HTML Completed Oh Hyp-no! [v1.0] [AmusingOddity]

[AmusingOddity]

I'm going through this one right now, and the first thought I had when the prototype phone got put to a typical one is that this company had already figured out how to make billions. If only Samsung and the like would wake up and realize that people would rather have easily replaceable batteries and thicker phones with charge for years again. Add the wired headphone jacks and removable storage back in while you are at it. Jobs and Ives should have been shot for crimes against humanity for their fashion sense attack on the cell phone industry.

Hey bud, how are you doing?

Yeah I've never understood why every year they brag about how slim the new phone is. I always just think "so you made the battery even smaller? Thanks." Sometimes I miss my old nokia. It held charge for like a week!

I ran the game through grammerly before putting it out so hopefully it's most of the way there already with regards to grammar.

AmusingOddity

I like your writing and selection of images. Looking forward to Slut Town and some sandbox (=game, for me).

Thanks for the catch fellotraveller. Its almost 4am here so I'll make the changes in the morning.

Yeah, I don't really know how to deal with Linux. phupdup informed me a while back of the case sensitive thing(you Linux users are a more friendly bunch than the rest of us lol). I know all my file naming system well enough. I have folders as uppercase, images are uppercase and camel case. The issue is that I make a typo and since it runs fine I just never notice.

Glad to hear you're looking forward to Sluttown. I plan to get a beta out to my subscribers at the start of next month and once they have a week or 2 to hammer at it I'll put out a 0.1 here.

 

[sexpe]

Hi there ! That's a great game, I understood you had some fun making it. I'm looking forward to sluttown, but also to a sequel of this one

 

[DamienDarkraven6969]

Can't wait for your next game.

 

[themanticore]

Glad you enjoyed it.
It will. Sluttown will be a corruption game centered around mind control. Kinda like the company but using the app instead of the serum you use in that game.

I've been wanting a new corruption type game to give me some inspiration for my... four unfinished ones.

This one honestly got my mind revving again. And I'm looking forward to Sluttown now!

 

[Trapitalism101]

I like the idea of a mind control game. If you are creative anough you can also do some neat stuff besides just "assemble the submissive harem" which I think adds replay value.

 

[phupdup]

The formatting on this one is pretty clean with proper lines, so I just did my proofing and editing in Emacs and uploaded the resulting html. It looks like one of your Winders apps likes to upcase the extension though. I didn't change the html for these images since I assumed that you wanted to fix them out on the filesystem instead. The attached zip contains the updated html and the output from the diff command so you can see the changes.

Images/People/Vio/Coffee.JPG
Images/Misc/Kiss1.JPG


some fat fingering NTFS hid from you

Images/People/Val/ValEXn2.jpg is ValExN2.jpg on disk
Images/People/Vio/VionVal.jpg is VioNVal.jpg on disk
Images/People/Vio/PantiesOff.Gif
Images/People/Val/ValBJa.Gif
Images/People/Vio/InSert.gif is Insert.gif on disk

On to some of the more interesting grammar and gramper stuff.

I've never seen this one before: "saposta" instead of "supposed to".

You are "definitely" fixated on using "defiant".

Is "chilly" "Chili" actually Gaspacho with beans?

"Justices" getting swapped for "juices" sounds like autocorrect got you.

"containment" instead of "continent"

On the CSS, your red background for the Headmaster Lake is way too hot a red. It overwhelms the white font. I dropped it from "red" to "darkred"

 

[AmusingOddity]

Hi there ! That's a great game, I understood you had some fun making it. I'm looking forward to sluttown, but also to a sequel of this one

Good news! Sluttown is actually going to be a direct sequel to this game.

I've been wanting a new corruption type game to give me some inspiration for my... four unfinished ones.

This one honestly got my mind revving again. And I'm looking forward to Sluttown now!

Not to give unsolicited advice but going down the route f making a few small practice games made the world of difference to me. I don't know if it would work for you, but it might be worth a try.

I like the idea of a mind control game. If you are creative anough you can also do some neat stuff besides just "assemble the submissive harem" which I think adds replay value.

I plan to do 2 core routs for each character. 1 that will be the add her to your harem and 1 that will be turning her into a more open slut around town. Hopefuly haveing these two very different routes will let me give enough variety over time.

On to some of the more interesting grammar and gramper stuff.

I've never seen this one before: "saposta" instead of "supposed to".

