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These issues are relatively easy to fix. Have the demons weaker individually, but vastly more numerous. That's probably what the author is already going for, judging by what's in the game already. There seem to be some translation issues, like when Zak demands that the main character "abolish" his father's throne, so I'm not sure how much of the dialogue can be taken literally. Especially since so many of their discussions are about rumours. You also have a lot of talk about the main character being King of Hell, even though there are clearly different kingdoms in Hell, and more than one King, so that's a bit confusing. There are lots of inconsistencies in the game, but the one thing that is very consistent is that the angels do not want a full scale war.Based on what we saw, any war between the two would end in 5" with the Elders just showing their faces and all the demons shitting their pants or get instantly wiped out... The MC went on his own little killing spree after Inessa's murder and even "bullied" his way back to hell and there were no "repercussions", so unless they are suicidal, I don't see why the demons would wager a war against even more powerful beings if he'd kill a couple of them at college.
That power balance, or imbalance in this case, creates another plot hole about the MC being the only one who can rule hell, because the demons would rebel against anyone else...
There are two problems with that. Firstly they already rebelled against the MC once, that's why Inessa is dead, and secondly if the result of that "rebellion" was hundreds (Maybe even thousands? We don't really know) of deaths, why would they try to do the same against someone even stronger than him?
Bethor was very confident when confronting the main character, until those shadow soldiers were summoned. Then he damn near shit himself. I think that's an indication that being outnumbered is usually a problem for angels. This is also supported by Nyks in her desperation to get the main character out of hell so that he isn't killed in battle with Zak's army. The main character didn't defeat Zak and his armies in a big battle. He arrived unexpectedly, killed some guards in the hall, and then Zak. The details of the aftermath aren't conclusively shown to us. We know that he killed "everyone fit to run the place", but he obviously didn't kill every demon since there's still plenty left to rule. As for why the demons would follow the main character and not any other angel, it could be due to him being a banished angel (which is what Azel hypothesized).
I think this aspect of the story is salvageable. It's needs some tweaking, but it's nowhere near the shitshow that the family and college stuff has been.