. I value the feedback though. Some things might not work out well and they can be reworked.I feel as if the premise was alright but not interesting enough.
I've already done a first language fix in the second update and everything that will be reported will end up in future updates. The Deingrishing is a very important thing to me. Things like "masterbate", "it's" <-> "its", "affect" <-> effect etc. simply break the immersion for me in other devs' games. I do understand the difficulties for writers as I am not a native speaker myself, but please at least try.Very little Ingrish, commendable indeed. Some laff-out-loud moments, excellent too. That said... no way is the writer a Native Speaker of English. But who cares, this VN's tongue is well into its own cheek and for that, valiant Sir Developer, I salute you!
No worries. It was just a curious observation. Hope your project turns out to be as satisfying and well received as you hope it will be.The title image was kind of improvised. In fact, it was the last thing I did before releasing the first version. So the phone box was nothing really thought out. I have another theme in mind that will take some more effort. Something for a future update.