I played your game for the six chapters: My insights, You are doing fairly well with the metaphysics, and dimensional possibilities. I have my doubts about the neferet ability to at will jump and be accurate forecasting locations. Something would need to record the data like an implant for her to fully do what she claims, entropy itself would cause errors nevertheless. While the gratuitous sex is usually appreciated, there is no connection for the mc with most of the girls, even those that supposedly are assisting him towards a present goal. So the empath even cannot feel connected and apathy grows instead. The murder of the gf and the look alike that likes him (joker like makeup and assistant to sinister female head) seems like a clone of the murdered gf. And the brother is an idiot, the writer does not know the science as well as he thinks. DNA/RNA of dead is not nearly as useful as live tissue samples even if frozen cryogenically immediately post mortem. If scarecrow (insult to older brother) had a brain, he could have knocked (sleeper) her unconscious (even without medication) and carried her away. The family relationships of RUBY and the MC's father.... ok the results can be dysfunctional and the desperation for attention and acceptance, and I also see it in the clones or the siblings at the mansion. Author seems to split the personalities of those supposed clones, which is not really clones but a cell division more on the environmental training aspect than the inheritance genetically imo. Like the boys from Brazil, child clones of Hitler, that are raised in family abusive father.... doting mother, to reproduce desired results. The instant adult clones, would have a short lifespan and high degeneration rate almost to the point of watching them age in days. My suggestion: work on character development for a few of them, so there is more immersion, have a reason for a group orgy, and fast sequence sexcapades. The chemical in the air of the old temple is sufficient. I hate foot fetish sex (myself) I think its boring and even less desirable than a hj which anyone can do for themselves. The only time those are interesting is if its forboden, or completely random surprise public fetish of a contact. Like when I took a cross country bus trip, and put a raincoat over the head of a willing girl who offered bj.