VN - Ren'Py - STWA: Unbroken [Pt. 7] [STWAdev]

Better in every way than the previous game.

The art is a serious step up, the writing is better too. Most characters have a little more complexity than they did in The Author. They aren't just stereotypes. Some of them are, but there are enough interesting ones to cancel that out.

The central mystery is much more effective than the one in The Author, and as of episode 5, we are still uncovering elements of it. Another problem solved from The Author are that (so far) plot threads aren't dropped, which shows me that the dev had a much better plan this time, and so they haven't forgotten to pay things off. I still get the impression that there is a bit of pantsing going on with the creation, but this time around, payoffs have been good.

Animations are better than The Author, but it is not saying much. They are still much too simple, not enough inbetween frames and very few parts of the body actually given movement. I still think they are not high enough quality to warrant using them. If I was in the position of the developer, I might offer animations as a Patreon reward rather than putting them in the game. At least until I had the skill to release them as part of the product, but I am sure others might disagree.

Elspeth is one of the best characters in any AVN I have played, nuanced, complex, and really interesting. The whole "super-genius" thing turns me off as I've seen it in SO MANY GAMES! But there's a lot more to her than that. She kind of blows the other girls out of the water for me, which could be seen as a negative.

5 Stars means excellent, not perfect, so I have given it 5. It is definitely in the upper echelon of AVNs, in the same tier as BaD, Intertwined, Summer's Gone, Where It All Began, Pale Carnations, and Eternum (games that I feel are the best of the best, examples of the next rung would be Ripples, Chasing Sunsets and Projekt Passion, to give some context).

I like pretty much everything about this game. The writing is good, the LIs are hot and distinct in personality, the plot is unrealistic but very fun. I hope to see a deeper level of kink, but I really like what has happened so far.

(Version Reviewed: Pt.5)

I enjoy playing STWA: Unbroken. I'm usually not a fan of games where the MC is a veteran, but this one manages to pull it off with unfavorable look towards war. It's great to see how our MC develops as a person after each update while handling the grief of the death of his friend. I think the story is great. The renders and animations look good. I'm not a fan of every LI, but it's mostly a matter of taste. The humor does not land for me at times, but apart from that the dialogues have been great.

Overall - 9/10 and a step up from the previous game from the same dev.

This game is far better than Author, the improvement is real. By the end of part 5, I have a solid idea about the quality of the game but I don't know what this game will achieve and end up quality-wise. It is so long for the development it achieves and I can say the 5 parts are a mere intro for the story. If it follows the previous game's recipe, it will end up as a pseudo-harem game with a GF ending. Also, the game started with MC regretting his playboy past and making his sex life right but I see no repercussions to manwhoring rn, hope that dev remembers the premise and adjusts plot or ending accordingly.

+Plot and setting is somewhat original.
+Render quality is good. Girls are gorgeous.
+Character backstories are somewhat original. Girls are not stereotypical.
+Relationships between characters feel bona fide.
+Lewd content is OK, mostly vanilla sex with different characters. Animations are average.
+Facial expressions of models are meticulously crafted.

-The plot development is so slow. Dev introduces a plotline or a gameplay mechanic but soon we are back to manwhoring and/or date simming. The girls are so numerous that the game can't move on from introducing us to the girls.
-The game is too wordy. Yeah I like the realistic feeling and the writing this game offers but my hand slipped to the skip button after a while, can't lie.
- Sound is nonexistent right now, hope dev will add some sound elements in full release.

Summary: Don't be fooled by the pt. 5 in the header. It is a very long intro right now. The quality is good but the flow is problematic, I finished this release in roughly a month. If you like some casual reading with no impact you can finish this faster, I presume.

Really good writing. Elspeth is a fantastic character. Author manages to show you and not tell you her intelligence which is tremendously hard to do. A massive step up over The Author. The animations and renders in episode 5 are great and are a fantastic step up over previous episodes!

Version: Part 5

Visually the game looks fantastic. Models are almost all very attractive and varied enough. Renders are beautiful with framing and lighting usually being great. My only knock on the renders is in some of the outfits have tops that fold or wrap around breasts individually rather than resting/hanging naturally across the chest - It's particularly noticeable (and unflattering) earlier on with some outfits on more busty characters. Animations started out pretty weak but have improved quite a bit as of part 5.

