VN Ren'Py Abandoned Sin to Heaven [v0.4] [AG]

[eddie987]

Actually no, but perhaps my humor must have been a bit to cynical for you to have caught as was intended. Trust me, if I wanted to tell you or anyone to fuck off I would have used those exact words. I am actually here welcoming all feedback to the game, the story and being an active member of this community. All constructive criticism will be incorporated as we go forward. Non-constructive criticism will get a sarcastic response (most likely I will not be able to resist). I'm letting AG handle the other boards of which he is a member, but incorporating their feedback as well.

There are still huge plot holes and things that will require lots of time and effort to fix in the game. There are also options to skip the vast majority of lewd scenes with each woman in the game. What can't be fixed is everything in one go. The main dev (AG) chose a rewrite of day 1 and not a complete rework and rewrite. That meant choices had to be made on when things would be revealed, how they would unfold and how the game would progress. Day two is focused on giving the game something to interest people (sex) and day 3 (next release) is much more focused on the MC and relationships with his peers. Day 4 and day 5 will be mainly about explaining the MC's past and family while at the same time giving enough of the new and interactions with (lewds) current characters to be interesting.

One thing that isn't changing is the look of the Aunt (don't interact with her if you don't want to, but her look is her look). The storyline is not centered around ANY look or any single character other than the MC. Day 3's character adds are all 18-20 year old looks, so if that is more your thing, then January will be more to your liking. If you don't like the game at all, then there are tons of others to choose from that may fit your particular tastes better.

Presenting a main female character as loving and caring and then have her basically not giving a shit about the MC isn't just a plothole... She hasn't seen her son for four whole years and she chose to go to some stupid pageant the day he was coming back! She chose one child over the other, when even if that was a matter of life and death (like all beauty pageants are...) there are still two parents and two children, it wouldn't be so difficult for one of them to stay behind! And then she insists that he shouldn't go visit them for no apparent reason, just to act like a cunt! How on earth can she be likeable now?

When the MC introduces his family members he questions how his sister never tried modeling and then we find out she's on a pageant but he didn't have a clue about it! So we have another family member not giving enough shit about him to even bother telling him something that's supposed to be so important to her, she needed moral support in the middle of the night...

Then you have the aunt who bought a bed for the MC the previous day because she's a psychic or something, or because they had all the time to let him know he wouldn't find anyone home, but they didn't bother because "fuck that guy". Also you said the MC thinks the aunt is mad, when she isn't... Yeah, if you ring the bell and not wait for the cousin she still tells you to stay away from her son, so no... She is still mad. And the most ridiculus thing about it is that she holds a grudge to someone because, she thinks she gave her son wine (not even some hard liquor) when they were both dumb kids... Because that face tattoo is a sign of all the mature choices she made throughthout her life...

Do you know how easy it is to fix all this instead of adding more content to a story that doesn't make sense and without a complete rework?

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Same outcome without any of the female characters look indifferent, bipolar or straight up not giving a fuck about the MC and without changing the game's structure at all. The MC returns home after a long time->no one's there->he has to stay at his aunt's for a few days. Same story without a plothole every 5 lines... I didn't bother playing any of the new content, so I don't know if there are more plotholes later on. The last thing I'm going to say is that you can't build a great building on a weak foundation.

 

[sigalchris]

All good suggestions. Will take that into account and may further rewrite day 1 while AG works on the renders for day 3. Play the added content and give me your opinion eddie987 . All constructive criticism appreciated.

 

[Jonny Skull]

If you want to try 0.1 you are in luck I still have it.
Mega

Thanks! Played it and yep a wife dreaming about having sex with her husband. According to some people on F95 that is hardcore NTR. **Note: said scene has been removed in later versions**

The last thing I'm going to say is that you can't build a great building on a weak foundation.

These words really ring true talking about this game's beginning.

 

[Mentax]

Has anyone got a copy of the I/patch as all links to Lewd patcher are down. Thanks

 

[caxhub]

Download android v0.2b APK

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[Cryptor]

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[Mentax]

Thanks very much guys

 

[eddie987]

All good suggestions. Will take that into account and may further rewrite day 1 while AG works on the renders for day 3. Play the added content and give me your opinion eddie987 . All constructive criticism appreciated.

It's ok I guess. I don't think I can be objective at this point to be honest, since I already dislike all the female characters from the prologue, so I don't have something to keep me interested in the game, something to have me wanting to see what's going to happen next.

