Alright. I really don't want to be that guy, but I figured I'd try this game today and got to 2nd chapter when my tolerance ran out. Does the writing improve going forward?
Game starts (and later continues with the same at the end of the chapter) with a weird diatribe from the MC towards the audience that has 4th wall breaking and a future flashback mixed in with a whole lot of ranting about random bullshit. He has a companion with him that I presume to be the Tooth Fairy for all I know. Skip unseen text, go.
There is a poker game. Why the high level of secrecy, is this some mob thing? Given what the game promises in the overview, would be reasonable to expect that. Game doesn't think so.
Can you imagine a serious tournament, legal or illegal, where you could hear shit like "HornyyPussy raises $500"? I can't but maybe I'm just lacking imagination. Later in the cafe Diamonds says that the buy in for this was $2500. In poker a buy in usually also determines how many chips you get. Yet in the game on the very first turn they bet $3700 + the all-in for who knows how much. Perhaps that is what the cops wanted to bust them for, infringing on money printing rights of the federal gov.
Also at the cafe we get the full range of wtf from Diamonds, from trauma dumping, to flashing her tits in the middle of the floor and sex in the bathroom upon first meeting a guy. For added irony she complains that guys only want one thing from her. Self reflection is not her strong suit.
2nd chapter begins and I am treated to this absolute pearl:
I was not aware the MC was training to become a diviner. And that's around when my tolerance for stupid hit a wall.
With 11 chapters total, does this ever improve? Are the first 2 chapters just the dev getting his footing? If not... Fuck.