VN Ren'Py New Year's Day(e) [Ch. 4 v0.4.1] [Jonesy]

[RogueKnightUK]

I wrote the and have continued with New Years Daye. I've removed any step references and added or changed dialogue to make a blood relation between the MC, Eve and Daye explicit.

I've also Incorporated m0us3r's age change function though that likely won't be implemented fully until the next update.

I would suggest you play episode 3 and reconsider.

Pay particular attention to the marriage flashback and the wife's middle name Margaret (sometimes shortened to Molly)... Maybe consider why it was so important to his wife to get married in the park... The one where he had last seen his sister 'Molly' all those years before...

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[cab18+]

Looks like its going to an interesting story...

 

[TomHook]

I would suggest you play episode 3 and reconsider.

Pay particular attention to the marriage flashback and the wife's middle name Margaret (sometimes shortened to Molly)... Maybe consider why it was so important to his wife to get married in the park... The one where he had last seen his sister 'Molly' all those years before...

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I think you and I agree about where Jonesy may be going with this and I have taken it into account.

 

[moondrake]

Well! that took a much darker turn than I was expecting at the end there. What a cliff-hanger to leave us on!

 

[soern234]

well i played until half of day 2 but as there were no choices to stop or change that bullshit, it was clear, its going to end badly.
so its deleted now and i am no more interested inspite grafics were neat.

 

[PirahnaMetroid]

I don't mind the story, though that cliffhanger was pretty messed up, but I feel like this story needs some actual choices. I would have liked to make the choice whether to take the job or not, or anything revolving around other girls, or even whether to cum inside Daye at the end there. It just would make me feel more included/invested in the story.

 

[cebs]

Here's my unofficial android port of New Year's Day(e) v0.3.0
with m0us3r

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[Goliathan]

I don't know, it seems like a lot of people are mad about the ending of chapter 3. It seems like that was maybe sort of the point, but to be mad at Portia's dad, not the dev. And to maybe reevaluate your previous feelings towards Portia. Based on the entire rest of the story, I don't see this game changing into any type of rape fantasy game or anything. I mean, if it was, why did everything happen "off-camera". Obviously he could've rendered that scene in detail if he was into it. Just sayin'. So maybe (maybe) it was just a cliffhanger ending like he's done many times before, but what the hell do I know?

I for one am excited to see how this turns out. I mean, the first time I watched "Star Wars" and they blew up Alderaan, I wasn't like, "OK, this movie sucks now! It's just gonna be nothing but mass murder and genocide from here on out. Screw this movie and the entire series!" All I'm saying is that it's a shitty plot point in a bigger story. One that shows the clear lines between good and evil. UGH! Nevermind. Rant over.

Oh, and for the rest of you complaining about it being a kinetic story and/or it not being tagged that way here, the dev tagged it that way on the original post over on itch, so again, don't be mad at him. Now the rant is really over.

Don't let them get you down, Jonesy. It's a great story and you're doing great. Just remember, you can't make everyone happy.

 

[AgnorWolf]

I don't know, it seems like a lot of people are mad about the ending of chapter 3. It seems like that was maybe sort of the point, but to be mad at Portia's dad, not the dev. And to maybe reevaluate your previous feelings towards Portia. Based on the entire rest of the story, I don't see this game changing into any type of rape fantasy game or anything. I mean, if it was, why did everything happen "off-camera". Obviously he could've rendered that scene in detail if he was into it. Just sayin'. So maybe (maybe) it was just a cliffhanger ending like he's done many times before, but what the hell do I know?

I for one am excited to see how this turns out. I mean, the first time I watched "Star Wars" and they blew up Alderaan, I wasn't like, "OK, this movie sucks now! It's just gonna be nothing but mass murder and genocide from here on out. Screw this movie and the entire series!" All I'm saying is that it's a shitty plot point in a bigger story. One that shows the clear lines between good and evil. UGH! Nevermind. Rant over.

Oh, and for the rest of you complaining about it being a kinetic story and/or it not being tagged that way here, the dev tagged it that way on the original post over on itch, so again, don't be mad at him. Now the rant is really over.

Don't let them get you down, Jonesy. It's a great story and you're doing great. Just remember, you can't make everyone happy.

Did you just compare the death star blowing up a planet in star wars, a movie about an evil tyrannical empire at war with a rebel faction to a bunch of old men gang raping a probably underage girl considering this tape was made in the past. In what fucking planet are star wars and this vn even remotely similar. This game was supposedly a wholesome slice of life game with some lewd incest content and star wars was a space epic about good vs evil, they are not remotely the same thing.

There are ways to tell a story about rape without it being handled in such a piss poor manner as it is here. The only other times ive seen it wrote like this are for games where its a sexual kink and not backstory. The entire scene is tonally deaf and out of place with the entire game and not only is the act described in horrific over the top detail, they aftermath is then rendered so the players can see it. They only people who seem to not be upset also seem to mention that the like "darker content" and are hoping for more of this. I'm prolly gonna drop this one here and pretend the story stopped at Christmas eve.

 

[RogueKnightUK]

I don't know, it seems like a lot of people are mad about the ending of chapter 3.

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I for one am not at all angry, mad, nor even peeved or mildly annoyed.

I may be just a little disappointed at the lazy trope, but not enough to be even vaguely annoyed by it. For me it was just a little too 'convenient'. Like: "Oh look, super powerful people are after our protagonist and for some reason the necessary kryptonite is right there on a camera in his home!"

Let's be real - lazy, overused tropes are a part and parcel of 99.99% of all the games and stories on this site (and elsewhere). The bigger part of that plot are going to be around who was recording the scene, and how it came to be in the possession of the MC's girls.

