VN Ren'Py Rebel Duet [v0.7b] [ionDivvy]

[as22]

The writing feels like it was translated from Japanese. And I'm not referring to some bad engrish, I'm talking about sentence structure. And writing in general. Absolutely terrible.

Whoever wrote this was neither a Japanese speaker nor an English speaker.




The original Japanese would be something like
ずいぶん溜まったみたいですね。。。
それとも。。。
私だからこんなに出たの？
And it fits when written in Japanese. But this isn't, is it dev?


The entire script is like this but this is one example.
It feels like the dev doesn't understand basic human interaction and how English speakers talk erotically to each other. His only recourse is to copy Japanese VN's anime or hentai RPGs and how the characters and syntax usually go and this comes with all the tropes in tow.

People are happy to deal with this from a translated JP game because we know the idiosyncrasies with tropes and this is what we expect JP games to be like going in, but this is an ENGLISH game and this is frankly just garbage writing.

 

[ThorinKing]

The writing feels like it was translated from Japanese. And I'm not referring to some bad engrish, I'm talking about sentence structure. And writing in general. Absolutely terrible.

Whoever wrote this was neither a Japanese speaker nor an English speaker.
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The original Japanese would be something like
ずいぶん溜まったみたいですね。。。
それとも。。。
私だからこんなに出たの？
And it fits when written in Japanese. But this isn't, is it dev?


The entire script is like this but this is one example.
It feels like the dev doesn't understand basic human interaction and how English speakers talk erotically to each other. His only recourse is to copy Japanese VN's anime or hentai RPGs and how the characters and syntax usually go and this comes with all the tropes in tow.

People are happy to deal with this from a translated JP game because we know the idiosyncrasies with tropes and this is what we expect JP games to be like going in, but this is an ENGLISH game and this is frankly just garbage writing.

Native English speaker that has a knack for language and is known as about the toughest editor amongst his colleagues: there is absolutely nothing wrong with that exchange.

This VN is on my "to do" list, so I haven't seen anything other than what you're showing, and it may very well be that there are grammatical issues; however, your example is not one of them.

It is possible that the dialectics of your immediate region uses different structuring, but this is well within the norms for spoken English in much of the US. Or, possibly, you're just use to gutter language when it comes to "dirty talk" rather than a woman that can string multiple words into a decent sentence. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

 

[as22]

and is known as about the toughest editor amongst his colleagues:

Perusing porn games on f95 doesn't count as a "Knack for language"
And being an unpaid beta tester in various f95 dev official discords doesn't make you the "toughest editor amongst his colleagues"

Lets stop with the larp now.

 

[ThorinKing]

Perusing porn games on f95 doesn't count as a "Knack for language"
And being an unpaid beta tester in various f95 dev official discords doesn't make you the "toughest editor amongst his colleagues"

Lets stop with the larp now.

Bless your heart!

It's, "let's", by the way.

At least proofread if you're going to pretend to know grammar. Maybe when you've reviewed IPO documents and written briefs that ended up in US District and US Supreme Court filings, you can judge me. Until then, kindly walk away, child.

 

[as22]

I'm sure a District court attorney has time to have thousands of posts on a porn game pirate site.
Please dont be "that kid"

 

[ThorinKing]

I'm sure a District court attorney has time to have thousands of posts on a porn game pirate site.
Please dont be "that kid"

I'm retired.

I'm guessing you must be an academic - those who can't do...

Adios.

 

[wookie ookie]

I'm retired.

I'm guessing you must be an academic - those who can't do...

Adios.

Seriously he need a good palm (sorry not trying to butt in everything he said rubbed wrong way)

 

[ThorinKing]

Seriously he need a good palm (sorry not trying to butt in everything he said rubbed wrong way)

Those criticizing the writing of others should at least review their own posts a little better. Between capitalization, punctuation and grammar, I suspect he was, at best, a "B" student.

Et fine.

 

[wookie ookie]

Those criticizing the writing of others should at least review their own posts a little better. Between capitalization, punctuation and grammar, I suspect he was, at best, a "B" student.

Et fine.

