VN Ren'Py Completed Something to Write About: The Author [Ch. 7.1] [STWAdev]

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DA22

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Of course in a wish fulfillment fantasy you want to have your wishes fulfilled, and them all staying together as the "Gang of Seven" even if not romantically involved would be absolutely fine. But I still want to argue that it is kinda realistic that groups disperse. Some find work elsewhere, or another love, or just want to see the world. When I look back to my friends from that period in time quite a few are "gone". Heck, I was "gone" twice, only I came back. With some we try to meet up as often as possible. Others just fade out of our lives, no hard feelings. Of course, many are still around.

But let's also not forget that - except for Lyndie, Aoife, and B, or MC and Chris - these are not lifelong friends in this group but a crew which had fun for a couple of weeks and weren't even all connected that much. What did Drusilla and Kimberley have in common despite having been at the same party twice, so to speak.
MC they did have in common and they seemed to leave him in a hurry after the choice, now I know this is a reverse harem game so it makes some sense and will not look like a harem too much, but there are things in between a harem and this. Like I said it just is a little nitpick on my side on an overall good game. :p
 

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Well, this game has some longer words which noobtrain might not know and consider wrong?!

I consider this definitely one of the better VNs in terms of language.
Agreed. But I tend to have four tiers when it comes to grammar.

1 - Nearly perfect. Can have some errors like using wrong spelling of a word such as peaked/peeked/piqued or incorrect punctuation usage like its/it's or apostrophe s at the end of a word ending with "s"' such as "Tess's car" rather than "Tess' car".

2 - Pretty good. In addition to the above; long run-on sentences, a larger number of misspelled words, no punctuation, etc.

3 - MTL tier grammar. Self explanatory, really.

4 - Writer is jerking off to the content while typing with one hand. I think we've all seen this. Writing is closer to "chat-speak". Tons of misspellings and punctuation errors, clipped responses, texting shorthand, etc.
 

Hawkeye3d

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I guess I'm going to be the one to disagree with the above comments. Yes, the MC appears to not have much bravo to himself but as it is mentioned he is going through past drama, thus in his building character stage of life. I found the story and characters in the game to be fun and sexy. I only got to chapter 4 so far but for me it is a win. Thanks to the developer.
 

Vasin

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apostrophe s at the end of a word ending with "s"' such as "Tess's car" rather than "Tess' car".
General consensus is that former spelling is correct. Latter is an alternative rule that only applies to making proper nouns ending in S possessive or if the word following the possessive starts with an S.
 
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Cartageno

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General consensus is that former spelling is correct. Latter is an alternative rule that only applies to making proper nouns ending in S possessive or if the word following the possessive starts with an S.
In essence we come to the same result but the way I understand it is that we first must differentiate whether that "s" (or other letter making an s-ish sound) is part of the name proper (like with Tess above) or part of a plural (like "the Smiths"). The latter does not allow for an "s's" construction but needs just the apostrophe added. The former (Tess) can have both "Tess's" and "Tess'". However I see no connection to proper nouns or any preference of usage (in terms of appropriateness) when checking different sources. Just both versions are correct. If you're writing a novel, knock yourself out.

You should probably decide on one way and stick with it. A sentence like "Tess's and Jess' parents" must be awful whichever version you prefer ;)
 

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New Walkthrough


Hey everyone, here's my new walkthrough for the game. I hope with it you will all be able to enjoy every ending.
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Enjoy the game,
Mr. Bubu
Thank you so very very much for making this! Sure wish I had this months ago!
 
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mbs123a

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great game. lovely story. was fearing a acting lesson whenever the story went up on mountain happy charts. played it 2 times for 2 endings. like the story and the aura of the game. solid Poggers.
 
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Walter Victor

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before I install the game, which mod should I get? It shouldn't really matter right?
First off, I haven't tried either of them.

Each mod is done by an experienced modder, so I wouldn't expect problems, especially since both have been out for ages. KoGa3 offers audio, since there is none in the game. IAmAb offers something called a 'Linear Mod' which might allow you to play the game one time through.

My suggestion would be to look at the features for each and choose the one that appeals to how you want to play the game.
 

Juicer97

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Interesting game. Would've liked it more if I found any characters besides the freckled blondie attractive and some animations. Also mc's dik looks a bit ridiculous, like it's not made of flesh. Good story, but the porn part was mid.
 
