VN - Ren'Py - STWA: Unbroken [Pt. 7] [STWAdev]

Reviewing the chapter 5 release version.

Overall, this is an excellent VN, among the best I've played on F95. The renders and character designs are all at least good, and many are great. The game has an excellent balance between character, story, and sex scenes, and was able to consistently keep me interested in the current scene.

What's really impressed me here is the character writing though. The MC and all the other characters actually come across as complex people, with their own needs and agendas, who talk to each other in the way that real people talk to the people they know and care about. Most characters have unique voices and do feel distinct from one another - it did not take long to become invested in almost every character shortly after they were introduced to the story.

The choices made by the player almost always feel like making choices about who the MC is and who he wants to spend time with, rather than feeling like gamified choices to build up invisible points behind the scenes, and rarely does any option feel like it was the "wrong" choice in a mechanical sense.

There's no grinding, minigames or sandbox loops here, just making choices and experiencing the narrative. If you're just looking to unlock fap scenes you can go back to again and again, this isn't that game. That said, there are many sex scenes so far, which are good and made much better by the overall writing quality and my subsequent investment in the characters and their stories.

Overall, a genuinely excellent VN, and if you're looking for story-driven porn games I can't recommend it enough. Looking forward to future releases!

It took me awhile to figure out why I wasn’t able to finish this game but after thinking on it and playing another game I figured out what it was. I didn’t enjoy this game because it does something a good amount of authors that are good at the NOVEL part of VN’s do. This game is guilty of doing more telling than showing.

In this game, the dev will have the story and the characters tell you about how much a playboy the MC is, and the MC will TELL you about how much of a scumbag he is and how he’s the worst of his friend group and what not but the game doesn’t really SHOW you any of that. The game will TELL you about how much the group of people are actually friends, and how much these people have been into the MC but doesn’t really show it other than some flirting sometimes (at least in the beginning). The game just does wayyyy too much telling instead of showing.

I played another game right after in which the MC is kinda a macho douchebag but the game SHOWS the MC being that kind of person with his actions, dialogue, and the decisions it gives you, it never TELLS you that’s how he is, you see it for yourself. Something that this game could do better.

That aside, the game is well put together. Well written, not too many errors with the writing, good renders, decent animations, you can tell that the dev took his time putting the game together and polishing it. The dev is also talented with writing and putting together a narrative, just probably needs to be better with the showing and not the telling. So it’s not a bad game….but it’s not necessarily great either. It’s decent but just not for everyone. If you like being info dumped then you may not mind it. But if you like to see things in a visual novel instead of being told, then you may not like this one.

Hi to you all.
Soo, I play this game and I fall in love with it. As you can see, I in this forum from 2017, but I am a spectator from 2015.
I see countless game that pop in and disappear in countless other games. Interesting to watch haw, this small industry of adult game change from years. In the beginning, almost all the games don't even knows what the story is, and they just show us the fuck fest. But years go on and games with story begin to appear. I can even tell about them for you, but this review not about it.
This review about wonderful game, that tell the story about broken man, who desperately try to push away other people, because he thinks that he doesn't deserve to be happy.
This game about wonderful characters, who try to change the broken man and tell him, that as long as there are people who care about him, he will never be alone. Who knows, maybe one day he will find a place in his heart for the happiness that other people want to share with him.
So yeah, this game has a story, which may find a response in your heart.

10/10

good story , good graphics , incest , this is one of my favorite games , you can see that the dev worked his ass to make it happened . thanks for being awesome , building a harem is one of the best things i like in pgames

[part 5]
Immersion is a shit here. It took me a lot of time to figure out what is actually happening, who am I, who are all those people I suppose to know (tbh I still don't know more than I do). In the introduction I set name of my best male friend(?) from the past, the second one is female and her name cannot be changed. The time until I met the first one I already met dozens of others and it does not seem I have any special relation with him (and never met the female one, just mentioned once) so I don't get the purpose here. There is some kind of Center where MC helps, his friends work there, this is all somehow related with ex-militaries but what, who, why, where it is all big unknown. How am I supposed to make decisions if MC knows those people for years and I have no idea who are they? MC was military but he is also some kind of playboy-celebrity, why is he even MMA trainer? He went to military just after school so when he get all the knowledge of fighting? Not much sense to me, so much questions, so little answers.

