I liked the update . It has a good pace and a nice crescendo. I enjoy that it is somewhat believable , plausible if you will. New mc is perfectly fine. I find the discussion about sin a bit out of place , mom was not religious and the whole "touch my sex" instead of cock or pussy sounds odd, maybe hypocritical , but definitely reminds me of my younger days were all the 80's porn mags were talking like that in the illustrations. Weird then, lame now.