VN Ren'Py Strangers on Paper [Ch.2 v0.2.2] [Gloomy Ghost Studio]

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Hicks233

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Picked up the game on steam. Beautifully lit renders, sensitive writing and the inclusion of the guide/walkthrough functions in game is really nicely done.

Looking forward to seeing how this continues. The bakery would look really nice with the yellow/orange walls as well.

I'd laugh if "Lilith" turns out to be Amy as well.
 
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Very nicely made optics and talented writing. The people feel much more real than in most AVNs. Sadly thats not a good thing if you don't enjoy the person. Amy was endearing at first, seeming like a good girl pushed to do stupid stuff by her evil sister - but getting to know her dreams and problems quickly changed that. 'Young marriage is lame and more "experiences" will make you happy' is getting old. That we as the MC are meddling in an engagement 'because other guy doesn't love her enough' is uncomfortable. Becca is cute in the moments she is small and feminine, but that is 2% of the time and otherwise it feels like we are competing for who is the more masculine man with her. MC has some good back and forth with the girls, but in the end it still feels rather friendzone-ish than flirty or erotic. What girls go for when they are ready to 'settle'. Still, well done. Listening to all the trauma and problem dumping made me feel like watching a show for women, though. And the conversations about all the writing and music are boring. Thats why guys don't enjoy being friends with women lol. Why put that in a game. The sex scene was erotic to a degree, but felt like a gay hollywood movie for women at the same time with the not showing of the fucking and the bypassing of the MCs orgasm. And why not show the shower action afterwards? I don't listen to all the talking to then have the sexual stuff skipped. Then I can just watch a stupid rom-com. Also didn't like the shilling for the gay couple and the frequent subtle trashing of religion.

In summary I'm really confused why men enjoy this game. The romance didn't catch on with me at all. Neither did the sex scene.


Overall, strong case of well made game that absolutely does not fit my taste. Don't give rating therefore.

Still good wishes to the devs and fans of the game.
 
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Very nicely made optics and talented writing.... (snip)
I thought this was a very good review. It was constructive, well-reasoned, and well-explained. You very effectively communicated what you felt were the flaws with the project.

And then you said this:

In summary I'm really confused why men enjoy this game.
And *I'm* really confused as to why you feel that you, personally, are the barometer for how "men" should think and feel. Is it that difficult to be conscious of the fact that everybody has different experiences, and to which they all react and respond differently? Am I less of a man in your eyes because I disagree with your subjective interpretations of what's happening in this story?

You're more than entitled to your opinions, and as you said, this project did not fit your taste. Perfectly fair. But why generalize and imply that your emotional standards are the bar to which the rest of us must aspire? Tastes differ. Tastes change. Your tastes are yours alone.

Even if I disagree with your opinions, I honestly enjoyed reading another perspective. As reviews go (especially on this site), yours was helpful... without that one sentence, it might have been perfect.
 

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I thought this was a very good review. It was constructive, well-reasoned, and well-explained. You very effectively communicated what you felt were the flaws with the project.

And then you said this:



And *I'm* really confused as to why you feel that you, personally, are the barometer for how "men" should think and feel. Is it that difficult to be conscious of the fact that everybody has different experiences, and to which they all react and respond differently? Am I less of a man in your eyes because I disagree with your subjective interpretations of what's happening in this story?

You're more than entitled to your opinions, and as you said, this project did not fit your taste. Perfectly fair. But why generalize and imply that your emotional standards are the bar to which the rest of us must aspire? Tastes differ. Tastes change. Your tastes are yours alone.

Even if I disagree with your opinions, I honestly enjoyed reading another perspective. As reviews go (especially on this site), yours was helpful... without that one sentence, it might have been perfect.
Thanks for the fair reply.

Although I was ranting too much, the way you understood that one sentence is not how I meant it. It's a genuine interest in trying to understand the other perspective. Specifically,

1) if men here enjoyed the long conversations about music with Becca which seemed as if they were supposed to feel like 'deep' spiritual/philosophical talk but to me felt like puperty-age girl-wisdom,

2) if and why men here enjoyed the sex scene which to me felt promising in the beginning, but then utterly unsatisfying as it was short, didn't show much, and had no real climax,

3) and if the bike trip with Amy is how men here would imagine a romantic date for themselves as to me it felt like a mix of buddies taunting each other jokingly and a guy trying to get out of the friendzone, but I didn't feel a romantic spark that would make me want to embrace, kiss, and sleep with the girl.


