maxbishup

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Love the renders, love the spanking, hate the grind, hate the engine.(wish it were renpy)All in all, LOVE THE GAME.
 

hotmike

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I understand. I would probably pay a proofreader no more than $1 per page, but I get that it's hard to find someone.
"..but..." lol. Payment is usually per word, not per page. Good luck finding someone for 1 $/pg. It can be free if the game is really good/nice.
The worst part in proofreading is the tools you need to use. Only Renpy has some ok translation/proofreading tools and you can link that to a Git, all the rest make it soo much harder.
 

TinWoodman555

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"..but..." lol. Payment is usually per word, not per page. Good luck finding someone for 1 $/pg. It can be free if the game is really good/nice.
The worst part in proofreading is the tools you need to use. Only Renpy has some ok translation/proofreading tools and you can link that to a Git, all the rest make it soo much harder.
agree
I can't imagine, how someone will translate such a document. But know about one tool, i'll try to find out...
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hotmike

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I can't imagine, how someone will translate such a document. But know about one tool, i'll try to find out...
Well, if you promise to get rid of the grind and start using some more realistic point systems (why does a slave need to sleep for three days to regain energy?; she is in a mansion for c***t sake), you could try and send me the text code or preferably a git link. I will then probably start a private gitlab project for you/us and look at the text.
See eg
 
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N3fer

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Amazing art
Nice game concept
Awful, terrible UI
Way too grindy

The grind combined with the UI killed it for me, but if you manage to make these flaws better, you will have a great game in your hands my friend.
 
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TinWoodman555

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Amazing art
Nice game concept
Awful, terrible UI
Way too grindy

The grind combined with the UI killed it for me, but if you manage to make these flaws better, you will have a great game in your hands my friend.
I get a lot of feedback about grinding, I will fix it in next release, thanks
 
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Xicht

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Ok. Could be nice, but this GRIND! Totaly no for me. Few pics and than few minutes of clicking and slow fading screens. Realy no.
 

AlisaB

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Someday it might become a good game. In its current form its just bad, borderline unplayable:
- grind is unreal, incredibly tedious, time consuming and mind numbing. Why the fuck does she need 2 chocolates per day? Bitch is too lazy - she needs to sleep 2 days after every task!
- dev is not fluent enough in English, writing is mediocre at best
- pacing of her slave training is all over the place. For example shes gets super mad after light slap on the ass during Collar event(and her Submission stat drops to 0 for some mysterious reason). That makes no sense at all, real girls either like spanking or dont mind it but this supposedly masochistic girl hates it...
 
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TinWoodman555

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Someday it might become a good game. In its current form its just bad, borderline unplayable:
- grind is unreal, incredibly tedious, time consuming and mind numbing. Why the fuck does she need 2 chocolates per day? Bitch is too lazy - she needs to sleep 2 days after every task!
- dev is not fluent enough in English, writing is mediocre at best
- pacing of her slave training is all over the place. For example shes gets super mad after light slap on the ass during Collar event(and her Submission stat drops to 0 for some mysterious reason). That makes no sense at all, real girls either like spanking or dont mind it but this supposedly masochistic girl hates it...
Thanks for you feedback, i'll do my best to the next release
 
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MauritkCL

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Honestly, this is the kind of game I dream of playing now and when it's eventually completed. Just like AlisaB I'm really into maledom, BDSM, slave training, corruption, etc.

Nevertheless there are indeed some things that bug me, the thing that bugs me the most is the slow transition between images and setting, this wouldn't be a problem as much if it were only for certain scenes so you can relish them. Unfortunately with the almost unending and frustrating amount of grind work involved it's gets on my nerves quite quickly. Basically i'm saying I wouldn't mind the stats grind work if I could grind at, like not a snail's pace.

Also some things in the character development don't make sense after a certain point. After spanking her once during the collaring scene she becomes incensed and her stats drop to zero. But after spanking her in the spanking scene that stat drop still happens in the collaring scene. That ought to change, wouldn't you think?

Also like AlisaB, the language problems bugs me, it's like a porn star falling down in the middle of a scene, it just kills the mood. Maybe there's someone you know, or perhaps someone here, who can help you with translations from your native language to English and perhaps others. (At least, I assume you are not a native English speaker)

Aside from all this I don't mean to be all negative. I love the character model, she is absolutely gorgeous. Also the young woman in the title screen, which I assume will be (on of) your next slave trainee's, is magnificent. She looks so innocent and ready to be corrupted. I love the idea of this game, the character models (and characters), the intended fetishes, I love it all. It's an incredible start and you can see a lot of work went into it.

Right now it's just a little rough around the edges. Keep up the good work, and as soon as this whole Covid-19 mess is over with (or at least has died down a bit) and I can get back to work, I will be happy to support you on Patreon.
 
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wideout99

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How do you give a gift to Naomi? I'm stuck after the first meeting where she gets upset and you have to give her a gift to cheer her up. I bought the flowers and the book but for the life of me I can't figure out how to give it to her so I can't progress at all.
Edit: Super good art though and looks super promising, just wish I could figure out what I'm missing lol
 
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TinWoodman555

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Honestly, this is the kind of game I dream of playing now and when it's eventually completed. Just like AlisaB I'm really into maledom, BDSM, slave training, corruption, etc.

Nevertheless there are indeed some things that bug me, the thing that bugs me the most is the slow transition between images and setting, this wouldn't be a problem as much if it were only for certain scenes so you can relish them. Unfortunately with the almost unending and frustrating amount of grind work involved it's gets on my nerves quite quickly. Basically i'm saying I wouldn't mind the stats grind work if I could grind at, like not a snail's pace.

Also some things in the character development don't make sense after a certain point. After spanking her once during the collaring scene she becomes incensed and her stats drop to zero. But after spanking her in the spanking scene that stat drop still happens in the collaring scene. That ought to change, wouldn't you think?

Also like AlisaB, the language problems bugs me, it's like a porn star falling down in the middle of a scene, it just kills the mood. Maybe there's someone you know, or perhaps someone here, who can help you with translations from your native language to English and perhaps others. (At least, I assume you are not a native English speaker)

Aside from all this I don't mean to be all negative. I love the character model, she is absolutely gorgeous. Also the young woman in the title screen, which I assume will be (on of) your next slave trainee's, is magnificent. She looks so innocent and ready to be corrupted. I love the idea of this game, the character models (and characters), the intended fetishes, I love it all. It's an incredible start and you can see a lot of work went into it.

Right now it's just a little rough around the edges. Keep up the good work, and as soon as this whole Covid-19 mess is over with (or at least has died down a bit) and I can get back to work, I will be happy to support you on Patreon.
Thanks for the detailed feedback!
1. Yes, the grinding is annoying to many people, I will fix it for the next release. I tried to make the game not too simple, but it seems to much :)
2. There is a problem with the translation, it’s not easy to translate scripts, it cannot just be pulled out of the code and given to someone for translation. You also need to understand that not everyone is ready to work with this kind of material (lewd texts), but I'm looking for possible options, and I think that I will find a solution soon
 

TinWoodman555

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How do you give a gift to Naomi? I'm stuck after the first meeting where she gets upset and you have to give her a gift to cheer her up. I bought the flowers and the book but for the life of me I can't figure out how to give it to her so I can't progress at all.
Edit: Super good art though and looks super promising, just wish I could figure out what I'm missing lol
Naomi hates flowers, she talked about this on first date;) You can give her a book several times to increase her mood to the maximum and then meet her
 
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