The last bit about the animations getting better improving really applies to development progress of the game overall, which I feel merits being pointed out. There's been clear continued progress in presentation as development has gone on and a lot of things I had issues with earlier on seem largely rectified or improved quite a bit as the game progressed. I remember thinking the very early stages of the game seemed rather lifeless with a lack of varied facial expressions (lots of just switching between the same two renders for when a character was speaking or not during scenes with a decent amount of dialogue) but that quickly and drastically improved after the first part or so. As I mentioned, animations have improved a good amount since part 5 as well as the clothing issue seeming to be much less prevalent (if still there at all). These are great signs that the dev is still actively improving which bodes well for the game itself and I also applaud the effort on.

I'm not really ready to pass judgement on the overall story or certain aspects of writing. What I will say about the story is that it has a lot of potential and lots of aspects that have been wonderfully set up... it's just a matter of seeing if those things are all paid off in a satisfying manner now. I'm not really into MMA or Wrestling myself but that didn't get in the way of the story seeming very engaging and getting me invested with deeper themes that are widely relatable and characters that are (mostly) hard not to want to know better. The dialogue is pretty decent though the banter I found to be a little too basic a lot of the time. I also had a couple personal hangups with some of the character writing though not enough to affect my enjoyment most of the time. Otherwise, I thought the writing so far has been well done and effective but I don't want to oversell it.

Regarding the LIs, I think it's going to be quite tough to make certain decisions when we get to that point because so many are so good. So far there's only one of them that I've really written off personally (at this point it's a contest between two favorites but most of the others are close enough behind that things could easily shift).

Speaking of decisions, some of the in-game decisions have been one of the more baffling aspects to me as a it's sometimes quite counterintuitive which decisions have what effects. Some other decisions at the moment occasionally seem to be there just for the sake of having decisions and don't necessarily make sense story-wise.


Also, balancing the fighting/training parts of the game with the rest and the decisions that go along with it still seems to be a bit of a rough edge to be ironed out further.

To wrap up, If you're one for a story driven game with some adult content (neither feast nor famine) this is a good one with some small issues but a lot of potential that is mostly improving as it progresses. While it may not stand out as top tier in any particular category it gets close in some of the key ones and is overall really solid and engaging. Definitely worth trying out if you haven't and I'm very much looking forward to how it progresses.

As a dev myself, I rarely post reviews of other devs' projects. But wow... I am really enjoying this one so far. I also enjoyed his other VN, The Author.

His writing is very good. Personalities are clearly there for each character and scenes with them are well executed. I love the subtle humor scattered throughout the dialogue also. Anytime I play an AVN with multiple love interests, like most people I immediately find a favorite girl. And mine is Els. I don't know what it is about her (outside of the obvious... she is beautiful). But it seems like of all the LI's here, she is the most 'distant' (for lack of a better word). The rest come on to you pretty forcefully and often. But Els is different. Although you get the sense that there is chemistry between her and the MC, and outside of a brief scene at a swimming pool, not much romance really happens with her. And that's what makes her the most interesting to me.

I don't really find too many flaws here. But I would love to see better facial expressions in the characters' poses. Smiles just don't really look like smiles. With Vi, there is a dialogue where her smile is commented on, but you can barely tell she is smiling. And aside from that, pointing the eyes at who a character is speaking to could be a bit better. Many times, while characters are 'speaking', the expression seems to change so little, it's almost robotic. But it isn't so bad that it deserves to lose a star. I do hope the dev considers this in future updates. Facial expressions go a long way toward making it all feel more real.

The girls are all beautiful. They all look different and there is a nice mixture of large and small boobs. And so far, its nice to see at least one has a nicely trimmed bush. It seems like nearly every VN these days, all the girls are bald down below. I don't mind bald at all, but they don't all have to be that way.

Choices you make do seem to matter. Although it seems like no matter how you handle some of the girls, they'll still push to sleep with you (or kiss) at times. And admittedly, it is really difficult to push any of these beauties away. And I'm constantly worried that my choices are going to affect how things pan out with my favorite girl later.