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naniwtf

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has there beem any news on the remake & steam release on discord/patreon? i remember last year he only had like 2ch left to remake.
 
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I like the game, but the clothing made the whole yacht scenario feel odd to me. All the build up regarding how it was going to be a really fancy party and the MC doesn't even wear mismatched pieces of clothes and not even a jacket? Really contrasts with the women (mostly) wearing evening dresses.

Other than that nitpick, impressive game so far.
I just started playing the game this week. I'm at the dressing room scene and it was so absurd that I switched over here to see if anyone had made the same comment.

MC: I need to get a tuxedo for this fancy black tie party.

Christine: You need to dress to the nines!

MC: *puts on a three-piece suit, not black tie but decent*

Christine: *horrified* This is way too casual, you can't!

MC: *puts on slacks, a black shirt, and ugly tie like middle-management at a low end fast food restaurant*

Christine: *looks on in total awe* That's so elegant!

It has been excellent otherwise but this outfit thing is so bad that it jumps out.
 
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Cartageno

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I just started playing the game this week. I'm at the dressing room scene and it was so absurd that I switched over here to see if anyone had made the same comment.

MC: I need to get a tuxedo for this fancy black tie party.

Christine: You need to dress to the nines!

MC: *puts on a three-piece suit, not black tie but decent*

Christine: *horrified* This is way too casual, you can't!

MC: *puts on slacks, a black shirt, and ugly tie like middle-management at a low end fast food restaurant*

Christine: *looks on in total awe* That's so elegant!

It has been excellent otherwise but this outfit thing is so bad that it jumps out.
Didn't really remember it so I had to redo that scene. I certainly disagree with your impression about the three-piece suit, that is something that a traveling salesman for some low end product might wear, but you're correct, at least it is a three-piece suit, whereas the alternative is not as bad as you make it out (apart from the tie, that actually is bad with a capital B), and the lines are also not entirely true (it is not "too casual" in game), but you certainly got a point there.
 
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Didn't really remember it so I had to redo that scene. I certainly disagree with your impression about the three-piece suit, that is something that a traveling salesman for some low end product might wear, but you're correct, at least it is a three-piece suit, whereas the alternative is not as bad as you make it out (apart from the tie, that actually is bad with a capital B), and the lines are also not entirely true (it is not "too casual" in game), but you certainly got a point there.
I didn't think the three-piece suit looked good, so we don't disagree on that (I actually had a longer bit about the suit description but cut it because it was rambly, lol). I'm just observing that at least it is a suit, since the night before/morning of (in-game) the MC is freaking out that he doesn't own black tie.

I'm joking with the "that's too casual" reply (although it's a reference to what she says in the previous café scene, where she says the occasion requires dressing up).

Tie-with-no-jacket is retail/restaurant management wear, not "dressing up" (which is what it's treated as in-story). No one will see a person in that and think it's this formal outfit let alone praise someone for dressing up so much.
 
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I didn't think the three-piece suit looked good, so we don't disagree on that (I actually had a longer bit about the suit description but cut it because it was rambly, lol). I'm just observing that at least it is a suit, since the night before/morning of (in-game) the MC is freaking out that he doesn't own black tie.

I'm joking with the "that's too casual" reply (although it's a reference to what she says in the previous café scene, where she says the occasion requires dressing up).

Tie-with-no-jacket is retail/restaurant management wear, not "dressing up" (which is what it's treated as in-story). No one will see a person in that and think it's this formal outfit let alone praise someone for dressing up so much.
Well, it is dressing up - but not for this occasion. It's dressing up for a date maybe, for some birthday party which is not too big and the date is not to specific. I. e. nobody would bat an eye if you showed up in jeans and a clean T shirt but you want to make an effort. (That tie tho ... and generally it is just proper trousers, a shirt, and a tie, without a care of whether they match in general) But you're absolutely correct it isn't remotely adequate for the occasion. (Neither is the suit as we agreed, but they'd let you in - and then would be talking behind your back)

Then again, MC is an artist, and given the odd stuff many sports celebs or musicians or movie stars choose to sport at formal occasions, it is better. But not outrageous enough probably.
 

Cartageno

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Just for those who as me didn't remember, the two outfits. (In spoiler so it doesn't blow up the thread)

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