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I'm liking the art direction too. However, let's talk about the jawline.
I like the jawlines in these pictures, they're within human bounds.
This jawline looks great too.
This looks odd. The jaw line is too high, outside normal human levels. Still, taking risks is important in art, but I like traditional jawlines ranging from mid mouth and lower, too high seems unnatural.
I LOVE long faces like hers, it's very supermodel, but IMO, in this image, jawline should increase in width by like maybe 12-15%? Still, I like her long face here more than what's in the advertisement. Others will probably disagree and perhaps like the advertisement face more.
Anyway, just my SUBJECTIVE criticism.
One suggestion I can make, that isn't subjective, is to normalize her face (so she always looks like the same person in every drawing), pick one style and roll with it.
But overall this art style is pretty hot, but sometimes there are uncanny valley (outside human levels) that seem off; in regards to body proportion. Don't get me wrong, 2D art is ALL about breaking the rules, I've seen tons of art that go outside of human proportions, yet still manage to have a high erotic impact, which is very difficult to pull off, I wouldn't even know where to begin.
Still, look forward to future updates, nice!
I like the jawlines in these pictures, they're within human bounds.
This jawline looks great too.
This looks odd. The jaw line is too high, outside normal human levels. Still, taking risks is important in art, but I like traditional jawlines ranging from mid mouth and lower, too high seems unnatural.
I LOVE long faces like hers, it's very supermodel, but IMO, in this image, jawline should increase in width by like maybe 12-15%? Still, I like her long face here more than what's in the advertisement. Others will probably disagree and perhaps like the advertisement face more.
Anyway, just my SUBJECTIVE criticism.
One suggestion I can make, that isn't subjective, is to normalize her face (so she always looks like the same person in every drawing), pick one style and roll with it.
But overall this art style is pretty hot, but sometimes there are uncanny valley (outside human levels) that seem off; in regards to body proportion. Don't get me wrong, 2D art is ALL about breaking the rules, I've seen tons of art that go outside of human proportions, yet still manage to have a high erotic impact, which is very difficult to pull off, I wouldn't even know where to begin.
Still, look forward to future updates, nice!
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I'm liking the art direction too. However, let's talk about the jawline.
I like the jawlines in these pictures, they're within human bounds.
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This jawline looks great too.
This looks odd. The jaw line is too high, outside normal human levels. Still, taking risks is important in art, but I like traditional jawlines ranging from mid mouth and lower, too high seems unnatural.
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I LOVE long faces like hers, it's very supermodel, but IMO, in this image, jawline should increase in width by like maybe 12-15%? Still, I like her long face here more than what's in the advertisement. Others will probably disagree and perhaps like the advertisement face more.
Anyway, just my SUBJECTIVE criticism.
One suggestion I can make, that isn't subjective, is to normalize her face (so she always looks like the same person in every drawing), pick one style and roll with it.
But overall this art style is pretty hot, but sometimes there are uncanny valley (outside human levels) that seem off; in regards to body proportion. Don't get me wrong, 2D art is ALL about breaking the rules, I've seen tons of art that go outside of human proportions, yet still manage to have a high erotic impact, which is very difficult to pull off, I wouldn't even know where to begin.
Still, look forward to future updates, nice!
Michelle was actually one of the first characters I designed for the game, so I think a lot of beginner mistakes were made. Thank you for you input. I might consider redesigning her now that I've gotten better at the art. And yes, please look forward to more updates.
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Really? I thought I did a pretty good job trying to upload previews that generate interest while also keeping spoilers and the interesting surprises at bay.
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If you read my post on page 2, you can see that I addressed that. I've only been a digital artist for about a year now. I understand the sentiment, but it will take time for me to improve. Creating 2-D digital art is expensive and time-consuming. And it's very hard. Regardless, I encourage you to give the game a shot for the story since that's where I think the real appeal of the product is. It isn't your cup of tea and the art is unbearable, no worries. Completely understandable. Plenty more on this site. I'm still an amateur at best and I'm aware of that. I will strive to improve but there's only so much time that I can put into this as it's just a hobby. Regardless, appreciate the input.
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Please dont mind about criticisms about art. We understand that not all devs have same resources or experience to give top notch quality. What matters is the interesting story and also interesting adult content with Milfs. They are less milf focused games now-a-days. All are shifting their focus to girls and lolis. But, Milf x Young MC genre is a evergreen fetish. And there will be always fanbase for that. Fans like me will always encourage you. There are many games where the art is very weak but still grown on people gradually and became fan favourite. Just believe in yourself and keep your talent and creative thoughts to excel this game.
Now, coming to story, if there will be any kind of NTR content in this in future, i wont play and i'm sorry for that.