The vast majority of writers and creators of these indie games (especially in this particular adult VN genre) are not professionally trained, coached, etc. They often tend to use a sledgehammer of a plot device where a gentle poke with a small twig would not only have worked, but been far, far more believable and workable. It is usually a problem in that it pushes them beyond the most basic rule of good writing - write what you know. Suddenly the author is in a position of a thousand unknown traps, where he could lose the audience through unbelievable reactions to the events, not just by the characters created, but by the law, etc. It is a huge risk into a dangerous path that, often, was never needed to simply add some tension to a plot about a small, broken family.

 

[Havik79]

WTF Kays mum looks 12.

 

[Dr.John Bums]

WTF Kays mum looks 12.

Maybe her Body look like a 12 Year old Girl, her Face looks like a that from 6 Year old Child.
She should actually be around 40 years old.
She should look significantly older and her alcohol addiction may have left visible marks on her body.

But at least Stroy is slowly becoming more and more interesting.
However, I'm not finished yet and I'll keep playing for now.

 

[sergesan]

i really hope this doesnt turn into a sick rape story....i´m sorry but the video was too much at the end....i get it´s for the story but that was to long a abusive rape gangbang daughters video at the end....if you continue that way i´m out....dont need in my freetime to see that....and i hope you have a solid solution to a video that could destroy our little family if the wrong people get wind of that...even after half an hour my heartrate is over the top....not even funny anymore...and the crux at this is a little family against the rich and powerfull...yeah wrong door-here is only destruction....AND should you not warn the fans that this becomes a extrem dark turn!? so folks like me with a sensitiv heart dont get depressions from this?!

 

[witzulu]

i really hope this doesnt turn into a sick rape story....i´m sorry but the video was too much at the end....i get it´s for the story but that was to long a abusive rape gangbang daughters video at the end....if you continue that way i´m out....dont need in my freetime to see that....and i hope you have a solid solution to a video that could destroy our little family if the wrong people get wind of that...even after half an hour my heartrate is over the top....not even funny anymore...and the crux at this is a little family against the rich and powerfull...yeah wrong door-here is only destruction....AND should you not warn the fans that this becomes a extrem dark turn!? so folks like me with a sensitiv heart dont get depressions from this?!

I think that explains why the girl is so mean to the mc's family. She sees a loving happy family with a father figure that protect the girls where her father instead did the exact opposite. The fact we did not watch the video(the dev could have shown scenes but protected the reader) and was just givin background notice tells us it is not the idea many seem to think. We should feel sorry for the girl that bullied the girls with the "your real dad" gifts and not be upset if the MC start to welcome her into the group!

 

[girlfairdev]

Liking the game. Hope he keeps the story tight like Christmas Eve.

 

[Zelker69]

i don't normally post, but this face... this face got me
zoned way in and amazedballs of it all. She is not going to notice if Becky (or anyone) walks in

 

[ktemanuel]

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[girlfairdev]

She should look significantly older and her alcohol addiction may have left visible marks on her body.

Asian women do not age the same. Many of them retain youthful faces well into middle age.

 

[Dr.John Bums]

Asian women do not age the same. Many of them retain youthful faces well into middle age.

Alcohol abuse is also likely to leave its mark on an Asian woman.
Even if she looks younger than her actual age, she probably doesn't have the face of a little girl between 6 and 8 years old; most Asian women don't look that young when they're around 40 years old.
They usually have the face of a teenage girl between 14 and 20.

 

[fifo5310]

Siren Song

OK, folks, this is it!

I've been working on this game in one way or another since before I started making "Christmas Eve". This is the story I originally wanted to make when I decided to try creating AVN's, but my skills weren't up to the task, so I started with "Christmas Eve" instead. I'm not saying I'm any sort of "master" at this point by any means, but I'd settle for "adequate" maybe?

OK, so, see that cute girl up there? That is Charlotte Cooper, or "Charlie" for short (all of her names can be changed in-game). She is a fun-loving, impetuous young lady who enjoys sunbathing, posting things to Instacam, and streaming herself playing video games on Switch. She was looking forward to spending her summer basking in the sun on the beach with her two besties, Kim and Sabrina. That was until her mom, Rachel, had to leave to go overseas for work, leaving Charlotte with no one to look after her.

Charlie's impulsiveness has gotten her and her friends into trouble in the past, making it difficult for Rachel to trust her being left home alone for months on end. Charlotte, who will be turning 18 in just a few days would beg to differ.

Enter Bobby (MC), Charlotte's father and Rachel's estranged husband (name can be changed). Bobby is a singer/songwriter. He has been playing music most of his adult life, but has only enjoyed modest success. This way of life has kept him out of the picture for years, causing Charlotte to feel somewhat detached and resentful.

He started out playing guitar in punk rock bands. He toured the country with them a few times, put out a few records, and had a lot of fun, but he really found his true love when he picked up an acoustic guitar and went solo. Over the years he has put out a few albums and toured the world with many other bands. Although he never made it "big", he is considered by some to be one the great influences of folk-rock. Charlotte is oblivious to all of this, so when she is forced to go on tour with Bobby for the summer, she is less than thrilled. The idea of being cooped up in a van with her dad is pretty yucky.

It will be up to Bobby to win back Charlotte's affections and show her how much fun traveling and playing music can be. Lucky for him, Charlotte is a little more like her dad than Rachel realizes.

This story does take place in the "Jonesy" universe, but it takes place 5 or 6 years prior to the events in "

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I hope you enjoy playing chapter 1. PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE give me feedback! I want to know if you all are as excited about this story as I am!

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And, as always, thanks for all your support and interest in my games.

~ Jonesy

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