If you and others feel different about those I was interested in how and why. As I could not understand nor imagine it.

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To address all of these .. this is a game written by a human being with sensibilities and wants and needs and likes. She writes what she likes and has a partner who makes fabulous looking models for game characters. Soap operas and drama adjacent to good looking models are a draw in most creative fields and the underlying condition in many cinema, television and other art in general to draw a big audience is the good looking actresses, most of the times. Even soap operas have more women than men, even though females make the bulk of the audience, as they want to identify with the heroines and see different women go for same men from different backgorunds and take the story in many different directions.

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Men enjoy seeing beautiful girls and interacting with them . Sometimes that is all they have right now for cuddling their hunger for compassion or beauty in their lives. Just lose yourself in the unnatural beauty, the stupid ideas a drop dead gorgeous girl would get hung on while seemingly having the world at her feet.

Men enjoy having a way to attract good looking girls, as that is not so common in real life, so the notion fo having her be interested, as her own troubles feel as the most minute trifles to men who did not win the gene lottery.

Men also like to see younger, hungry, lively, upbeat partners that are also insatiable, like Amy is for romance and Becca is for intimacy.


The way the plot armored girls can do no wrong while objectively being actually insane, Becca one actual escort, true sex worker, she handles it like her calling, and Amy a serial man eater embroiling men left and right into her fantasy round about life carousel.
 
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To address all of these .. this is a game written by a woman.
That explains a lot. The game felt like girl porn - just without the sex. One girl trying to fix her trauma, the other one trying to escape her cage. Two seperate stories of a girl roadtrip, where one of the 'besties' is having a beard.

But it doesn't explain the sex scene. By now female written sex scenes are often the better ones as they still know how to write an unapologetically proactive man leading in bed. Even more disappointed by this sex scene now.
 
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Well ... the thing is .. you have to think about what draws Becca to so many partners she has and also about the manner in which these many partners, that she has, interact with her and behave in her presence and towards her:
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Saw this kind of mindfulness about performing sexual acts for money in a series where the minute understanding of the struggles, sexually and emotionally, that the ”patients” had as a condition such a person would mend or alleviate or medicate or cure by her many performances.
 
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Well ... the thing is .. you have to think about what draws Becca to so many partners she has and also about the manner in which these many partners, that she has, interact with her and behave in her presence and towards her:
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Saw this kind of mindfulness about performing sexual acts for money in a series where the minute understanding of the struggles, sexually and emotionally, that the ”patients” had as a condition such a person would mend or alleviate or medicate or cure by her many performances.
tbh I don't see any kind of connection to reality in this VN as far as attraction/sex goes

Becca is the broken whore who is having sex as a distraction from suffering, but MC would never get out of her friendzone except she is in an emergency/drunk/etc. (MC tries to do the Capt'n save a hoe)

Amy is the self-centered future wife who will divorce her husband because feminism told her that he doesn't appreciate her enough, only to find that no man she ever would look at is interested in commiting to a 40yo karen. Cats it will be. And MC would never leave her friendzone as he even loses out to pets as the corgi scene hilariously shows.
 

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Thanks for the fair reply.

Although I was ranting too much, the way you understood that one sentence is not how I meant it. It's a genuine interest in trying to understand the other perspective.
Fair enough. It's possible that I've spent too much time here becoming desensitized to the number of people who go through life assuming that *everybody* thinks the way they do and something in me finally tripped lol. That it came on the heels of discussions of "masculinity" in the body of your post probably caused me to assign a heavier weight to your choice of wording than I should have. Apologies for any confusion, even if my overall point stands when it comes to [gestures broadly at everybody else]...

For the rest, I'm happy to provide my thoughts, but I want to preface it by saying that I haven't played this game since the last update came out, so I'm relying entirely on months-old recollections, which I admit may or may not be accurate. So generally speaking, take this with a grain of salt ... though I should really play it again anyway, so I think I will. :)

Broadly speaking, what I enjoy most about SoP is the character development, both in the sense that we learn (through dialog, asides, etc.) enough to get a good picture of the individuals, but also that there is enough left unsaid to allow room for interpretation. In my case, that allows me to dabble in the psychology of the characters and the situations and, in some cases, better relate to them.