Now, coming to story, if there will be any kind of NTR content in this in future, i wont play and i'm sorry for that.
Loving the game so far. I find the art incredibly hot although the faces do look odd at times. What can I say, I love hypersexualized characters.
I think my only complaint is I wish there was more art. Like when there's a description of Fiona Banger's ass there should be a pic. Specifically when she's walking in front of the character carrying the box. It shouldn't be just a black screen when there's a description of her bending over.
Oh and would love to see this animated but know that's not always possible.
Overall loving it so far and really looking forward to future updates.
I think my only complaint is I wish there was more art. Like when there's a description of Fiona Banger's ass there should be a pic. Specifically when she's walking in front of the character carrying the box. It shouldn't be just a black screen when there's a description of her bending over.
Oh and would love to see this animated but know that's not always possible.
Overall loving it so far and really looking forward to future updates.
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The instant i saw this man, i had to do it.
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I... am in a bit of a rage at Aaron's... cluelessness? Like, we 'open' on his best friend noting how he's the smartest guy in their school, but he's constantly gobsmacked by his situation and how he got there.
-Being blindsided on first meeting someone standing-erection attractive; sure.
-Having some intense comparisons to draw despite a sheltered-ish life experience (straight-up has his neighbor grinding on him, twice, but is flabbergast that she would swear when nearly caught in the act and considers her "discipline" her just being friendly); I... sure, okay.
-Amazed that he's hard as a rock upon meeting a "pro pornstar" looking teacher despite acknowledging he's a 'teenager' and not (apparently) having stayed up late jerkin the gerkin; Hmm?!
-Has the audacity to think he has any idea of what genre he's in on the way to his first class; You fool! You absolute buffoon! You know nothing!
But enough about Aaron's mental state. He seems to catch some awareness of fuckery going on after meeting Baelin and Myra, but there's yet time to be disappointed in him.
Erm... when Nutbuster's asking him "if you're going to sit, or what...?" her nametag reverts to Mystery Woman (feel like that might not be on purpose), her ass I personally believe shouldn't look quite like that (seriously, it goes from hip to an oddly-placed basketball to thigh), and the use of ellipses seems a bit egregious (both as a linebreak and repeatedly having the POV character say about 3-7 words at a time when he's feeling dramatic or overwhelmed? I dunno if it's 'absurd' levels yet, but please...). Also, Aaron foreshadowing things regularly feels a bit iffy, from "little do you know what's going to happen next" (no, we're specifically here for that, how dare you) to "little did I know what was immediately about to be said. Something super sinister and" (guy, please, c'mon).
That said, the BGM is nicely-matched (I think), and the promise/hintings of a shady mystery are nice. Besides Aaron's musings in-the-moment, the scenes so far seem to fit the aesthetic you're going for.
-Being blindsided on first meeting someone standing-erection attractive; sure.
-Having some intense comparisons to draw despite a sheltered-ish life experience (straight-up has his neighbor grinding on him, twice, but is flabbergast that she would swear when nearly caught in the act and considers her "discipline" her just being friendly); I... sure, okay.
-Amazed that he's hard as a rock upon meeting a "pro pornstar" looking teacher despite acknowledging he's a 'teenager' and not (apparently) having stayed up late jerkin the gerkin; Hmm?!
-Has the audacity to think he has any idea of what genre he's in on the way to his first class; You fool! You absolute buffoon! You know nothing!
But enough about Aaron's mental state. He seems to catch some awareness of fuckery going on after meeting Baelin and Myra, but there's yet time to be disappointed in him.
Erm... when Nutbuster's asking him "if you're going to sit, or what...?" her nametag reverts to Mystery Woman (feel like that might not be on purpose), her ass I personally believe shouldn't look quite like that (seriously, it goes from hip to an oddly-placed basketball to thigh), and the use of ellipses seems a bit egregious (both as a linebreak and repeatedly having the POV character say about 3-7 words at a time when he's feeling dramatic or overwhelmed? I dunno if it's 'absurd' levels yet, but please...). Also, Aaron foreshadowing things regularly feels a bit iffy, from "little do you know what's going to happen next" (no, we're specifically here for that, how dare you) to "little did I know what was immediately about to be said. Something super sinister and" (guy, please, c'mon).
That said, the BGM is nicely-matched (I think), and the promise/hintings of a shady mystery are nice. Besides Aaron's musings in-the-moment, the scenes so far seem to fit the aesthetic you're going for.
Downloaded this a while back and finally got around to opening it last night. Loved it, the storyline seems to hint at a good mystery and flows quite well.
Don't worry about the ellipsis, everybody in my life says I have to stop using them...lol...at least I've cut back to just the 3 at a time rather than the larger numbers I used to put in everything I wrote.
