Great first version. A lot of content. Beautiful girls as always and of course Mr.Dots found a way to include a sex scene in the first version.
Is it just me or was the writing quite wonky in parts? It seemed almost as if MrDots had problems with his English.
Just one example which I think was the worst, but by far not the only one where words or sentences just didn't make much sense or just simply were wrong, when the dad calls the MC he talks about Nicole, how great she is and how good for the MC she is etc. and then he says "Women like Nicole are a dime a dozen."
WTF? At first I thought he was writing about his daughter, but that would make no sense, but if he is really talking about Nicole, he is saying pretty much the opposite of what he said before. This has to be a mistake-