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Hello... small info I am working to update my other project in a few days I will have everything ready, I hope your support.
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Um, I think that this needs a translator, badly. The following statement is referring to his niece.
I see this all too often to be honest. A lazy direct translation using an online tool is not adequate for any type of communication, but least of all a dialog driven story.
Get someone to translate your work if you want it to be taken seriously at all.
If the original was "if she has arrived" where she would be "su" that doesn't translate to easily as it could be multiple things. "It" is not a good translation into English. If this is being translated from Spanish then you should use a more clear original statement like "mi sobrina" so it gets translated more accurately. You could also have had "ella" in the original. A simple translation from "ver si ha llegado" translates online to "see if it has arrived". If you change the original to "ver si ella llegado", it would translate using the same tool directly into "see if she arrived" or "see if she has arrived" alternatively.
I see this all too often to be honest. A lazy direct translation using an online tool is not adequate for any type of communication, but least of all a dialog driven story.
Get someone to translate your work if you want it to be taken seriously at all.
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Horrendous english, but I expect it's not a native english speaker, so that's fine.
And metal boogers aside, game seems pretty cool so far.
And metal boogers aside, game seems pretty cool so far.
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I noticed that too. Some of the sentences didn't make any sense until I parsed out what they meant.
I might try to clean it up myself.
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It would help me a lot if instead of criticizing my grammar since I don't speak English, you would be more interested in helping me. thanks for the constructive criticism, I will try to improve as much as I can.
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Here you go then, check attachments
It took me awhile, but I went through and edited to be a bit more clear and naturally flowing and hopefully continue to express who the characters are without compromising that. So, no sweeping changes, just mostly QoL for readability. Let me know if I got anything wrong, or still should be edited.
I did add a couple comments where some things can and should be cut. But I didn't want to go hacking renders myself, as I leave that up to you, dev.
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I'm sorry about that, I just changed it in the next chapter of the game.
well..... I look at the tags....
HOW BORING..... Unless..... Def...... Give your VN TAGS n..... MOERSE twist....
google MOERSE..
HOW BORING..... Unless..... Def...... Give your VN TAGS n..... MOERSE twist....
google MOERSE..
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In reality it would be: a ver si ella ha llegado (let's see if she has arrived) or a ver si ella llegó (let's see if she arrived). A ver si ella llegado is wrong in Spanish.
Please at least make the ntr optional (avoidable depending on choices) rather than unavoidable. Harem and incest are great to me, but not with unavoidable ntr too.
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Sorry, my English is extremely bad, so I use translator for many things I don't know.
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Actually, I don't like the NTR, although I already have a route with avoidable NTR. I think it would be better to put an option at the start where you can enable or disable the NTR, just like at the point where the game goes. Although it doesn't go with NTR route yet, I'm going to implement it in the next update. I'm going to try to make the game please everyone, just like me; and I'm not going to stop.
When you try to please everyone generally you end up pleasing no one.