VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Bully I Hate [v0.7 Alpha] [Nylad]

[Nylad]

Oh, wow, i didn't expect to appear here xD, but thanks a lot everyone, i'll answer your questions

Its a shame there is no animation ( i don`t see a animated tag ) , or is there ? ' input Vsauce jazz song here '

There are animations, especially for the sex scenes ^^

I'm excited to try this. The story is definitely not unique but it hasn't reach the point of repetitive that it's predictable. That said, i hope the MC doesn't forgive them too easily and for them to actually act like Bullies. Too many games like this try to paint the girls as innocent and that the MC is the one who's childish for not growing up and moving passed it.

I also hate this kind of game, so no, i'm going to do a "Tate No Yuusha" but in 15 times worse

yooooo same, even the female characters look almost the same to the ones in that game....

It's because it's Honey Select, you can try anything, they always look the same, especially the men

Android?

No, i'm sorry, it's stupid to say but... i just can't do it xD, I will try to find out though


If you have any questions, do not hesitate !


Anyway, this is my first game, so I know it's not perfect, I try to improve every day with more complex things, for example today I found how to make the characters even prettier, and I'm sorry for the mistakes in my game, i intend to fix everything, English translation included!

 

[Huaway]

Its 0.6 so is there enough content or are we gonna be waiting patiently?

 

[Nylad]

Its 0.6 so is there enough content or are we gonna be waiting patiently?

I advise to wait if you want a long and strong story, if you literally want some SEX, you can play it now ^^

 

[Innocience]

I really like the premise.
But to be honest the story is stumbling over itself to get from plot point to plot point so far. The 180° turn of the protagonist is jarring which is amplified by how much of a sub he already starts out as.
The english dialogue feels really unnatural at times.
There are still french passages popping up here and there.

Gonna keep this on the list. The outline and idea is good. I just hope the story and storytelling will improve to meet its potential.
My advice to the author would be: Think about the primary goal of your storytelling. Either go full on porn and focus on setting up hot and well written scenes or flash out the story more and lean into the storytelling and character aspect.
I feel the game tries to move from point to point far too quickly right now and the sex scenes aren't up to it yet.

Just my two cents.

 

[meluna]

Please add this tags : urination , humiliation , animated , humor .

 

[Jeevant]

Please add this tags : urination , humiliation , animated , humor .

Done

 

[NanasBananas]

Alright, for anyone wondering, this doesn't seem to be a femdom game. It starts out femdom, but apparently that's just setup to motivate the mc to grow a spine, and the moment he shows more dominance his former bullies seem to immediately fall in love with him.

So, adjust your expectations accordingly.

 

[Nylad]

I really like the premise.
But to be honest the story is stumbling over itself to get from plot point to plot point so far. The 180° turn of the protagonist is jarring which is amplified by how much of a sub he already starts out as.
The english dialogue feels really unnatural at times.
There are still french passages popping up here and there.

Gonna keep this on the list. The outline and idea is good. I just hope the story and storytelling will improve to meet its potential.
My advice to the author would be: Think about the primary goal of your storytelling. Either go full on porn and focus on setting up hot and well written scenes or flash out the story more and lean into the storytelling and character aspect.
I feel the game tries to move from point to point far too quickly right now and the sex scenes aren't up to it yet.

Just my two cents.

I think the same, I would like to make a game with a good story, without necessarily starting on 100% sex, but as I said, given that this is my first game, I have a little trouble, but I begin to understand, I often change my dialogues to make the story last a little longer, anyway, for the translation I'm sorry, I'm waiting for a friend to translate for me (He has a better English than mine, and he does not need Deepl).

But thank you very much for your constructive advice !

 

[Nylad]

Alright, for anyone wondering, this doesn't seem to be a femdom game. It starts out femdom, but apparently that's just setup to motivate the mc to grow a spine, and the moment he shows more dominance his former bullies seem to immediately fall in love with him.

So, adjust your expectations accordingly.

