VN Ren'Py The Coven [v0.8] [Former Flame]

[Draver1]

While I am really enjoying the story, I totally agree with many of the complaints I've seen in the reviews. The story seems disjointed in a dreamlike way. Time skips, and seemingly random location changes happen way too often, and usually without any context. Right now I'm in total agreement with the Dryads that this school is doing a terrible job of teaching him anything. The outdoors defense class was a perfect opportunity for them to show him something by having at least one of the more experienced students demonstrate how to do it, rather than just throwing him into the deep end. Choices don't really seem to matter, except to avoid certain sex scenes. Character motivations are pretty inconsistent, even the MC's. When I look at it critically, the cons outweigh the pros by a pretty large margin, but I am looking forward to the next update, and am considering subbing. Ashley & Cassie are just too hot, I guess.

 

[Badgerlad]

My fucking god, the punctuation in this VN is so horrible, my OCD is going crazy. Ever heard of question marks, commas or periods? Jesus fucking Christ.........

It really is on a thin line between "let's eat, grandma" and "let's eat grandma" at times.

Like when you're walking to the dryads and ask if you can't just teleport there. The answer is "No protection spells prevent it". Well then, why the hell are we still walking, woman?

 

[BlasKyau]

It really is on a thin line between "let's eat, grandma" and "let's eat grandma" at times.

Like when you're walking to the dryads and ask if you can't just teleport there. The answer is "No protection spells prevent it". Well then, why the hell are we still walking, woman?

A single comma changes the meaning of the entire sentence.

 

[Nulldev]

A single comma changes the meaning of the entire sentence.

Reginam occidere nolite timere bonum est si omnes consentiunt ego non contradico

 

[BlasKyau]

Reginam occidere nolite timere bonum est si omnes consentiunt ego non contradico

I taught Latin in 2nd year of B.U.P., more than 20 years ago. I have quite forgotten it.

 

[-CookieMonster666-]

Is it remotely fucking possible for this tool of a main character to get through a single class without fucking it up? He can't even do yoga without losing control of his magic and breaking his own ass. I am so sick of this guy. Like, that scene happens once or twice, fine. But versions of it happen every single class or teaching scene we see. It's getting old and making him look like a real dumbass. Like at some point he actually has to LEARN something, right? Isn't that the point of a school?

Good point. Nobody ever falls many times while learning to walk, sinks many times while learning to swim, or creates lower quality dishes many times while learning to cook. It's completely unrealistic that the MC would fail again and again trying to learn to control something he's completely new to. It's not a matter of losing control but being unaware of magic happening until it's already in the process. Look at the traffic accident: he had no idea what was even happening, let alone that he was the cause of it. You can't lose control if you don't have it in the first place.

 

[Sinisterheat]

curious about the music you used. would love to add them to my playlist. great vn btw.

 

[scooman]

Reginam occidere nolite timere bonum est si omnes consentiunt ego non contradico

Do not be afraid to kill the queen, it is good if everyone agrees, I do not contradict.. Or something like that.

 

[Nulldev]

Do not be afraid to kill the queen, it is good if everyone agrees, I do not contradict.. Or something like that.

Yep, version 1.
V2 is the total opposite, if you place your commas differently.

 

[Zemax]

Looks VERY interesting and i love magic
In fact, I am a magician myself

 

[Xiomi]

Can you guys tell me where can i download the android version in this game or this game have android version or not

 

[HornyyPussy]

Can you guys tell me where can i download the android version in this game or this game have android version or not

Use search in the top right corner, android ports doesn't always show up in the OP (same with compressed versions)

Seems like the one available hasn't been updated to 0.8 unfortunately

 

[formerflame]

I'll speed up the animations and if I have time go back and speed up some of the old ones. With the grammar, I'm not sure where the problem is without examples. I run everything through Grammarly and ProWritingAid and fix everything they flag before release.