Decisions itself are another mystery. I played with Scrappy mod so I saw consequences of each dialogue but... they differs and I still felt blind. Love is confusing since it is often sexual and nonsexual but secrecy? Protect points? Grief? Rival? Acceptance? What does they even mean? I know variables should be hidden for better immersion but still it is a game and not real life, good understanding of made choices are crucial here.

Language level here is on another level based on what I played so far (almost all top VNs). I knew my vocabulary is pathetic but wow, this game made me reconsider installing some language learning app on my phone. I often had to use Google to find meaning of words or idioms which was pretty good actually. Dialogues seems very natural and mature but yeah, non-advanced English players should be prepared to use dictionaries once in the time.

Characters as I mentioned above should be better described from the start. It was annoying to interact with people MC knows for years and I had no idea who are they. Although overall they seem fine, just emotionless of MC kills it all imo. Tbh I skipped like 1/3 of current content because it became so boring... There is nothing happening actually, they keep talking with each other but there is nothing really from it. Amrit seems to be the best character, rest of them are ok but nothing to be remembered of.

Renders are very good, animations are slightly worse but good enough to me.

Sex scenes are very good but hmm... They are lack of something, cannot tell what that is.

Overall it is ok but has far greater potential. I think some kind of encyclopedia could help, something to store all known knowledge, there is just a lot of talking and not much of wider context information which kills gameplay. Still fingers crossed for future development.

Review for PT5

I just finished the last game, this is the third game in which I followed the path of every girl and one being a asshole without commitment. And I've played dozens of these games, so a big plus for that.

Overall impression - Very positive

Graphics - Very good, a big plus for the emotions on the face, I always appreciate that.

Story - In principle, there is nothing to complain about, the story of the hero to discover engaging, interaction with the characters in the game very interesting, several paths to choose from deserve high praise, I am very satisfied.

Protagonist - Rarely do I not complain about the character I come to play, I can really get into it.

Characters - Complex with interesting stories, digging into their biographies was a lot of fun for me

Dialogues - Conversations are interesting, each character has a different vibe with our protagonist so that's a big plus, I got attached to it only to the option with choices, elaborate in the section with spoilers.

Music - Here the minus, music only in the club and then silence throughout the game, as if it was possible I would cut half a star for it stars.

My rating - 5 stars.

Personal feelings collected during the game(Spoiler alert):



Good luck with the next updates, I will definitely play.

Version: Part 5.

Rating: 8.5/10

Fun+unique premise for a VN. An MMA fighter with a military background who's trying to get his life together and deal with the trauma of his past.

I'll try to keep this one short and rattle off some points I think are valid.

The story is interesting and somewhat engaging. It's still early days of course but I'd love for more of the focus to be on MMA now that we are settling in with the characters.

Characters are all good IMO. They have interesting dialogue and look great. I like that there's build up to differing degree's depending on the LI. Facial expressions are sometimes off but I appreciate the attempt to use a lot of them for the most part, it's better than the alternative.

Renders look great and animations get better as the game goes on. The last one with Kana was really hot.

Lack of music really rips the soul out of this game, but It's not a valid criticism due to the game being in development. It just has to be said because it makes the world of difference. - Play with your own playlists.

As much as I really like Kana (It could be another LI, but Kana's path feels the most interjected), I would have liked 1 less LI. They are all done so well that I feel I want more time with them and it actually takes me out of the story due to switching between them all.

MC: Probably the best looking MC I have ever seen. Helps to connect with him a bit but I do wish we got a few shots of MC alone and possibly struggling to cope. We see he has deep issues but he really is a stone wall even when he's on his own. I think it would serve the story well if we see him break down or just have a cry to himself. It takes nothing away from him, he's seen so much. But it helps us, the player see more of him and help us empathize.

Conclusion: A very fun VN with a great deal of potential. I wish I could connect with the characters more because It's definitely possible with the current models+dialogue. I just needed more time with them individually and some good accompanying music to hook me in. - Give it a go!

It's unreal how good the writing for this game is. All of the dialog is entertaining and relevant, all of the characters are believable and interesting, and the visuals are perhaps the best I've ever seen on this site.