It's both, the mc may become more "dominant" but that doesn't mean he'll be dominant all the time, that would be a spoiler, but I have big plans to stay in femdom

 

[Mister_M]

Game has potential and I can say that I did enjoy playing it, though I would suggest working on the story and pacing. Currently the transitions between scenes are quite jarring, I feel like we could spend 1-2 more renders to make a transitions smoother and make everything more connected. I'd like to see some more choices (like the ones at the coffee shop) that influence relationships and have slightly more control over MC (esp. in terms of his final behaviour). Regarding femdom scenes I think they could be more intense, for example the foot/sock smother scene: slightly more renders, maybe add the description of the smell, sock texture etc. to better forward MC's humiliation and maybe his arousal too, some talk about him being humiliated in public and watched by other girl, being dommed by a smaller girl, he could be ridiculed by her and laughed at a little bit more, I think more verbal humiliation wouldn't hurt too (they are bullies after all) and so on; with piss-as-coffee scene it would be nice if MC would take a sip, be surprised at the taste, looked into the cup, then we would see with him that it's a piss, cut to the girl watching him, back to MC and then we make a choice to drink (or not), he closes the cup and starts to drink, cut to the girl with a smirk, scene continues with the description of the taste and his feelings about drinking bully's piss in public while she's looking at him. I won't be talking about proofreading, cause almost everyone said smth about it

The biggest question is though: will there be a femdom route or the player will be forced to take his revenge as the ending suggests? (Preferably a full femdom route will be avaiable). Edit: apparently I write my posts too long. Great to hear you're planning to leave a femdom route.

[Add some sweaty sock gagging, sweat play and spitting to (lighter moments of the) game if you can ]

Good luck!

 

[Nylad]

Game has potential and I can say that I did enjoy playing it, though I would suggest working on the story and pacing. Currently the transitions between scenes are quite jarring, I feel like we could spend 1-2 more renders to make a transitions smoother and make everything more connected. I'd like to see some more choices (like the ones at the coffee shop) that influence relationships and have slightly more control over MC (esp. in terms of his final behaviour). Regarding femdom scenes I think they could be more intense, for example the foot/sock smother scene: slightly more renders, maybe add the description of the smell, sock texture etc. to better forward MC's humiliation and maybe his arousal too, some talk about him being humiliated in public and watched by other girl, being dommed by a smaller girl, he could be ridiculed by her and laughed at a little bit more, I think more verbal humiliation wouldn't hurt too (they are bullies after all) and so on; with piss-as-coffee scene it would be nice if MC would take a sip, be surprised at the taste, looked into the cup, then we would see with him that it's a piss, cut to the girl watching him, back to MC and then we make a choice to drink (or not), he closes the cup and starts to drink, cut to the girl with a smirk, scene continues with the description of the taste and his feelings about drinking bully's piss in public while she's looking at him. I won't be talking about proofreading, cause almost everyone said smth about it

The biggest question is though: will there be a femdom route or the player will be forced to take his revenge as the ending suggests? (Preferably a full femdom route will be avaiable). Edit: apparently I write my posts too long. Great to hear you're planning to leave a femdom route.

[Add some sweaty sock gagging, sweat play and spitting to (lighter moments of the) game if you can ]

Good luck!

Thank you very much! I note all the ideas, I think to make a big overhaul of the texts, and as you indicated it managed a little better the transitions, for the choices, I plan to add a lot, and for the route, there will be both, dominant and dominated to be exact in my words !

I'm working on it now, with everyone's advice ^^

 

[RossoX]

Well at least the title and game goes straight to the point and I approve of that.

 

[elle21]

Android?

Play it with app joiplay

 

[bobdillan]

You could have at least changed the hair colours around or styles to make it obvious this isn't a bully is my lover clone with a focus on femdom....

And I mean that, like it comes accross as a gutted clone of bully is my lover but with a focus on the bully aspect. Like you have the light haired pony tail side girl, the dark hair leader, and the short haired servant... all with the same if not very similar hair colours.

Is going to make most people think it is just a cheap rip-off/cashgrab, which i honestly can't be sure it isn't. Like seriously it looks like you copy pasted the three bullies from that game and changed it slightly.
And bluntly speaking made it worse.... cause the other game has really nice renders so you aren't doing yourself any favors by forcing that comparison, would be better to change them to look like their own characters.