Laya is like a completely different person in the new content. I get that she's "thirsty" and everything would have make sense (well, "porn sense" at least) if she wasn't a total bitch when you choose to knock on the door instead of waiting for Jayden. She goes from "I know what kind of person you are/stay away from my son/don't try to do anything" to "nice cock, I'm gonna stroke it" and then she's suddenly interested in the MC's life at the boarding school and goes full on "honey/you're so sweet/I want us to reconnect" in about half a day...

Jenny is Jayden's girlfriend so I don't really care about her.

Claire seems to be your typical MILF next door, but that's not a bad thing for me, quite the opposite. I guess she's nice in general and it was good to see an option to roleplay as dom or sub and not a "forced" path with her.

Except for Laya's 180 and the MC still not being bothered the slightest that his family doesn't give a shit about him, I didn't see any inconsistencies in the new content. The only thing I found weird was the MC's attire while mowing Claire's lawn, like someone else already pointed out. I think he was wearing a swimsuit and not his underwear though, which is a bit less creepy, but still kind of weird.

 

[sigalchris]

I am currently doing a more thorough rewrite of episode 1 based on several good suggestions.

As far as the bathing suit, I would have prefered board shorts (I wore them quite often to mow lawns and do handyman work when I was a teen - unfortunately without the porn game results, but...), but went with what AG picked on that one.

 

[varkatzas666]

I was disappointed that... Maya, is gone. I think my least favorite character is Laya, I like tattooed women, but I don't know why I don't find her so attractive. Good renders, animations are regular, I hope there will be a new update soon.

 

[steelsmiter]

checkin' in for when this gets big enough.

 

[acondo]

Presenting a main female character as loving and caring and then have her basically not giving a shit about the MC isn't just a plothole... She hasn't seen her son for four whole years and she chose to go to some stupid pageant the day he was coming back! She chose one child over the other, when even if that was a matter of life and death (like all beauty pageants are...) there are still two parents and two children, it wouldn't be so difficult for one of them to stay behind! And then she insists that he shouldn't go visit them for no apparent reason, just to act like a cunt! How on earth can she be likeable now?

When the MC introduces his family members he questions how his sister never tried modeling and then we find out she's on a pageant but he didn't have a clue about it! So we have another family member not giving enough shit about him to even bother telling him something that's supposed to be so important to her, she needed moral support in the middle of the night...

Then you have the aunt who bought a bed for the MC the previous day because she's a psychic or something, or because they had all the time to let him know he wouldn't find anyone home, but they didn't bother because "fuck that guy". Also you said the MC thinks the aunt is mad, when she isn't... Yeah, if you ring the bell and not wait for the cousin she still tells you to stay away from her son, so no... She is still mad. And the most ridiculus thing about it is that she holds a grudge to someone because, she thinks she gave her son wine (not even some hard liquor) when they were both dumb kids... Because that face tattoo is a sign of all the mature choices she made throughthout her life...

Do you know how easy it is to fix all this instead of adding more content to a story that doesn't make sense and without a complete rework?

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Same outcome without any of the female characters look indifferent, bipolar or straight up not giving a fuck about the MC and without changing the game's structure at all. The MC returns home after a long time->no one's there->he has to stay at his aunt's for a few days. Same story without a plothole every 5 lines... I didn't bother playing any of the new content, so I don't know if there are more plotholes later on. The last thing I'm going to say is that you can't build a great building on a weak foundation.

Mate your awesome, they should hire you, or better yet make your own game, I’m not even kidding I would definitely be interested in playing a game with a story that actually makes sense.

 

[cougs]

Any update on the next release?

 

[katabasi]

still alive?

 

[AG.]

Any update on the next release?

Yes may be end of this month or 1st week of next month

 

[AG.]

Why game progresses is so slow it's being 3 months sinces last update
But the progress is only 40 % for next update

Yeah good question Bhaiya ji, this time I was rendering very High quality images with lot of animations included in upcoming update, so you can see some samples of scenes in my supporter's page.

 

[parqueo]

4 months and nothing

 

[Avaron1974]

4 months and nothing

Last update on Patreon was March 16th.

 

[parqueo]

Thread Updated: 2020-12-20
Release Date: 2020-12-20

 

[AG.]

4 months and nothing

New update schedule middle of this month with high rendered Images