desmosome

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God damnit, the writing is too good and characters feel too real for me to go on the darkness path which is usually my preferred path. I might have to just play a good daddy this time....?
 

Faptime

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Some thoughts on this amazing story:

1. For years MC has been having dreams of Gracie. She passes away and a week later he has the most involved dream of all, where she actually answers his questions and prepares him for the arrival of their daughters. All of his previous dreams can be chalked up to is subconscious memories of her. But that last dream, that was definitely something else.

2. The canonical age of the girls is 18, and that's simply because it's a porn game and everybody is over 18. But if he impregnated Gracie in 2005 and now it's 2020... they are 15 years old. It is entirely possible that the game is not set in the current year, but references to the coronavirus and the fact that there's no high-tech gadgetry that requires it to be set in the future leads one to believe that it is set in the present.

3. The Devs have *nailed* the emotional aspect of this game. I felt for the MC, to be robbed of so much because of his accident/coma (his love, his parents, his children), but I also hated him so much when he drove drunk (due to personal tragedy). I kept on muttering to my phone, "pull over when your a safe distance away" but he never did and he killed someone.

4. I just want to hug Allison. She is just too damn adorable. And I want to take all of Maddison's hurt away, and show her unconditional love. But my heart belongs to Olivia. Strong, brave, beautiful Olivia.

Amazing start. So very much looking forward to more.
 

Keifoo

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Jan 18, 2020
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The girls look awesome and the renders are pretty good.
The dialogue has flow and it seems to be in parallel with the choices.
The story is somewhat confusing and would need some adjustments but it has a good premise.


The end, though, it blew me off honestly. If 18 years have passed since the accident, why would you use the sentence "A-and... over ten years ago..." when is almost close to 20 years. That's pretty much low budget-writing, either hinting to the premise where you state he was in the coma for 10 years, or doing it on purpose of course for another aspect of the story (I doubt it)

The second thing is if the 'son' that the woman is talking about is the guy driving the other car in the accident that would make her much older than your render makes her... and if the son was a minor and just in the back seat she would still be older than what she looks like. If the Mc has at least 36 she clearly has to be older than him... she looks like she is 25 or less. Yea, yea .. I know is a game but seriously she looks like she just finished college...

The third thing both Gracie and Natalie waited... or looked for the MC 8 years since his awakening... fucking amazing detective skills. Yeah I get it Gracie was afraid and Natalie was... afraid too of course...
Pure plot devices to make the story go and not to elevate it... sorry but as a fellow writer can't give that a good review.
Plot holes don't make a story good.
As it is now... at most 2/5
 

Hoboy

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Jul 24, 2017
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I must say I really enjoyed both the look and feel of this game. I do agree that was a bit jarring with the 10 years ago comment as it has to be almost 20 according to the storyline, but overall really nice start. A little polish here and there and this shows real promise
 

desmosome

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Sep 5, 2018
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Some thoughts on this amazing story:

1. For years MC has been having dreams of Gracie. She passes away and a week later he has the most involved dream of all, where she actually answers his questions and prepares him for the arrival of their daughters. All of his previous dreams can be chalked up to is subconscious memories of her. But that last dream, that was definitely something else.

2. The canonical age of the girls is 18, and that's simply because it's a porn game and everybody is over 18. But if he impregnated Gracie in 2005 and now it's 2020... they are 15 years old. It is entirely possible that the game is not set in the current year, but references to the coronavirus and the fact that there's no high-tech gadgetry that requires it to be set in the future leads one to believe that it is set in the present.

3. The Devs have *nailed* the emotional aspect of this game. I felt for the MC, to be robbed of so much because of his accident/coma (his love, his parents, his children), but I also hated him so much when he drove drunk (due to personal tragedy). I kept on muttering to my phone, "pull over when your a safe distance away" but he never did and he killed someone.

4. I just want to hug Allison. She is just too damn adorable. And I want to take all of Maddison's hurt away, and show her unconditional love. But my heart belongs to Olivia. Strong, brave, beautiful Olivia.

Amazing start. So very much looking forward to more.
Dude came out of a 10 year coma. IRL, he wouldn't really be able to recover fully after such a long time in a vegetative state. Your muscles atrophy when its not used. They literally waste away. He would be wheelchair bound and probably be unable to speak either.

But seeing as this is a porn game, he recovered through some intense training montage. The physical therapy required alone would have taken years. Then he learned photography, likely starting small for a time. After enough experience, he started his business and grew it into a successful studio. Adding everything, 18 years doesn't sound that crazy.
 

Vanidal

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Nov 15, 2017
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God, they are so beautiful. This is the first time I don't want to turn on the incest patch because I want them closer to realistically be my other half (at least one of them).
 

RPJames

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Jul 21, 2017
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What a great game. When a game plays with the heart strings that quickly (I lost both parents to cancer), you know you will be in for a wild ride. I will be looking forward to this game, it is definitely in my top 10. Models and story so far are outstanding.
 
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BlackCatFae

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If you aren't going to pay attention then don't make dumb comments. It says that it's been years since he got out of the hospital. He had to recover and get to this current point where he's living the life. It's been at least however long it would take for them to be 18. It's left vague so you can choose an age yourself.
 

kshyk

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Mar 18, 2018
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This plot is so...random. (I think dumb it's a word I was looking for - but I don't want to critique this devs too much) Shame...
But at least game looks good.

(but wtf? smartphones in 2005?)
 
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KyoriKusagami

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This game had a very good start. It has beautiful and clean renders, the story is not perfect, but it's is a very enjoyable one. The animations are great and the choice system is pretty interesting. Good luck with your project RK Studios.
 
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tdmikey

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Dec 13, 2017
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Ok. Great renders, great story. One extremely minor weakness I would say is so much story/so many different story arches crammed into so little time. Was doing fine till "10 years ago you killed my son". History timeline is sketchy too. If the accident was only 10 years ago when the lady comes to your door then the triplets should only be 9 or 10 years old. Just a couple minor things to help clarify the story. I'm enjoying so far and can't wait for updates.
You really did not know how long it took for him to build his business? So adding the option for time seems plausible here. Devs could have put in the age variable of the girls that you specified as the "XX years ago you killed my son."
 
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Yandere Lover

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:oops::oops: What Father/Daughter. Finally there isn't any Father/Daughter ones out there. Definitely downloading this.
 
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