This is OUTSTANDING game that I highly recommend you pick up. I personally used the mod that allows you to see the effects of your choices so I could drive towards specific goals, but I suspect you'll be able to figure things out if that's not the way you prefer to play.

This is a really good one! Great setting, characters are fun, girls are beautiful and colorful. Not pushing it too much on fawning over MC, but still pretty easy to get who you want. I also like the references to the other STWA game. I really dig this consistent universe thing. Recommended.

This game is a real treat.

Character's personalities make them feel real and less like caricatures or tropes that you get in most games. Makes you feel like your reading a well written story which really does go a long way in making games stand out in the sea of games out there.

Story is gripping that you actually care about what is happening and the layer of mystery that is being weaved in with each update is a wonderful touch to really bring players into the story as you will always be trying to figure out what the big secret is.

The girls which lets be honest is why most play these games are the best. Each girl is unique and brings something new to the table for the MC and visually stand out against each other just as much as personalities. You will be hard pressed to pick a favorite and I predict that the longer the game continues the harder it will be to make your final choice as if like the creators first game will be non-harem. Knowing you may have to reject any of these girls at some point is the only negative thing I could even give the game lol.

With Part 5 this game has cemented its place as one of my top 5 games Ive every played on this site and Id be hard convinced that will change based on how well the first game went.

Congrats to the creator this game really is something special and a great way to start 2023!

I love this game and i loved The Author as well, perhaps this is my most favorite of all the renpy VNs out there. Immersive, fantastic writing and satisfies my tomboy cravings. The two games are set in the same universe, and you can meet characters from The Author, which makes it interesting. There are no forced sex scenes, you can choose to remain loyal or try it out with a few other girls before deciding the one.

One of the best games I've played around here. Visually beautiful and with a intricate story. The pace is very good and there is a lot of mystery that is revealed little by little. Can't wait to see where this goes.

The game begins by telling you how much of a worthless asshole you are. That you suck compared to everyone, that nobody likes you and such.

Except the main character is famous, rich, and everybody ever loves him. He has an asshole MMA fighter fame and that's it. Anyone close to him loves him.

It's so awkward to listen to the MC call himself an asshole again and again while every character around him just keeps parroting his insanely good soul or whatever the fuck.

It's a very contrived plot. The MC is just not as interesting as the author thought he was while writing it, and certainly it's not well written. It's like the author is fascinated by his own self insert.

Oh and there's very little actual sex in the game. And it's not well animated. Just pretty renders is all.

I have to say that I'm thoroughly impressed with the quality of writing on this title. There are a number of things that are done quite well, and they may not be the things that get the most praise in games like this.

This is a story with a slow burn. It takes its time carefully, letting the characters open up at their own pace, and that really appeals to me. I didn't take the first sex option that came early on, and that made a difference to the story and the way it unfolds. I'm sure that many players would jump right at that, and I think that would be a mistake. Skipping the first sex scene lets the story breathe a bit before getting right into it, and believe me, that's a strength.

The author clearly has taken the time to get the details right on the backgrounds and the stories of the characters, and that effort really shows. I don't know much about MMA fighting myself, but it's clear to me that the author does, and has put in the time to make the details feel properly organic.

What I do know something about is the veterans issues, and those are handled extremely well. Not typically something that comes up in games of this nature, but as a vet myself who's struggled with my own share of trauma, this is handled so very gracefully, and makes the game feel more personal to me.

This isn't a game that slaps a loose story into place around sex. Sure, there's sex in the story, but the story comes first, rather than the reverse. If you're just here for the slap and tickle, this may not be the game for you. But if you find the story more appealing because the characters come to life as things evolve, I cannot recommend this strongly enough. You won't be disappointed.

So far, the characters and narrative are strong. The decisions aren't really difficult, but the tale is nonetheless compelling. Excellent models as well. I'm looking forward to seeing where the fighting mechanisms go in future versions.

There's only ONE dev i know that has renders that tops this game & that's saying something. Story & writing? S tier. Pacing? Really good. Love Interests? Man, it's hard to decide. I wish there was background music playing for better immersion but that's very minor & i can certainly live without it. Would be nice though. Invest in this game, you won't regret it.

