hey mate, this is entertainment and we all have different styles, if you have any feedback please dm me
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I like the artificial look of the MC, but the writing is a problem. Its very difficult to read because dialog and descriptive text is mixed a lot.
In general when I see a name tag i expect dialog or thoughts - this is not fun to read.
The start with that insta/social media talk was hard to read ... I am not even sure that it was englisch ^^
Overall the dialog is very ... strange? ...
And then we have the old/ugly dude thing - that is a real turn off for me. That she has her old husband - k. But that "hobo" (aka the pyjama guy) is weird - especially because he doesnt look like a hobo. He is very clean and well maintained - except the missing clothing parts.
Last point are the "choices" - so far you only trigger dreams/daydreams that dont change anything. I am never a big fan of dreams in these games, because they are not "real" - often it is just a tool to add lewd (cheating/corruption) scenes in games early on without impact.
So far it is a kinetic game where you can trigger some daydreams or not - it doesnt matter at all.
I hope the dialog and narration gets adjusted and that there will be more impactful choices in the future.
In general when I see a name tag i expect dialog or thoughts - this is not fun to read.
The start with that insta/social media talk was hard to read ... I am not even sure that it was englisch ^^
Overall the dialog is very ... strange? ...
And then we have the old/ugly dude thing - that is a real turn off for me. That she has her old husband - k. But that "hobo" (aka the pyjama guy) is weird - especially because he doesnt look like a hobo. He is very clean and well maintained - except the missing clothing parts.
Last point are the "choices" - so far you only trigger dreams/daydreams that dont change anything. I am never a big fan of dreams in these games, because they are not "real" - often it is just a tool to add lewd (cheating/corruption) scenes in games early on without impact.
So far it is a kinetic game where you can trigger some daydreams or not - it doesnt matter at all.
I hope the dialog and narration gets adjusted and that there will be more impactful choices in the future.
thanks for your feedback the dialog is one of the most important things on our list
As for social media slang, that's how people talk, we did quite a bit of research on this also how does a hobo look like?
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the fmc is hot asf and those filthy old farts are making me more wet than niagra falls
we need all that water to fight global warming...keep it coming
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thank you mate, we appreciate the feedbackI'd like to say I see a vast improvement in the game from its debut.
Good work Greuceanu
I don't know if Sophia could get any more beautiful.
i will challenge that (Sofia being more beautiful) for next releaseI'd like to say I see a vast improvement in the game from its debut.
Good work Greuceanu
I don't know if Sophia could get any more beautiful.
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Yeah not really the insta demographic on my side ^^thanks for your feedback the dialog is one of the most important things on our list
also how does a hobo look like?
Not that clean at least? ... I mean, his pyjama pants are really clean and in pristine condition.
As who somebody could care less about NTR and who likes Female MC games (just getting that out of the way that I'm generally not too picky or offended)......I'm not sure you can run into a bigger turnoff in game then having the first 2 spread out payout scenes be "dream sequences" that don't actually happen.
I mean it's already kind of a 101 rule that 95% of players are going to hate dream scenes. 2 back to back to start? Hovering over that exit game button now.
I mean it's already kind of a 101 rule that 95% of players are going to hate dream scenes. 2 back to back to start? Hovering over that exit game button now.
Well it's called character and story progression, if you aren't a fan of the story that's okay, we aren't going to make everyone happy.
Thank you for you opinion but we have a plan that we plan to execute
It's not a a matter of liking the story. It boils down to an almost universal preference you don't essentially cheapen the buildup and latter payouts that keep us playing your game. *Especially* for those of us that like a little story with our spanks btw.Well it's called character and story progression, if you aren't a fan of the story that's okay, we aren't going to make everyone happy.
Thank you for you opinion but we have a plan that we plan to execute
Just my 2 cents observation/advice. Next time you find yourself debating a way to cram some early sex content into game and you think a dream might be a good way to do it...pick something else. Add a slutty side character to sacrifice early on or to make a one night stand cameo, ect
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1. I would strongly avoid dream sequences, for some reason they provide zero erotic stimulation for me and many others; from everything I've researched from being in so many threads on these forums. But instead, those renders can be re-used for actual events that occur later, and without the purple haze special effect over it.
2. The homeless guy doesn't look homeless, I'd try to find actual ragged clothes that a homeless person would wear. Homeless have to wear shirts usually and a jacket because they have to shield themselves from the cold. You can take a normal pants texture, find a dirty texture online and just overlay it real fast in photoshop, then just put tear effects on it for a transparent overlay texture.
