VN Ren'Py Reclaiming the Lost [v0.11] [Passion Portal]

[watdapakisdis]

Why did she call it Mr. bunny? Its clearly an elephant. Literally unplayable!
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I complained about that when v0.10 was released eight months ago.

 

[Zorro#34]

Hmm you need all 3? Isn't the 2nd one only present if one goes the secret lover route?
Sorry I really don't dabble in variables, all I know is that I have 5 love with her and like 10 lust, I did the stream, but had no option for a donation, meaning the donations happen no matter what at the end.



What I meant with my examples is that she could have easily been written to satisfy one or more of those criteria as well as the drooling one, but she hasn't.

I surely would't call her kind, she's kind when it suits her and things are going her way else she's more bitchy and commanding than kind.
I wouldn't count the "plays hard to get" as positive considering the context is that the reason she's where she is because the MC wants her, but yes she does play hard to get.

Let's be honest why does the MC approach her in the cafee, offers her a lift on the street, offer her the job, and keeps listening to her? It's because he's a hopeless horndog.

Unfortunately (?) there's one trait I despise in folks, and yes that also applies to characters in AVNs , being liars.
She might not be in cahoots with the shady dude (thou it looks likely), but she sure as hell is not just there by chance.

I agree with you she's smart (more than the MC for sure), there's a reason she enters the cafe where the MC sits, a reason why she is outside Grace's house later on when he leaves, a reason why she plays "hard to get", a reason why she does everything she does, a reason she at the very least doesn't want to share with the MC, which on itself is lying by omission.

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I mean, I agree she's most likely a spy, you don't have to prove it to me. Still, I do believe she's kind, deep down. If she wasn't kind, she wouldn't be 'convertable' to our side with love or friendship - and we do need her points for something. Doesn't mean she's not a lying bitch. One can easily betray their nature and principles when faced with peer pressure or the prospects of money.
However, even with all of the above considered, I'll cling to her for as long as possible, only dropping her for Evelyn once the truth is revealed, because I'm a hopeless romantic, and to me she's the only good romance option so far as opposed to flings and 'having fun'.

 

[rentintin]

I imagine this pompuous post is addressed to me?

if you're that narcissistic, then sure.

 

[Quetzzz]

These last updates have a certain lack of attention to detail. Reused renders cause cups of coffee to teleport across a table and people to move around nonsensically in conversations. A "man" speaks to Chloe when the MC and Emily are in her room:

                    "Chloe jerks her head up like someone splashed cold water on her."
                    "In one quick motion she slips out of your arms, hurries across the room, and lunges toward the door."
                    "She cracks it open just a sliver — just enough for her face to be visible, keeping the two of you completely out of sight."
                    ma "Oh, there you are. And where did [mname] and [pname] go?."
                    s "Uh — yeah. I think [mname] walked her out. You know… to make sure she gets home safe."
                    ma "Ah. I see."  
                    "Her gaze drops — right to the lingerie Chloe is wearing."
                    ma "And why exactly are you dressed like {i}that{/i}? Is someone coming over?"
                    "Chloe flashes a bold, mischievous smile."
                    s "Mom, please. A girl should always look good."
                    scene part_11_850 with dissolve
                    ma "{b}Ha!{/b} Only you would say something like that."
                    ma "Alright, I'll leave you to it, I'm heading to bed. It's late, and you should get some sleep too."
                    ma "Good night."

I suspect this has to be spoken by "mm" instead of "ma".

Then there's Emily asking Chloe about her mystery man when on the non-mystery path:

    p "Speaking of friends… Chloe, how did that date with your mystery guy go? You were all excited about it last time we talked."
    s "Oh, it was… good, actually. A bit wild-"
    ...
    s "So yeah, that's how it went down with him. End of story—for now."
    s "But enough about me. Spill—how long have you and [mname] been… you know, a thing?"

 

[Michkooo]

Emily and Chloe looking good

 

[Quetzzz]

Emily and Chloe looking good

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Makes me wonder when Emily got her boobjob done.

 

[Ricthequick]

if you're that narcissistic, then sure.

By nature? Absolutely, same as being selfish and an ass.
Took me decades to get a bit better, just a tiny bit thou.

Yet only answered you for the very reason I mentioned, your post made me chuckle, which I really needed.

I mean, I agree she's most likely a spy, you don't have to prove it to me. Still, I do believe she's kind, deep down. If she wasn't kind, she wouldn't be 'convertable' to our side with love or friendship - and we do need her points for something. Doesn't mean she's not a lying bitch. One can easily betray their nature and principles when faced with peer pressure or the prospects of money.
However, even with all of the above considered, I'll cling to her for as long as possible, only dropping her for Evelyn once the truth is revealed, because I'm a hopeless romantic, and to me she's the only good romance option so far as opposed to flings and 'having fun'.

You know mate how I can get hotheaded sometimes when discussing this stuff (happens also on Milton's thread), so just to make it crystal clear for everyone, what I write here are always personal opinions, even more so since I'm not getting paid for them.

In this case is my preference about what kind of LI I like or dislike, I don't generally like LIs that are forced on the player, even less so when they are (for narrative purposes) liars.

I also thou don't think she's written badly, just pointed out how there could have been ways of portrying her in a more positive/redeeming light, the author decided not to go for them.

Had the same reaction also to Elsa in that other AVN that got abandoned for very sad reasons, even thou I still think it made a bit more sense in that context, considering how that MC was portrayed compared to this one.

 

[Quetzzz]

I also thou don't think she's written badly, just pointed out how there could have been ways of portrying her in a more positive/redeeming light, the author decided not to go for them.

To be fair, the writing often neglects this. For instance, the MC never inquires about the specifics of Bob's loan. He says he has it handled, then suddenly they're speaking about Bob getting harassed. If you're a co-owner of a company, there's no way you wouldn't want to know the specifics. And the same goes for the guy who now wants everything the MC owns. This only works because the MC didn't know how much Bob borrowed or what the stipulations are.

I think it's clear the MC is being set up, and the writing makes him avoid asking the right questions.

 

[Ricthequick]

To be fair, the writing often neglects this. For instance, the MC never inquires about the specifics of Bob's loan. He says he has it handled, then suddenly they're speaking about Bob getting harassed. If you're a co-owner of a company, there's no way you wouldn't want to know the specifics. And the same goes for the guy who now wants everything the MC owns. This only works because the MC didn't know how much Bob borrowed or what the stipulations are.

I think it's clear the MC is being set up, and the writing makes him avoid asking the right questions.

That is the only real critique I could make to the writing tbh, but again we are still talking of an AVN, one that, on top of that, had to be rewritten to accommodate Patreon's rules, and as I pointed out couple of posts above, there's "pro writers" getting paid absourd amount of money who can fluff their scripts way worse than this.

 

[Quetzzz]

That is the only real critique I could make to the writing tbh, but again we are still talking of an AVN, one that, on top of that, had to be rewritten to accommodate Patreon's rules, and as I pointed out couple of posts above, there's "pro writers" getting paid absourd amount of money who can fluff their scripts way worse than this.

I wouldn't go that far, but I agree with your general sentiment. In terms of AVNs, the writing of this game is way above average.