I played the Author and really liked it so decided to give this one a try as well. I must say I am a bit disappointed with the game in general and I am surprised at its high scores. I played through the whole available content so I could give it a fair try.

Renders
The renders are very beautifully done and the models are attractive and look different. The animations are a bit simple but do the job.

The sex scenes are the real letdown in the game, they are very short, and there's not much buildup to them, they sort of just happen. The writing on them isn't particularly exciting either.

Story
The story has some nice points, in particular I like the conflict between the MC and Davis, and his internal dialogue. I also liked the parts of him working on the Vet Center. I think those show a mature subject treated well and in a believable way.

I didn't like very much the relationships between the MC and most girls, except for Vi, they felt a bit force.

Why 3/5?
With these renders, the story seeds... etc this game could have been an easy 5, however the already mentioned lackluster sex scenes really left me a bad impression, the other point was the MCs interactions with the girls.

To elaborate, the MC here is presented as a bit of a playboy, there are constant allusions to him getting on with supermodels and being a player. The girls in his life comment on this, mocking him a bit even, and yet, they all throw themselves at him:, in order:

The ring lady: she comes to him, out of the blue and offers to have sex.

Amrit: your friend tells you not to fuck with her, and you are given the choice if you would accept her or not, and then a couple of scenes later she offers you her V-card, this is independent of your choices.

Elspeth: she is obviously infatuated with the MC and tries to get him into a relationship in a very passive way, expecting him to take the first step.

Serena: at the hotel, your first interaction with her, she basically offers to fuck. If you say no, she will later offer again a date.

Ines: she throws herself at the MC at any chance she gets, to "protect Vi", really?

All in all, the MC is always passive and, if you do not chose the absolute asshole options during the choices, you get the girls without doing anything. It doesn't feel rewarding, the MC feels empty and not in the good way of "he is filling his life with meaningless sex to cope with his pain but really wants more out of life and needs help", because he does nothing and yet everyone around him falls for him.

I will keep an eye out on this one and might play it to completion once it is finished, but overall it left me quite unimpressed.

Mature and profound story. I played it with a bittersweet soundtrack/playlist from spotify in my headphones, perfect match. Recommeded!
I read every line and enjoyed the story, would have played it without the lewd scenes as well.

Review up to Part 4.

I love this game and I strongly recommend it to those who enjoy a good story, amazing writing and excellent renders. It is a continuation from STWA: The Author but this game is far more engaging and enjoyable IMO.

The biggest reason for that is I like the main character (including his profession) a lot more. You are badass, and the plot is more exciting, but still a kind, caring and overall good person (setting aside the lechery at least but at least you are open/honest about it).

I can't say enough good things about the writing...it is funny, witty and well thought out. Perhaps the best part is I feel I can relate to and/or connect with many of the characters and they are each interesting in their own way.

Rating up to "Part 4" of this AVN.

Rather good game in my humble opinion.
Story is intriguing and interesting, visuals are basic but appealing. Animations are there but rather rudimentary.
The writing is what keeps my interest for the most part.

Characters are written rather realistic and seem to have an agenda of their own, which is rare in this day and age. Most other AVNs seem to revolve around the MC and the events he experiences alone.
Love interests aren't all eager to jump your balls, at least most of them aren't. You have to work on some of them to get the lewds, (or work really hard in some cases) and I like that. That's especially remarkable in this setting, where you play as an up and coming MMA star with a fondness for bedding supermodels in his free time.

The LI models are mostly quite detailed and appealing with a decent deal of variety. Unfortunately the more you play these VNs, the more you start to recognize certain models that get a lot of use by different devs. I started to see them as "actresses" playing different roles, it's not as jarring this way. One of the main LIs has a very "special" model, both in the right and the wrong ways. But I guess that's ultimately a matter of personal taste. It's not a harem game so you ultimately might have to pick and choose. Right now there are no dire consequences yet if you whore around.

Gameplay is nothing super special, so far it's a classic VN and the most "gameplay" there is are decisions that alter the progression with the different LIs. To be quite frank I was looking forward to something a little more involved with it's self proclaimed focus on the MMA and fighting business. But hey, it's still Ren'Py so I'm not really sure what I expected.

There's a lot of charm in this game. The writing stands out from the sea of samey VNs and I'm gonna follow its development with great interest.