You are "definitely" fixated on using "defiant".

Saposta is totally a word! It's like "kinda" or "gonna". "Did you bring the car tonight?" "No. I was saposta but I kinda got into a fight with my parents." "Well shit. How are we gonna get there."

Maybe it's an Irish thing?

"Defiant" is 100% a dyslexia thing. It just looks right to me, I couldn't explain why?

Also Calf's is so dumb it actualy made me laugh out loud. "Why didn't spellcheck catch . . . Oh . . .Like a baby cow . . . Fuck sake."

 

[stone14725]

I saw your previous work before, i really enjoyed it and i'm so excited to try this one as it sequel. I wish you best of lucks with your next project and as always, excited to see what you do <3

 

[Trapitalism101]

I plan to do 2 core routs for each character. 1 that will be the add her to your harem and 1 that will be turning her into a more open slut around town. Hopefuly haveing these two very different routes will let me give enough variety over time.

If it fits it is a good idea. If it doesn't make sense to go in that direction with a characetr, then don't kick yourself for only writing 1 route, especially for a tertiary harem character.

 

[AmusingOddity]

If it fits it is a good idea. If it doesn't make sense to go in that direction with a characetr, then don't kick yourself for only writing 1 route, especially for a tertiary harem character.

I already have a plan for a section of the game that will be dedicated to characters that I only have one route for. It won't be implemented until much later in development though. Stories I come up with that have less meat on their bones I'll save for when I get there. Until then the only characters I'll add will be ones that can sustain both routes. I already have outlines for 14 characters for the first phase of the game so it'll be a long time before I need to worry about it.

At least that’s the plan. We'll see what happens when the rubber meets the road.

 

[bsjfan69]

I never thought a novel could be grindy, yet here it is. What's the point of repeating the same events daily events over and over and over? The writing is so bad, all you look forward to is the pictures, and they're just repeats. I'm not even against grinding, but switch it up a little - at least change up the text, for God's sake.

 

[Aniceusername92]

Is there a online version for iPad users ?

 

[Smegmut]

The introduction is taking too long for my liking. I endured it for at least 10 minutes before deciding I could go no further (I'm afraid). I think you may need to either refine all of that and condense it into 10 pages worth or less, or turn some of that stuff into part of the game itself, as (quite frankly) I ended up getting stuck between bored and frustrated and totally disregarded the script before giving up all together.

Sorry man, I like the concept, but I think it just needs to be a lot more playable and interactive for the user.

 

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The introduction is taking too long for my liking. I endured it for at least 10 minutes before deciding I could go no further (I'm afraid). I think you may need to either refine all of that and condense it into 10 pages worth or less, or turn some of that stuff into part of the game itself, as (quite frankly) I ended up getting stuck between bored and frustrated and totally disregarded the script before giving up all together.

Sorry man, I like the concept, but I think it just needs to be a lot more playable and interactive for the user.

Did you read the description? It's a practice game that the developer made (one of 3 in fact). The new game (Sluttown) will be more refined and better and hopefully less boring and grindy in playability so let's wait for that cause I have high hopes for it having played all of the practice games and enjoyed all of their respective stories. Who knows maybe the developer will refine these practice games after finishing Sluttown.

 

[Tartytool]

Looks interesting, will be giving it a try.

 

[ThornyAce]

So will characters from these build up games appear in Sluttown?

 

[Smegmut]

Did you read the description? It's a practice game that the developer made (one of 3 in fact). The new game (Sluttown) will be more refined and better and hopefully less boring and grindy in playability so let's wait for that cause I have high hopes for it having played all of the practice games and enjoyed all of their respective stories. Who knows maybe the developer will refine these practice games after finishing Sluttown.

I did, but I guess I didn't understand what a 'practice game' means. Your reply helps to elucidate what he's done here though, thank you - it all makes more sense now

 

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I did, but I guess I didn't understand what a 'practice game' means. Your reply helps to elucidate what he's done here though, thank you - it all makes more sense now

Good to know I helped, and nice talking to you.

 

[AmusingOddity]

So will characters from these build up games appear in Sluttown?

Some will, some won't. Viola for example was only active in porn for like a year so there just isn't a lot of stuff out there to use for her character. That's why I gave her story a pretty definitive ending. I may bring other characters back if I find a good spot for them. I already have a spots picked out for at least 2 returns but they won't come until deeper in the game.

 

[hakamada]

Version more updates would be good ~