The fights have an interactive aspect that I suppose some people like. But the dev thankfully added the option to simulate the fight. I don't care much for interactive fights in VN's where you have to choose your moves through the mini game. Adding the choice is a very nice feature to have here.

Outside of the very minor things I mentioned above, this game is flawless. The story is interesting, and I was immediately invested. Now dev... please give us a bit more romance with Els and I'll be really happy.

What a fantastic story with such fantastic art! The characters feel real and beautiful (especially Vi). The story is engaging and it looks like the updates are consistent with the quality getting better over time. Really looking forward to more from this dev!

Slowly working through Chapter 4 version.

+ Well written.
This isn't your superficial, non-complex characters VN, but just the opposite. We get a lot of introspection and dialogue covering backstories and we have different character agendas.

-- Also not well written. #1 biggest challenge for authors (other than writer's block) is showing versus telling. A LOT of stories from MC and other characters on events and behavior = a LOT of text to read...but why not show us?!

+ Not too many errors with the writing

+ Beautiful male & female renders.

-- The scene where the MC offers his autograph to the waitress shows three of the five female characters together = they all have the same exact short hairstyle and big tit/full ass bodies. Sigh. So much potential for variety but we get a lot of sameness...with what feels like a half-hearted effort to pick different models by giving one tattoos/piercings, one scars, etc.

Different skin colors. Different body types can be made sexy too while still being...you got it, different.

> Decent animation

-- I'm not rating this higher because the story wasn't fun or erotic to me.
* Very little if any humor.
* I'm hours through spamming the next button to through the scenes and there is very little sex regardless of all the love points vs. friend points I'm building up with the girls.

> The android version I'm playing has no gallery/scene replay feature. Bummer, considering some of the other nice touches to the UI and whatnot.

+ Not for this game but for the mod that provides information on if I choose A, then how that changes variables in the game, such as +Love or -Friendship. Not a walkthrough, but it helps you know how your choices may be impacting the story.

OVERALL:
* It's a beautiful VN.
* It's an uncommon setting of the lives of MMA fighters.
* The movies many people return to are those where we enjoy the MC...even if he is a douche to some (the character flaw), but is still relatable and fun. This was not here...and it was all hearsay versus showing.
* Lastly, give us some variety of girls; such as a believable MMA female fighter like Gina Carano or Michelle Watterson, who both can be sexy and scary at the same time....versus a bunch of model clones.

As of Pt. 5:
As a lover of MMA, STWA: Unbroken speaks to me on different levels. The fighting techniques are pretty accurate, the story is attention-grabbing, and the love interests are diverse and fun. Characters like Kana, Viridiana, and Elspeth are my personal favorites (sorry, Amrit and Ines) because they have unique backgrounds and great personalities. Valentine is one of the more intriguing MCs in the AVN world due to his character depth and internal struggles. I'm pretty excited to see where this ride will take us next!

Reviewing the chapter 5 release version.

Overall, this is an excellent VN, among the best I've played on F95. The renders and character designs are all at least good, and many are great. The game has an excellent balance between character, story, and sex scenes, and was able to consistently keep me interested in the current scene.

What's really impressed me here is the character writing though. The MC and all the other characters actually come across as complex people, with their own needs and agendas, who talk to each other in the way that real people talk to the people they know and care about. Most characters have unique voices and do feel distinct from one another - it did not take long to become invested in almost every character shortly after they were introduced to the story.

The choices made by the player almost always feel like making choices about who the MC is and who he wants to spend time with, rather than feeling like gamified choices to build up invisible points behind the scenes, and rarely does any option feel like it was the "wrong" choice in a mechanical sense.

There's no grinding, minigames or sandbox loops here, just making choices and experiencing the narrative. If you're just looking to unlock fap scenes you can go back to again and again, this isn't that game. That said, there are many sex scenes so far, which are good and made much better by the overall writing quality and my subsequent investment in the characters and their stories.

Overall, a genuinely excellent VN, and if you're looking for story-driven porn games I can't recommend it enough. Looking forward to future releases!

It took me awhile to figure out why I wasn’t able to finish this game but after thinking on it and playing another game I figured out what it was. I didn’t enjoy this game because it does something a good amount of authors that are good at the NOVEL part of VN’s do. This game is guilty of doing more telling than showing.