3. It's not believable for a homeless guy to be able to stand in a coffee shop without consequence unless he has some prior arrangement with the girl who works there, but that would deviate from the main character's story unless you truly have time to flesh that out. Believability is extremely important in regards to eroticism. Believability --> Immersion --> Erotic
4. I'd put the homeless guy in an alleyway next to the coffee shop, that way he can lure her into the alleyway, THEN grope her without risk of being caught so easily(more believable), because the alleyway adds a degree of seclusion and privacy, it would make the situation more believable. The alleyway also adds the ability to add a dirty ass mattress somewhere private where he convinces her to go. Then from there is slowly escalates into him bringin more homeless guys for her to suck off on the dirty mattress, then it escalates later into her being so corrupted she ends up making porn with homeless guys which ruins her career in one field, but she becomes popular pornstar for having sex with dirty homeless men, causing her husband to kill himself by blowing his brains out hahahah. I broke a golden rule, violence like that is a turn off, so instead the husband gets turned on by it shamefully and turns into a cuck who watches her porn videos or something.
5. If the main girl can be easily recognized, she would probably be reluctant to look so stunning in public because attracting too much attention can get annoying. Most celebrities try to hide their identities in public, but perhaps the homeless guy recognizes her, and when she asks him how he recognizes her, he can show her a magazine her carries of her with him, but it has cum stains on it and she gets upset but secretly excited. Then when she gets offended he can blame her for looking so beautiful, and that he has no control over it, eliciting some sympathy from her, then he gets an erection under his pants and she sees it, and he apologizes saying she's just so beautiful and bla bla bla, sweet talking her, but eventually he does get more lewd and perverted because he's trying to manipulate her secretly; so he's not actually nice, but a manipulative lazy bum.
6. Also, why is it important to flesh out the entire coffee shop scene with so much detail? She's just buying coffee. You could portray her as going into the coffee shop, you don't even have to show the inside, then quickly shift to a scene where she gets a coffee and is walking out, that way you can save time and resources.
6a. Instead of her having sex in a clean bathroom in the coffee shop, why doesn't the homeless guy take her to a dirty bathroom he normally goes to piss in. Clean bathroom = turn off IMO.
7. She's so stunningly beautiful that it crosses into a point where it's unrelatable. In my entire life, I don't think I've ever seen a woman walk down the street so makeup heavy wearing such enticing clothing during broad day light while performing casual activity. I think I have a few times, but it's extremely rare, maybe at night outside of a club, but just during casual day to day activity? Sometimes less is more.
8. I'm not sure making her husband an old man is a good idea. If Old Men are her forbidden kink, then her husband should be the opposite of her kink, someone around her age who is stereotypical perfect husband, then for some reason, she is attracted to ugly homeless guys and dirty old perverted men because she's secretly a masochist.
If someone disagrees with me, I'd really be open to hearing your counter ideas in a productive discussion. I'd even read your response over. Cheers!
2. The homeless guy doesn't look homeless, I'd try to find actual ragged clothes that a homeless person would wear. Homeless have to wear shirts usually and a jacket because they have to shield themselves from the cold. You can take a normal pants texture, find a dirty texture online and just overlay it real fast in photoshop, then just put tear effects on it for a transparent overlay texture.
3. It's not believable for a homeless guy to be able to stand in a coffee shop without consequence unless he has some prior arrangement with the girl who works there, but that would deviate from the main character's story unless you truly have time to flesh that out. Believability is extremely important in regards to eroticism. Believability --> Immersion --> Erotic
4. I'd put the homeless guy in an alleyway next to the coffee shop, that way he can lure her into the alleyway, THEN grope her without risk of being caught so easily(more believable), because the alleyway adds a degree of seclusion and privacy, it would make the situation more believable. The alleyway also adds the ability to add a dirty ass mattress somewhere private where he convinces her to go. Then from there is slowly escalates into him bringin more homeless guys for her to suck off on the dirty mattress, then it escalates later into her being so corrupted she ends up making porn with homeless guys which ruins her career in one field, but she becomes popular pornstar for having sex with dirty homeless men, causing her husband
5. If the main girl can be easily recognized, she would probably be reluctant to look so stunning in public because attracting too much attention can get annoying. Most celebrities try to hide their identities in public, but perhaps the homeless guy recognizes her, and when she asks him how he recognizes her, he can show her a magazine her carries of her with him, but it has cum stains on it and she gets upset but secretly excited. Then when she gets offended he can blame her for looking so beautiful, and that he has no control over it, eliciting some sympathy from her, then he gets an erection under his pants and she sees it, and he apologizes saying she's just so beautiful and bla bla bla, sweet talking her, but eventually he does get more lewd and perverted because he's trying to manipulate her secretly; so he's not actually nice, but a manipulative lazy bum.
6. Also, why is it important to flesh out the entire coffee shop scene with so much detail? She's just buying coffee. You could portray her as going into the coffee shop, you don't even have to show the inside, then quickly shift to a scene where she gets a coffee and is walking out, that way you can save time and resources.