The desc sounds like you are going with your own story... but the three bullies... with basically the same look... bruh. just google pretty woman or something and just pick three for aesthetics.

 

[cousin]

nice game

 

[NiiChan]

You could have at least changed the hair colours around or styles to make it obvious this isn't a bully is my lover clone with a focus on femdom....

And I mean that, like it comes accross as a gutted clone of bully is my lover but with a focus on the bully aspect. Like you have the light haired pony tail side girl, the dark hair leader, and the short haired servant... all with the same if not very similar hair colours.

Is going to make most people think it is just a cheap rip-off/cashgrab, which i honestly can't be sure it isn't. Like seriously it looks like you copy pasted the three bullies from that game and changed it slightly.
And bluntly speaking made it worse.... cause the other game has really nice renders so you aren't doing yourself any favors by forcing that comparison, would be better to change them to look like their own characters.

The desc sounds like you are going with your own story... but the three bullies... with basically the same look... bruh. just google pretty woman or something and just pick three for aesthetics.

But, hey... As long as we can rub our meat, why not?
Imma try this out and see though.

 

[Succubus Hunter]

why are there no games of harasing girls? you can get bullied by a girl in real life, but can't bully girls, so why don't go out and be bullied by girls, pretty simple? it's not like bullying a girl, whereas you can be arrested or sth...

Sounds like you are new to h games. I suggest doing a few keyword searches and seeing what comes up.

It's both, the mc may become more "dominant" but that doesn't mean he'll be dominant all the time, that would be a spoiler, but I have big plans to stay in femdom

That is good news. I am okay with the MC getting a happy end in femdom games but imo that is best as one of multiple optional endings after MC has suffered much humiliation under the heel or butt of his dominating bully.

 

[Nylad]

You could have at least changed the hair colours around or styles to make it obvious this isn't a bully is my lover clone with a focus on femdom....

And I mean that, like it comes accross as a gutted clone of bully is my lover but with a focus on the bully aspect. Like you have the light haired pony tail side girl, the dark hair leader, and the short haired servant... all with the same if not very similar hair colours.

Is going to make most people think it is just a cheap rip-off/cashgrab, which i honestly can't be sure it isn't. Like seriously it looks like you copy pasted the three bullies from that game and changed it slightly.
And bluntly speaking made it worse.... cause the other game has really nice renders so you aren't doing yourself any favors by forcing that comparison, would be better to change them to look like their own characters.

The desc sounds like you are going with your own story... but the three bullies... with basically the same look... bruh. just google pretty woman or something and just pick three for aesthetics.

I'll say it clearly, I'm the kind of person who respects people's opinions, but I can't let you say that, first of all, I'm a fan of "My Bully Is My Lover", and of "My Real Desire", hence the reference to the two with the screen on the computer, it was purely as a parody and to make a double reference, then, it's not because I put "Bully" that it's a copy, there is no connection, it's not at all the same story, nor the same atmosphere, there is nothing comparable. it's like saying coca is pepsi because both make bubbles bruh, well, then for the girls, they are based on my personal taste, moreover, I think I'm free to create the character I want, right? I would have put a blonde girl as the leader, I would have been told the same thing, same for the redhead, but excuse me but in life, there are no girls with natural blue hair, I don't see the problem with "My Bully Is My Lover", there's no connection, even if I already said it, it just proves that you didn't play it, and if it counts as copying in this case I apologize to the developer of My Bully Is My Lover, as well as to the players.

 

[Nylad]

I love femdom, but it's rare to find a competent game developer to make a half-decent game about it. Nylad's proof that most game developers who attempt femdom sucks major arse. This was aspersers as fuck. What the absolute fuck was that?

I've never called myself a developer lmao, this game is purely to initiate me, it's not me who put it on F95, so I have no reason to defend myself, If you don't like my game you can ask Jeevant to remove it

 

[Grandy_UiD]

Femdom is awesome, but I'm sick of the always-the-same-looking Honey Select renders...

Good luck to the dev anyway.