1) if men here enjoyed the long conversations about music with Becca which seemed as if they were supposed to feel like 'deep' spiritual/philosophical talk but to me felt like puperty-age girl-wisdom,
I'll admit up front that, as LIs go, I'm much much more a fan of Amy than I am Becca. I don't find the latter all that attractive if I'm being honest, but I still enjoyed her arc because of the dynamic between her and MC -- which I think is sort of a mix of confusion, shyness, hesitancy, and curiosity. They've known each other forever, but to MC, she was always his best friend's little sister... Hands off, because "bro code" and all. But it's established that there was always some kind of spark or thread, lurking in the background when it came to the two of them.

At the same time, the Becca MC sees now is not the same Becca he "grew up" around. She's harder. Cynical. Blue-haired. Evasive. Lesbian... maybe? She's clearly put up walls, and MC doesn't really know why. On some level, she's still the girl he's had a sort-of crush on since he hit puberty, but as the opportunity arises to spend time with her, he has no idea how to navigate the newly built walls around her. My sense of the long discussions about music and such was that MC is trying to gently poke and prod at those walls, to see if there's any possibility of a way in. The conversations aren't deep because Becca won't let anybody in more than she's comfortable with, but the whole thing to me seemed more like a tentative dance... who is she really? Does she feel anything for me? Do I still feel anything for her? Will she ever trust me? What happened in her past? Does she even like guys? ... it's like MC is trying really hard to be respectful, not only of Becca, but also of his friend/her brother (who's name I've forgotten), while also trying to tiptoe forward and scout out the possibilities.

It's a very delicate proposition, and I thought the writers pulled it off well. So I enjoyed that arc, not because of the content of their discussions, but moreso because of what isn't said, and the implications of it.

2) if and why men here enjoyed the sex scene which to me felt promising in the beginning, but then utterly unsatisfying as it was short, didn't show much, and had no real climax,
I generally agree with this. As sex scenes go, it wasn't much, and if I were only here to fap, I'd probably be pissed. But following the long-ish buildup, and the aforementioned "dance", my main takeaway from their encounter was that it was... awkward. And I think that made a lot of sense, given the context. There's still a lot that both of them need to figure out/understand about each other, but it was like the first sign that Becca's walls (or at least a small part of them) could come down.

3) and if the bike trip with Amy is how men here would imagine a romantic date for themselves as to me it felt like a mix of buddies taunting each other jokingly and a guy trying to get out of the friendzone, but I didn't feel a romantic spark that would make me want to embrace, kiss, and sleep with the girl.
The bike trip on its own? No, I don't necessarily think that would be the defining event that would make me want to embrace/kiss/sleep with the girl. For me, when it comes to Amy, those sparks all came during Act 1 -- the playful flirting, the signs of unease around her impending marriage, the frolicking in the pool. Any/all of those would probably be enough for me to be captivated by somebody like Amy. To have the previously unattainable, rich cheerleader drop down and spend a lovely evening on my level would absolutely start giving me ideas, and likely did for the MC as well.

Of course, there's the whole pesky "getting married" thing throwing a wrench into those ideas. So what's a respectful, upstanding guy to do in this day and age? Stand aside, of course, and let the adult woman make her own decisions. But a night like that ... *sparks* like that ... are not easy to brush aside. So when she suddenly reappears -- complaining further about her insecurities about her future, no less -- then, yeah... I'm gonna jump at the chance to spend any time I can with her, especially if it helps her realize that there might be other, better, options.

But here, again, as with Becca, it's not that simple. MC can't just come out and say "your fiance's an ass, you should date me instead" because, frankly, they don't know each other that well. So it becomes another delicate dance between showing empathy, conveying difficult truths (about the world, and her relationship), while also not coming across purely as some sort of uninvited white knight.

I agree with you that their excursion does feel at times like he's just trying to get out of the friendzone. But let's face it ... he is. He just can't be obvious about it. I think it's interesting to watch the internal struggle MC has to manage throughout their interactions, some selfish, some unselfish, and that tightrope walk is what I enjoyed reading/watching when it came to Amy.

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Cheers, my friend ... and thanks for the opportunity to engage politely. :)
 
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Fair enough. It's possible that I've spent too much time here becoming desensitized to the number of people who go through life assuming that *everybody* thinks the way they do and something in me finally tripped lol. That it came on the heels of discussions of "masculinity" in the body of your post probably caused me to assign a heavier weight to your choice of wording than I should have. Apologies for any confusion, even if my overall point stands when it comes to [gestures broadly at everybody else]...
Cheers, my friend ... and thanks for the opportunity to engage politely. :)
As I hold very old views and express them at times quite unapologetically I understand that people get angry at me sometimes - but I always try to be polite and friendly to the people themselves even if our views are worlds apart, and so I appreciate it greatly the way you carry yourself here. It's a rare trait these days. My sincere admiration.