The named characters (Banger; etc.) are my kind of woman. Excessive bust, round and pliable butts, and lips so full of additives that it's a crime you can't sample them for hours. You know, the kind of women an old man like myself has never seen in real life (okay, maybe a time or two).
I lament the fact that I finished both chapters last night, and now must wait anxiously for chapter 3. But that will make the publishing of it so much sweeter and fulfilling.
Keep up the good work, and I do wish I had the wherewithal to support you on Patrion...
Don't worry about the ellipsis, everybody in my life says I have to stop using them...lol...at least I've cut back to just the 3 at a time rather than the larger numbers I used to put in everything I wrote.
The named characters (Banger; etc.) are my kind of woman. Excessive bust, round and pliable butts, and lips so full of additives that it's a crime you can't sample them for hours. You know, the kind of women an old man like myself has never seen in real life (okay, maybe a time or two).
I lament the fact that I finished both chapters last night, and now must wait anxiously for chapter 3. But that will make the publishing of it so much sweeter and fulfilling.
Keep up the good work, and I do wish I had the wherewithal to support you on Patrion...
I'm going to start by apologizing for being mean. I can tell a lot of work went into this game, and that's part of why I expect better. Hell, I downloaded it for free, and I shouldn't be looking a gift horse in the mouth, as it were. But I need to say what I feel in the hope that things will improve.
The game is disappointing overall. I've played through all of the current content. The music absolutely slaps, which is the only reason I haven't deleted the game yet, but there are no sex scenes, no scenes I would describe as sexy, no nudity, and a lot of repetitive character introductions. Yeah, the MC thinks this woman is ALSO the sexiest woman he's ever seen, she looks like a blow-up doll, she smells good. We get it. I am not getting the boner that the MC is getting.
Myra is the only female character worth paying any attention to so far.
Myra is the most attractive, and has the most character development. But she isn't just the best-looking character in the game, she looks good AND she's the only female character that doesn't look like a hideous fish-person that stuffed two pairs of volleyballs into their clothes at strategic locations. Banger's butt cheeks don't even look like they're attached to her body, and her two clones, Nutbuster and Guzzler, are the same in this regard. There is a way to make that body type look sexy. Curves that look like someone took a regular ass and drew a C shape next to it is not the right way.
I'm guessing the sinister secret is that someone is transforming everyone's fathers into perfumed rubber-doll women. I'll check back in two years when the next update hits to see if I'm right.
The music really is good though. I could listen to the soundtrack all day.
The game is disappointing overall. I've played through all of the current content. The music absolutely slaps, which is the only reason I haven't deleted the game yet, but there are no sex scenes, no scenes I would describe as sexy, no nudity, and a lot of repetitive character introductions. Yeah, the MC thinks this woman is ALSO the sexiest woman he's ever seen, she looks like a blow-up doll, she smells good. We get it. I am not getting the boner that the MC is getting.
Myra is the only female character worth paying any attention to so far.
Myra is the most attractive, and has the most character development. But she isn't just the best-looking character in the game, she looks good AND she's the only female character that doesn't look like a hideous fish-person that stuffed two pairs of volleyballs into their clothes at strategic locations. Banger's butt cheeks don't even look like they're attached to her body, and her two clones, Nutbuster and Guzzler, are the same in this regard. There is a way to make that body type look sexy. Curves that look like someone took a regular ass and drew a C shape next to it is not the right way.
I'm guessing the sinister secret is that someone is transforming everyone's fathers into perfumed rubber-doll women. I'll check back in two years when the next update hits to see if I'm right.
The music really is good though. I could listen to the soundtrack all day.
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I didn't really find this mean. I actually found this quite informative. I appreciate the input and I respect your opinion. I understand your gripes.
First of all, thank you for the music approval. I'm a huge advocate for using music to tell a story and I spent about 2 weeks scouring for the perfect music to fit the perfect mood. I've backlogged about 200 pieces so far. The fact that you've complimented that lets me appreciate that all that work didn't go to waste. I've had to listen to trash music time and time again in order to find the right one, so hearing this means a lot to me.
Now moving on to the character designs. To be honest, I think it really does come down to personal preference in the end. For every person that said they didn't like the designs, I've gotten emails to keep them the way they are. And I actually didn't like Myra's design at first as it took me 3 days to make it, but Fiona, Michelle, and Tanya took me weeks (Granted, Myra was created later in the development cycle). My initial inspiration for the art was from an artist known as thePIT. I fell in love with his work and I've done my best to recreate it, but it's not easy. I still don't think I've mastered it but I strive to improve every day.
I'm working on Chapter 3 currently. I say, give this Chapter 3 one more shot. If it's not your cup tea, it is what it is. No hard feelings.
The fact that you took your time to play it, is more than enough. And I appreciate that.