6a. Instead of her having sex in a clean bathroom in the coffee shop, why doesn't the homeless guy take her to a dirty bathroom he normally goes to piss in. Clean bathroom = turn off IMO.
7. She's so stunningly beautiful that it crosses into a point where it's unrelatable. In my entire life, I don't think I've ever seen a woman walk down the street so makeup heavy wearing such enticing clothing during broad day light while performing casual activity. I think I have a few times, but it's extremely rare, maybe at night outside of a club, but just during casual day to day activity? Sometimes less is more.
8. I'm not sure making her husband an old man is a good idea. If Old Men are her forbidden kink, then her husband should be the opposite of her kink, someone around her age who is stereotypical perfect husband, then for some reason, she is attracted to ugly homeless guys and dirty old perverted men because she's secretly a masochist.
If someone disagrees with me, I'd really be open to hearing your counter ideas in a productive discussion. I'd even read your response over
. Cheers!
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great points, I will reach out via DM and to respond to each points, again great feedback and to point 6a. this was the release 1.0 and the feedback was to change the enviroment1. I would strongly avoid dream sequences, for some reason they provide zero erotic stimulation for me and many others; from everything I've researched from being in so many threads on these forums. But instead, those renders can be re-used for actual events that occur later, and without the purple haze special effect over it.
2. The homeless guy doesn't look homeless, I'd try to find actual ragged clothes that a homeless person would wear. Homeless have to wear shirts usually and a jacket because they have to shield themselves from the cold. You can take a normal pants texture, find a dirty texture online and just overlay it real fast in photoshop, then just put tear effects on it for a transparent overlay texture.
3. It's not believable for a homeless guy to be able to stand in a coffee shop without consequence unless he has some prior arrangement with the girl who works there, but that would deviate from the main character's story unless you truly have time to flesh that out. Believability is extremely important in regards to eroticism. Believability --> Immersion --> Erotic
4. I'd put the homeless guy in an alleyway next to the coffee shop, that way he can lure her into the alleyway, THEN grope her without risk of being caught so easily(more believable), because the alleyway adds a degree of seclusion and privacy, it would make the situation more believable. The alleyway also adds the ability to add a dirty ass mattress somewhere private where he convinces her to go. Then from there is slowly escalates into him bringin more homeless guys for her to suck off on the dirty mattress, then it escalates later into her being so corrupted she ends up making porn with homeless guys which ruins her career in one field, but she becomes popular pornstar for having sex with dirty homeless men, causing her husband to kill himself by blowing his brains out hahahah.
5. If the main girl can be easily recognized, she would probably be reluctant to look so stunning in public because attracting too much attention can get annoying. Most celebrities try to hide their identities in public, but perhaps the homeless guy recognizes her, and when she asks him how he recognizes her, he can show her a magazine her carries of her with him, but it has cum stains on it and she gets upset but secretly excited. Then when she gets offended he can blame her for looking so beautiful, and that he has no control over it, eliciting some sympathy from her, then he gets an erection under his pants and she sees it, and he apologizes saying she's just so beautiful and bla bla bla, sweet talking her, but eventually he does get more lewd and perverted because he's trying to manipulate her secretly; so he's not actually nice, but a manipulative lazy bum.
6. Also, why is it important to flesh out the entire coffee shop scene with so much detail? She's just buying coffee. You could portray her as going into the coffee shop, you don't even have to show the inside, then quickly shift to a scene where she gets a coffee and is walking out, that way you can save time and resources.
6a. Instead of her having sex in a clean bathroom in the coffee shop, why doesn't the homeless guy take her to a dirty bathroom he normally goes to piss in. Clean bathroom = turn off IMO.
7. She's so stunningly beautiful that it crosses into a point where it's unrelatable. In my entire life, I don't think I've ever seen a woman walk down the street so makeup heavy wearing such enticing clothing during broad day light while performing casual activity. I think I have a few times, but it's extremely rare, maybe at night outside of a club, but just during casual day to day activity? Sometimes less is more.
8. I'm not sure making her husband an old man is a good idea. If Old Men are her forbidden kink, then her husband should be the opposite of her kink, someone around her age who is stereotypical perfect husband, then for some reason, she is attracted to ugly homeless guys and dirty old perverted men because she's secretly a masochist.
If someone disagrees with me, I'd really be open to hearing your counter ideas in a productive discussion. I'd even read your response over
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Hi buddy, overall you have great renders (I would say you have one of the best around), but unfortunately theres something about the story that isnt making sense or is hard to understand, Im not a writer or something like that but as I read before, some of them have good ideas. Keep up the good work with your renders and try to improve your writing and sequence of story, you will make a great game.
A little smaller breasts maybe, closer to the Greek canon?i will challenge that (Sofia being more beautiful) for next release