I'll admit up front that, as LIs go, I'm much much more a fan of Amy than I am Becca. I don't find the latter all that attractive if I'm being honest, but I still enjoyed her arc because of the dynamic between her and MC -- which I think is sort of a mix of confusion, shyness, hesitancy, and curiosity. They've known each other forever, but to MC, she was always his best friend's little sister... Hands off, because "bro code" and all. But it's established that there was always some kind of spark or thread, lurking in the background when it came to the two of them.

At the same time, the Becca MC sees now is not the same Becca he "grew up" around. She's harder. Cynical. Blue-haired. Evasive. Lesbian... maybe? She's clearly put up walls, and MC doesn't really know why. On some level, she's still the girl he's had a sort-of crush on since he hit puberty, but as the opportunity arises to spend time with her, he has no idea how to navigate the newly built walls around her. My sense of the long discussions about music and such was that MC is trying to gently poke and prod at those walls, to see if there's any possibility of a way in. The conversations aren't deep because Becca won't let anybody in more than she's comfortable with, but the whole thing to me seemed more like a tentative dance... who is she really? Does she feel anything for me? Do I still feel anything for her? Will she ever trust me? What happened in her past? Does she even like guys? ... it's like MC is trying really hard to be respectful, not only of Becca, but also of his friend/her brother (who's name I've forgotten), while also trying to tiptoe forward and scout out the possibilities.
If that were the case I'd be much more interested, but she seems to be the older sister, MC said she made mental illness look hot in high school already, and I understood her to be like she is now since always. Rude, cold, having casual sex with lots of people. Ofc we wish her well whatever she did or is, but interest is low for me. If she was a real person, the chances for a happy end are low and the chances for batshitcrazyfuckupshit going to happen high.

I agree that MC is trying to take a peak underneath her surface, but why even care? Is she the type one wants to commit to? Can one even help someone that deep in the mud? And why not do the same for the homeless guy on the street? Because she is hot? Thats where it all falls flat for me. It looks like cheap behaviour from MC: help hot girl for sex.


I generally agree with this. As sex scenes go, it wasn't much, and if I were only here to fap, I'd probably be pissed. But following the long-ish buildup, and the aforementioned "dance", my main takeaway from their encounter was that it was... awkward. And I think that made a lot of sense, given the context. There's still a lot that both of them need to figure out/understand about each other, but it was like the first sign that Becca's walls (or at least a small part of them) could come down.
Had no problem with the scenario or the behaviour of the two, had potential, just the execution was frustrating. Can't fap to games, but if I play an AVN I still want to see good erotic stuff and here the sex scene just served to further the story and to illuminate the oh-so-deep inner worlds of the characters. No descriptive writing of the sex, few erotic renders, never saw a vagina or dick or dick in vagina, MCs climax was a 'fu-uck' and thats it. Find that kinda disrespectful to the player who is made to think this is an AVN. If I want a pretentious movie I'll watch one.


The bike trip on its own? No, I don't necessarily think that would be the defining event that would make me want to embrace/kiss/sleep with the girl. For me, when it comes to Amy, those sparks all came during Act 1 -- the playful flirting, the signs of unease around her impending marriage, the frolicking in the pool. Any/all of those would probably be enough for me to be captivated by somebody like Amy. To have the previously unattainable, rich cheerleader drop down and spend a lovely evening on my level would absolutely start giving me ideas, and likely did for the MC as well.
Agreed. Same. V0.1 Amy was pretty good.


Of course, there's the whole pesky "getting married" thing throwing a wrench into those ideas. So what's a respectful, upstanding guy to do in this day and age? Stand aside, of course, and let the adult woman make her own decisions. But a night like that ... *sparks* like that ... are not easy to brush aside. So when she suddenly reappears -- complaining further about her insecurities about her future, no less -- then, yeah... I'm gonna jump at the chance to spend any time I can with her, especially if it helps her realize that there might be other, better, options.

But here, again, as with Becca, it's not that simple. MC can't just come out and say "your fiance's an ass, you should date me instead" because, frankly, they don't know each other that well. So it becomes another delicate dance between showing empathy, conveying difficult truths (about the world, and her relationship), while also not coming across purely as some sort of uninvited white knight.