In this game, the dev will have the story and the characters tell you about how much a playboy the MC is, and the MC will TELL you about how much of a scumbag he is and how he’s the worst of his friend group and what not but the game doesn’t really SHOW you any of that. The game will TELL you about how much the group of people are actually friends, and how much these people have been into the MC but doesn’t really show it other than some flirting sometimes (at least in the beginning). The game just does wayyyy too much telling instead of showing.

I played another game right after in which the MC is kinda a macho douchebag but the game SHOWS the MC being that kind of person with his actions, dialogue, and the decisions it gives you, it never TELLS you that’s how he is, you see it for yourself. Something that this game could do better.

That aside, the game is well put together. Well written, not too many errors with the writing, good renders, decent animations, you can tell that the dev took his time putting the game together and polishing it. The dev is also talented with writing and putting together a narrative, just probably needs to be better with the showing and not the telling. So it’s not a bad game….but it’s not necessarily great either. It’s decent but just not for everyone. If you like being info dumped then you may not mind it. But if you like to see things in a visual novel instead of being told, then you may not like this one.

Hi to you all.
Soo, I play this game and I fall in love with it. As you can see, I in this forum from 2017, but I am a spectator from 2015.
I see countless game that pop in and disappear in countless other games. Interesting to watch haw, this small industry of adult game change from years. In the beginning, almost all the games don't even knows what the story is, and they just show us the fuck fest. But years go on and games with story begin to appear. I can even tell about them for you, but this review not about it.
This review about wonderful game, that tell the story about broken man, who desperately try to push away other people, because he thinks that he doesn't deserve to be happy.
This game about wonderful characters, who try to change the broken man and tell him, that as long as there are people who care about him, he will never be alone. Who knows, maybe one day he will find a place in his heart for the happiness that other people want to share with him.
So yeah, this game has a story, which may find a response in your heart.

10/10

good story , good graphics , incest , this is one of my favorite games , you can see that the dev worked his ass to make it happened . thanks for being awesome , building a harem is one of the best things i like in pgames

[part 5]
Immersion is a shit here. It took me a lot of time to figure out what is actually happening, who am I, who are all those people I suppose to know (tbh I still don't know more than I do). In the introduction I set name of my best male friend(?) from the past, the second one is female and her name cannot be changed. The time until I met the first one I already met dozens of others and it does not seem I have any special relation with him (and never met the female one, just mentioned once) so I don't get the purpose here. There is some kind of Center where MC helps, his friends work there, this is all somehow related with ex-militaries but what, who, why, where it is all big unknown. How am I supposed to make decisions if MC knows those people for years and I have no idea who are they? MC was military but he is also some kind of playboy-celebrity, why is he even MMA trainer? He went to military just after school so when he get all the knowledge of fighting? Not much sense to me, so much questions, so little answers.

Decisions itself are another mystery. I played with Scrappy mod so I saw consequences of each dialogue but... they differs and I still felt blind. Love is confusing since it is often sexual and nonsexual but secrecy? Protect points? Grief? Rival? Acceptance? What does they even mean? I know variables should be hidden for better immersion but still it is a game and not real life, good understanding of made choices are crucial here.

Language level here is on another level based on what I played so far (almost all top VNs). I knew my vocabulary is pathetic but wow, this game made me reconsider installing some language learning app on my phone. I often had to use Google to find meaning of words or idioms which was pretty good actually. Dialogues seems very natural and mature but yeah, non-advanced English players should be prepared to use dictionaries once in the time.

Characters as I mentioned above should be better described from the start. It was annoying to interact with people MC knows for years and I had no idea who are they. Although overall they seem fine, just emotionless of MC kills it all imo. Tbh I skipped like 1/3 of current content because it became so boring... There is nothing happening actually, they keep talking with each other but there is nothing really from it. Amrit seems to be the best character, rest of them are ok but nothing to be remembered of.

Renders are very good, animations are slightly worse but good enough to me.

Sex scenes are very good but hmm... They are lack of something, cannot tell what that is.

Overall it is ok but has far greater potential. I think some kind of encyclopedia could help, something to store all known knowledge, there is just a lot of talking and not much of wider context information which kills gameplay. Still fingers crossed for future development.