Yeah as I leave a s out in my post above Lol. It wasn't as much the criticizing that's always going to happen.But the direction he took conversation. I'm done now

 

[Pr0GamerJohnny]

The writing feels like it was translated from Japanese. And I'm not referring to some bad engrish, I'm talking about sentence structure. And writing in general. Absolutely terrible.

Whoever wrote this was neither a Japanese speaker nor an English speaker.
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The original Japanese would be something like
ずいぶん溜まったみたいですね。。。
それとも。。。
私だからこんなに出たの？
And it fits when written in Japanese. But this isn't, is it dev?


The entire script is like this but this is one example.
It feels like the dev doesn't understand basic human interaction and how English speakers talk erotically to each other. His only recourse is to copy Japanese VN's anime or hentai RPGs and how the characters and syntax usually go and this comes with all the tropes in tow.

People are happy to deal with this from a translated JP game because we know the idiosyncrasies with tropes and this is what we expect JP games to be like going in, but this is an ENGLISH game and this is frankly just garbage writing.

What on earth are you talking about? What's all this blathering about japanese? No, none of the game is in japanese, it seems pretty obvious dev is a native english speaker....but I'm a little lost as to why there would be any japanese connection whatsoever...

I guarantee our conversational english is either at parity or mine is superior, and I don't see anything that jumps out at me. Sure, it's not Shakespeare, it's a porn game.

You're ragging on the sentence structure, how would you write the third sentence? "Did you cum this much because of me?" is about the only alternative I'd have....again, it's perfectly understood as it's written - so much in fact, I can't help but wonder what your angle is; if you learned english as a second language and are trying to flex pedantry at this faultless dev....

 

[wookie ookie]

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[ionDivvy]

Whoever wrote this was neither a Japanese speaker nor an English speaker.

I admire the detective work, but English is actually my native language followed by Japanese as my second.

It's possible some lines were subconsciously thought of in Japanese, since I use both languages with roughly the same frequency in my day-to-day life. That's the nature of being bilingual.

It's fine if you aren't a fan of that writing style, but throwing personal insults over literal sex scene dialogue? Perhaps it's not the developer who "doesn't understand basic human interaction".

 

[wookie ookie]

Valerie,Valerie,Valerie

 

[wookie ookie]

Rena

 

[Gold Onyx]

If you choose female protagonist in this game, are you just forced to be a lesbian for any action?

 

[Brannon]

If you choose female protagonist in this game, are you just forced to be a lesbian for any action?

"If I choose my MC to have a vagina, am I forced in this AVN to use that vagina?"


MC is summoned by a FEMALE succubus to her world. As a bodyguard. And battery.

 

[Kagarus]

If you choose female protagonist in this game, are you just forced to be a lesbian for any action?

There are unavoidable scenes with Valerie, considering that she's the main LI and that the plot wouldn't make much sense without her.
Later on, there will be optional scenes with both men and women.
So a female MC will be either lesbian or bi, and will at least have sex with women. If that's not for you, the game (at least femMC) is not for you.

 

[Balbaar]

"If I choose my MC to have a vagina, am I forced in this AVN to use that vagina?"

That's not what they asked.

MC is summoned by a FEMALE succubus to her world. As a bodyguard. And battery.

That doesn't answer their question.

 

[SpyderArachnid]

That's not what they asked.




That doesn't answer their question.

And your post doesn't answer the question either, so what is the purpose of it? To call out another member for no reason other than to stir up drama? How about being helpful instead of antagonizing?

If you choose female protagonist in this game, are you just forced to be a lesbian for any action?

As to your question, currently, yes, you are forced to be a lesbian if you choose to play as a female protagonist. There is only one person you can have sex with at the moment, and it is Valerie and it is forced. So, if you play as a female, you'll be having a lot of lesbian sex.

In future updates, there will be options to have sex with males (as per what the dev has said). But you can't be straight if that is what you are wondering. You're either bisexual or lesbian if you play as a female protagonist. If that bugs you, then play as a male protagonist.

 

[Brannon]

That's not what they asked.




That doesn't answer their question.

It was not the exact language that was used in the question.
I wrote out what the actual question was.

And yes, engaging ones brain does indeed help figure out the answer.
Or that the question that was asked was stupid.



P.S. Pointing a finger at someone because you did not understand what they said is LESS then helpful.