I agree with you that their excursion does feel at times like he's just trying to get out of the friendzone. But let's face it ... he is. He just can't be obvious about it. I think it's interesting to watch the internal struggle MC has to manage throughout their interactions, some selfish, some unselfish, and that tightrope walk is what I enjoyed reading/watching when it came to Amy.
Ideally I'd like to see people who act virtuous mostly, but its fiction and I can go for a ride. But listen endlessly about flowers, bakeries, old buildings? In a AVN? I wouldn't do that for a real Amy. In a game? Good lord, MC, if you act another time interested at the most boring shite to get in her pants I'll grant you the title Grand Simp the Simpest. If it were good writing Amy would at least react believably and make him pay for prime subs on her onlyfans lol. They should make MCs 'flirting' more believable or at least have Amy react as if it were. But this? Comes off to me as top of the order whiteknighting while she is as unmoved as a strong independent woman on a feminist magazine cover. I'd both be fine with a Chad or a real innocent do-good-er, but this is just unpleasant. And unconvincing. Doesn't feel like romance. Doesn't feel like it's supposed to feel like romance. Feels like girl-porn without the porn. Exploring Amy's oh-so-deep-depths of character. Why does she like these flowers so much? Why could she be so enarmoured with this bakery? What is her zodiac sign lol? If the writer is a woman that explaines a lot. But then usually at least the sex scenes are top.

The subplot of Amy crushing on MC in childhood bible camp is golden though.


Cheers, my friend ... and thanks for the opportunity to engage politely. :)
Thank you as well. Spent way too much time writing all that though heh. I wish that your day may be a peaceful one. :)
 
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As I hold very old views and express them at times quite unapologetically I understand that people get angry at me sometimes - but I always try to be polite and friendly to the people themselves even if our views are worlds apart, and so I appreciate it greatly the way you carry yourself here. It's a rare trait these days. My sincere admiration.
Much appreciated, and I do -- and would say -- the same. To be clear, though, I'm pretty sure my ... uhh, "views" ... are at least as old as yours, so please don't give me *too* much credit for bucking modern societal trends. :) Just another relic from bygone days ... lol

Enjoyed reading your expanded thoughts above. Agreed with some points, didn't with others (shocking, I know), but it certainly helped to see where you're coming from, so thank you again.
 
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To address all of these .. this is a game written by a human being with sensibilities and wants and needs and likes. She writes what she likes and has a partner who makes fabulous looking models for game characters. Soap operas and drama adjacent to good looking models are a draw in most creative fields and the underlying condition in many cinema, television and other art in general to draw a big audience is the good looking actresses, most of the times. Even soap operas have more women than men, even though females make the bulk of the audience, as they want to identify with the heroines and see different women go for same men from different backgorunds and take the story in many different directions.

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Men enjoy seeing beautiful girls and interacting with them . Sometimes that is all they have right now for cuddling their hunger for compassion or beauty in their lives. Just lose yourself in the unnatural beauty, the stupid ideas a drop dead gorgeous girl would get hung on while seemingly having the world at her feet.

Men enjoy having a way to attract good looking girls, as that is not so common in real life, so the notion fo having her be interested, as her own troubles feel as the most minute trifles to men who did not win the gene lottery.

Men also like to see younger, hungry, lively, upbeat partners that are also insatiable, like Amy is for romance and Becca is for intimacy.


The way the plot armored girls can do no wrong while objectively being actually insane, Becca one actual escort, true sex worker, she handles it like her calling, and Amy a serial man eater embroiling men left and right into her fantasy round about life carousel.
I may have read this wrong, but based on what I gathered you were saying, this seems like a pretty sexist take on both men and women that simplifies and generalizes a whole lot of stuff. This game strikes me as a more true-to-life story where not all the girls are virgins star-struck by the bodybuilder macho man with the giant dick and the unending wittiness. All AVNs are fantasies, but this game seems more interested in telling a story that could actually be true, not one that will never happen to you in a million years.

That kind of game may not be for everyone, but personally I thought it was refreshing to play a game that reflected real life experiences and challenged the audience a little. You are free to think that the LIs are whores and man-eaters, but nearly every other game has a MC that fucks about a dozen girls at once, so I think there's some serious double-standard going on here. Again, these games are fantasies and that's fine but if these girls are whores the same can be said for every MC on this site. I think this is a game that challenges that stereotype. It makes you think, and it demands empathy.
 
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