here is my unofficial android port of School Transformation 0.1
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I am sorry if you dislike the game. I will work on it and will try to improve it over time. It is the first game that i started and i had no experience with DAZ Studio and Ren´Py before. My first effort was to get all game mechanics working and to get used to it. That´s why "in my honest opinion" the quality of School Transformation is badder then in Space Travels.Well, its nice to see a gender bender... and not html
Still checking out, but so far, the story telling is extremely weak. And considering what is happening on the screen, its cringe worthy.
Just a few examples (feel free to correct me if I got something wrong, of misread somewhere):
* As I understood, the protagonist was in a hospital for 2 month. But as soon as he received a pill, he was released home? Wut? Just like that? The theme about the possible "side effects", or at least something like "after being under supervision for 1-2 weeks I was free from the disease" would be nice. At least I't might add more of context. OR, it is possible to play that kind of card - something like "Unfortunately for me it wasn't possible to recover. Lying on hospital bed, tired from crying and suffering from the pains, I was wasting my last days dreaming about fucking every single one of my female classmates, when suddenly a chance appeared! An experimental treatment which will force body reconstruction and supposedly will destroy cancer during internals change..." and then you have ways to explain delayed transformation or why it occurred in the first place, and why there were no fuse about it whatsoever and so on...
* Talking about a fuse. The hell is that family reaction(?). To hell with a woman, that Frank. The guy literary turned into a girl like 5 minutes ago, and he goes full "Oh my, pepe is so hard, want some?"? I'm okay will all the attention what he will give to "sudden girl in the house". but the way it currently utilized... 0 to 100 during how much, 5 panels? Its just look extremely lazy, as if it was done just to show some kinky content riiight noooow.
Also, "I have to go to school tomorrow"... why? It easily can be extended for something like "I spent almost the whole day(or more) with Sandra while she explained to be basics of girls hygiene" and other stuff (like buying some clothes). It will also help a little with this stupid call to principal - "hey, our boy has turned into a girl. No problem, I believe you immediately. I'll introduce him as transfer student TOMORROW. Lets now waste time, shall we?". I think those kind of stuff is needs to be added or extended, otherwise, as I already said, it seems extremely lazy. In my opinion, those kind of story cheaping out on story wouldn't make a favor to the project, and eventually will hit it like avalanche.
* About a cringe scenes. Will use Samanda introduction as example. "40 but still looks gorgeous". Wut? I understand that that the used models issues, but still... face expression + clothes combination, there is no way that this will strike beauty milf, and well, I'd say here we have 50+ maybe even 55+. Well, got some good laughs from that intro at least.
* Overall spelling I think is also an issue. Its really painful to read sometimes, to the point that I think that author is not a native speaker. I'm not a native speaker of course, but if I recall correctly, "i" should be "I". Or this stuff - "Yakuza is a criminal organization". WellYesButActuallyNo.png. Replace it with some random yakuza organization name.
Anyway, thanks for the effort. Maybe author will manage to turn this one into something good. For now I think its better to stay away from this, or at least wait until some story telling improvements, even outside the synopsis.
And yes you guessed it right i am no native english speaker. But i will take one day and proofread everything again. I am not sure if some of the issues aren´t solved already in v0.2.
As always i thank everyone for every comment they share with me. If it is criticism or praise, you decide what we get out of the game. I am building this games because i have fun doing it and i hope that some people have fun playing them too.
-Jirina
I didn't said that I disliked it, I just pointed on quite obvious flaws. The gaming mechanics may be good and so on, BUT, those kind of games are extremely story dependent. If everything that is happening will make no sense, people will walk away before they even reach an interesting stuff. I, for example, wasn't able pass through class introduction because everything what happened before that point hurt me physically.
Also, you mentioned another game. Because, as you said, this is your very first experience in game making, it's really bad idea to try to work on multiple project simultaneously. With a lack of experience, both will end up half baked. It would be better to focus on one thing, test your skills and ideas, and when you are ready - unleash unlimited powah on the second one. Just be warned that attempt to catch two rabbits at once most likely will leave you empty handed.
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Ok needs an incest patch sooner rather than later. Some of the graphics kind of show inexperience (the skybox in the opening graphic comes to mind as well as the "alien abduction" scene). Also hire an english proofreader, you need one.
I'd like to see a good amount of lesbian content as well as an option to stay female for the end. I know a lot of people want futa content but I'm cool with it staying just female.
Problem on my first time through, I get into the ladies room have a conversation with the teacher and get bumped back to the title screen with no warning. This a bug? End of the update? If the latter a card saying as much would be nice.
Lot of potential here
I'd like to see a good amount of lesbian content as well as an option to stay female for the end. I know a lot of people want futa content but I'm cool with it staying just female.
Problem on my first time through, I get into the ladies room have a conversation with the teacher and get bumped back to the title screen with no warning. This a bug? End of the update? If the latter a card saying as much would be nice.
Lot of potential here
here is my unofficial android port of School Transformation 0.1
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I took the time that i had available this weekend and yesterday and proofread v0.2. I released a version 0.2b now for Tier 2 patron´s on my patreon page. So this one will become free instead of 0.2 later.
This new version contains some requested things:
1. Grammar corrections (i fixed as much failures that i could do by myself)
2. A few minor story changes/additions.
3. Added the "version ends" here screen.
4. And not requested, but i added a additional scene to the pregnancy events. (Let me know if it should stay inside or be removed for 0.3 again)
Have a nice week and stay healthy
Jirina
This new version contains some requested things:
1. Grammar corrections (i fixed as much failures that i could do by myself)
2. A few minor story changes/additions.
3. Added the "version ends" here screen.
4. And not requested, but i added a additional scene to the pregnancy events. (Let me know if it should stay inside or be removed for 0.3 again)
Have a nice week and stay healthy
Jirina
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Jirina nice game concept Loved the rape scene, I hope there will be way more of the new naive girl getting taken advantage of
Loved the rape scene, I hope there will be way more of the new naive girl getting taken advantage of There will be more for sure if you wish for it while you spot a shooting starJirina nice game concept
.School Transformation v0.2 will be released for Tier 1 Patron´s and the public this Saturday.
And if you missed it "Space Travels" v0.12 was already released for Tier 3 Patron´s with a packed zip size increase from 166mb to 366 mb. I am still thinking if i should work on Space Travels or School Transformation again for the next update cycle.
And if you missed it "Space Travels" v0.12 was already released for Tier 3 Patron´s with a packed zip size increase from 166mb to 366 mb. I am still thinking if i should work on Space Travels or School Transformation again for the next update cycle.
Hi there,
i just started a public POLL on my Patreon Page. Please take a short time to be a part of it.
The question is easy "What should i focus on?". What game do you like more, let me know on Patreon? We will do more Poll´s in the future.
Have a nice week
Jirina Fireheart
i just started a public POLL on my Patreon Page. Please take a short time to be a part of it.
The question is easy "What should i focus on?". What game do you like more, let me know on Patreon? We will do more Poll´s in the future.
Have a nice week
Jirina Fireheart
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