MrSilverLust is the author, and I am helping out with proofreading and editing.
Due to some production difficulties with chapter 6, I only got access to about 15% of Chapter 6 before release. The remainder is the text-as-written by Mr SilverList. His English is excellent but he is not a native speaker nor a professional writer, so in the raw text there are some parts which can sound a little strange, including parts which might have a few too many interjections.
I'm busily working my way through the full Chapter 6 script file at present and at 61000 words completed, I'm currently about half-way done through the 119000 word total. Generally, MrSL will release a patch update with the edits (and any additional image or coding issue fixes) once this process is complete.
For what it's worth, I agree that in some places the chuckles etc. are a bit too much. Thank you for your feedback and I will add it to my mental list of things for which I will keep an eye out while editing.