If you're work as a Wendy's employee is on par with your work as a proofer
Wendy's
Abyss Should fire you hahaha
The "this is porn" excuse is fucking lame. This story is AMAZINGLY good.
It deserves much more respect, honestly, than some lame assed "this is just porn".
"It's fetish"... X-Hamster... go there for fetish. It's not reality... dude... really?
ABYSS! You're next. Don't. Don't start. You have to take the good with the bad, we all do.
That is how we learn and grow and get better. I will admit I was overly harsh, but that
scene was beneath you dude. No I don't know you personally, but I can tell by the effort
you actually put in to this. I would love to know you. Share with you. Help you.
I LOVE what you are doing. This is why I was so mad.
Here:
There is ZERO reason Luke couldn't be home when Alice arrives.
Asleep and still exhausted from the night before. He only just got home. He was about
to text Alice when she started banging on his door. Nothing has to change. Just that.
Her banging brings Kate out. All of that happens as is. Only Luke is there panicking about
Kate letting things slip to Alice. Luke gets Alice alone for a second to tell her what happened.
We get that whole living room scene early. Sophie breaks them up because she wants to go
shopping. They invite Kate. Luke's not sure that's a good idea.
Sophie mentions the discount and Luke (after Liam) is sure he knows how she got it.
Again he worries she's a bad influence.
Inside Sophie and Kate compete to tease Luke. NOT THE AUDIENCE.
Alice is not happy about this and starts losing confidence. Luke sees this and encourages her.
Alice starts becoming more confident and competitive. Like she does in the scene. For Luke.
That's when Sophie starts up with her "you need to share Luke, it's only fair." crap.
Alice sees this as the same way Sophie manipulated her with Rob. Like she does.
Luke reassures her that he only wants her. Building back he confidence again.
You still have the same tit show, it's just played out the RIGHT way.
When they leave, Luke TEXTS Olivia that he accepts the job after spending time with Alice
and her being supportive of it. She tells him there is a package waiting for him.
He and Alice go back to the apartment to get it. They both discuss the camera.
Luke texts Olivia back about it. As it happens.
Alice reminds Luke that Sophie wants to be on OogleFans and they discuss it.
She says she doesn't think she can do that but is okay if Luke takes pics of Sophie.
So this doesn't look shady and out of character for Luke... who is already bumbling through
situations as is.
Luke gets a text from Liam about the yoga class. They agree to go.
The rest resumes as it does.
Everything fixed and better. Barely any new art needed.
I could do it easy in my mod with the art there is.
Speaking if my mod and the wonderful job of the proofers...
My mod fixed ever broken elements the new update brought with it by default.
It also corrects every single typo in the story. My mod is better proofed.
If you want a good and trustworthy proofer.. I'll do it. I already have.
Like I said I love this story and the characters. Liam is amazing! Do not fuck him up.
All because there is sex and fetish in something does not mean it's just "porn" and dismissed like that.
The art is amazing. The writing is fucking good if consistant. But that's not Abyss' fault.
That's the fault of you guys he rely on proofing it.
Fuck it. I'll use my developer signature this time. just so the next guy being all dismissive will get
that yeah. I'm a fellow dev / modder. You can see my work if you want references haha
Seriously. Abyss. Don't shy away. Keep interacting with your base. Confront the critics. Ask for
details on why they have problems. You don't have to bend to them. Just understand them.
Not everyone is going to have praise all the time.
And I mean it when I say, I'll happily help you if you want it. I want this to succeed so bad.
I really really do. Just like I wanted my devs to succeed. And they have been succeeding.
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