 

[Deleted member 49554]

You will be invited to join The Black School a secret college tasked with the training of witches

Don't Mind If I Do

 

[doctorx6969]

i am liking this so far.... i hope this story continues and isnt short. There has been a lot of char building and i would hate that to go to waste.

 

[Jacowboy]

While I am really enjoying the story, I totally agree with many of the complaints I've seen in the reviews. The story seems disjointed in a dreamlike way. Time skips, and seemingly random location changes happen way too often, and usually without any context.

I have to agree, the story is missing a lot of connective tissue, and the begining is waaay too rushed... That said, the dialogues are very good, the feel very natural and realistic, but yeah, some more transitional/connective scenes are def. needed because as it is it feels a bit jarring when going from scene to scene.

I run everything through Grammarly and ProWritingAid and fix everything they flag before release.

Auto-correctors don't always find all issues, a sentence might be technically correct, but not quite right, as in the example given above:

No protection spells prevent it.

No, protection spells prevent it.

Both sentences are grammatically right, however they mean two completely different things. A comma can change the meaning drastically, but that's thetype of thing an auto-corrector will usually miss, because there's nothing wrong with either sentence.

 

[TigerWolfe]

I'll speed up the animations and if I have time go back and speed up some of the old ones. With the grammar, I'm not sure where the problem is without examples. I run everything through Grammarly and ProWritingAid and fix everything they flag before release.

I'll try and pass some issues along on the next release I read through if you're open to receiving them, and I see any.

 

[formerflame]

I plan to redo large sections of the start of the game as I get lulls in my current work. When I first started I left the MC to be a blank slate with the idea that people could self-insert if they wanted to. This has made it so that the MC is a passenger in his own story, which I want to see if I can correct. I think I'm also quite a bit better with rendering/writing now than when I started and would like to smooth out some rough edges.

I've been spending a lot of time trying to figure out who my characters are and what they want. I'm going to try and better convey that. While I think a story is important, it falls flat if none of the characters are that great.

I've had this idea to do a standalone Halloween episode inspired very loosely by Lady Dimitrescu and her daughters from Resident Evil and takes place outside the game's timeline. But that's on the back burner for a bit.

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I'll try and pass some issues along on the next release I read through if you're open to receiving them, and I see any.

That would be great.

 

[S1nsational]

I plan to redo large sections of the start of the game as I get lulls in my current work. When I first started I left the MC to be a blank slate with the idea that people could self-insert if they wanted to. This has made it so that the MC is a passenger in his own story, which I want to see if I can correct. I think I'm also quite a bit better with rendering/writing now than when I started and would like to smooth out some rough edges.

I've been spending a lot of time trying to figure out who my characters are and what they want. I'm going to try and better convey that. While I think a story is important, it falls flat if none of the characters are that great.

I've had this idea to do a standalone Halloween episode inspired very loosely by Lady Dimitrescu and her daughters from Resident Evil and takes place outside the game's timeline. But that's on the back burner for a bit.

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That would be great.

Not having MC be a complete blank slate is good, but don't over correct either. Don't give them so strong and rigid a personality that people can't project onto them and that giving players choices would be out of character

 

[Jacowboy]

I plan to redo large sections of the start of the game as I get lulls in my current work. When I first started I left the MC to be a blank slate with the idea that people could self-insert if they wanted to. This has made it so that the MC is a passenger in his own story, which I want to see if I can correct. I think I'm also quite a bit better with rendering/writing now than when I started and would like to smooth out some rough edges.

I've been spending a lot of time trying to figure out who my characters are and what they want. I'm going to try and better convey that. While I think a story is important, it falls flat if none of the characters are that great.

Honestly, I didn't find an issue with the characters as much as the pace and flow of the story, it needs more "breathing room" so to speak. That said, the MC does need some work towards the begining, he's very passive towards the insane shit that's happening to him, I would've expected more shock at the revelations and he's kinda like "ok, sure, whatever", which removes a lot of the weight of the story, imo.