Review for PT5

I just finished the last game, this is the third game in which I followed the path of every girl and one being a asshole without commitment. And I've played dozens of these games, so a big plus for that.

Overall impression - Very positive

Graphics - Very good, a big plus for the emotions on the face, I always appreciate that.

Story - In principle, there is nothing to complain about, the story of the hero to discover engaging, interaction with the characters in the game very interesting, several paths to choose from deserve high praise, I am very satisfied.

Protagonist - Rarely do I not complain about the character I come to play, I can really get into it.

Characters - Complex with interesting stories, digging into their biographies was a lot of fun for me

Dialogues - Conversations are interesting, each character has a different vibe with our protagonist so that's a big plus, I got attached to it only to the option with choices, elaborate in the section with spoilers.

Music - Here the minus, music only in the club and then silence throughout the game, as if it was possible I would cut half a star for it stars.

My rating - 5 stars.

Personal feelings collected during the game(Spoiler alert):



Good luck with the next updates, I will definitely play.

Version: Part 5.

Rating: 8.5/10

Fun+unique premise for a VN. An MMA fighter with a military background who's trying to get his life together and deal with the trauma of his past.

I'll try to keep this one short and rattle off some points I think are valid.

The story is interesting and somewhat engaging. It's still early days of course but I'd love for more of the focus to be on MMA now that we are settling in with the characters.

Characters are all good IMO. They have interesting dialogue and look great. I like that there's build up to differing degree's depending on the LI. Facial expressions are sometimes off but I appreciate the attempt to use a lot of them for the most part, it's better than the alternative.

Renders look great and animations get better as the game goes on. The last one with Kana was really hot.

Lack of music really rips the soul out of this game, but It's not a valid criticism due to the game being in development. It just has to be said because it makes the world of difference. - Play with your own playlists.

As much as I really like Kana (It could be another LI, but Kana's path feels the most interjected), I would have liked 1 less LI. They are all done so well that I feel I want more time with them and it actually takes me out of the story due to switching between them all.

MC: Probably the best looking MC I have ever seen. Helps to connect with him a bit but I do wish we got a few shots of MC alone and possibly struggling to cope. We see he has deep issues but he really is a stone wall even when he's on his own. I think it would serve the story well if we see him break down or just have a cry to himself. It takes nothing away from him, he's seen so much. But it helps us, the player see more of him and help us empathize.

Conclusion: A very fun VN with a great deal of potential. I wish I could connect with the characters more because It's definitely possible with the current models+dialogue. I just needed more time with them individually and some good accompanying music to hook me in. - Give it a go!

It's unreal how good the writing for this game is. All of the dialog is entertaining and relevant, all of the characters are believable and interesting, and the visuals are perhaps the best I've ever seen on this site.

This is OUTSTANDING game that I highly recommend you pick up. I personally used the mod that allows you to see the effects of your choices so I could drive towards specific goals, but I suspect you'll be able to figure things out if that's not the way you prefer to play.

This is a really good one! Great setting, characters are fun, girls are beautiful and colorful. Not pushing it too much on fawning over MC, but still pretty easy to get who you want. I also like the references to the other STWA game. I really dig this consistent universe thing. Recommended.

This game is a real treat.

Character's personalities make them feel real and less like caricatures or tropes that you get in most games. Makes you feel like your reading a well written story which really does go a long way in making games stand out in the sea of games out there.

Story is gripping that you actually care about what is happening and the layer of mystery that is being weaved in with each update is a wonderful touch to really bring players into the story as you will always be trying to figure out what the big secret is.

The girls which lets be honest is why most play these games are the best. Each girl is unique and brings something new to the table for the MC and visually stand out against each other just as much as personalities. You will be hard pressed to pick a favorite and I predict that the longer the game continues the harder it will be to make your final choice as if like the creators first game will be non-harem. Knowing you may have to reject any of these girls at some point is the only negative thing I could even give the game lol.

With Part 5 this game has cemented its place as one of my top 5 games Ive every played on this site and Id be hard convinced that will change based on how well the first game went.

Congrats to the creator this game really is something special and a great way to start 2023!