Well, its nice to see a gender bender... and not html
Still checking out, but so far, the story telling is extremely weak. And considering what is happening on the screen, its cringe worthy.
Just a few examples (feel free to correct me if I got something wrong, of misread somewhere):
* As I understood, the protagonist was in a hospital for 2 month. But as soon as he received a pill, he was released home? Wut? Just like that? The theme about the possible "side effects", or at least something like "after being under supervision for 1-2 weeks I was free from the disease" would be nice. At least I't might add more of context. OR, it is possible to play that kind of card - something like "Unfortunately for me it wasn't possible to recover. Lying on hospital bed, tired from crying and suffering from the pains, I was wasting my last days dreaming about fucking every single one of my female classmates, when suddenly a chance appeared! An experimental treatment which will force body reconstruction and supposedly will destroy cancer during internals change..." and then you have ways to explain delayed transformation or why it occurred in the first place, and why there were no fuse about it whatsoever and so on...
* Talking about a fuse. The hell is that family reaction(?). To hell with a woman, that Frank. The guy literary turned into a girl like 5 minutes ago, and he goes full "Oh my, pepe is so hard, want some?"? I'm okay will all the attention what he will give to "sudden girl in the house". but the way it currently utilized... 0 to 100 during how much, 5 panels? Its just look extremely lazy, as if it was done just to show some kinky content riiight noooow.
Also, "I have to go to school tomorrow"... why? It easily can be extended for something like "I spent almost the whole day(or more) with Sandra while she explained to be basics of girls hygiene" and other stuff (like buying some clothes). It will also help a little with this stupid call to principal - "hey, our boy has turned into a girl. No problem, I believe you immediately. I'll introduce him as transfer student TOMORROW. Lets now waste time, shall we?". I think those kind of stuff is needs to be added or extended, otherwise, as I already said, it seems extremely lazy. In my opinion, those kind of story cheaping out on story wouldn't make a favor to the project, and eventually will hit it like avalanche.
* About a cringe scenes. Will use Samanda introduction as example. "40 but still looks gorgeous". Wut? I understand that that the used models issues, but still... face expression + clothes combination, there is no way that this will strike beauty milf, and well, I'd say here we have 50+ maybe even 55+. Well, got some good laughs from that intro at least.
* Overall spelling I think is also an issue. Its really painful to read sometimes, to the point that I think that author is not a native speaker. I'm not a native speaker of course, but if I recall correctly, "i" should be "I"
. Or this stuff - "Yakuza is a criminal organization". WellYesButActuallyNo.png. Replace it with some random yakuza organization name.
Anyway, thanks for the effort. Maybe author will manage to turn this one into something good. For now I think its better to stay away from this, or at least wait until some story telling improvements, even outside the synopsis.
