VN Ren'Py The Missing Part [Ch.3] [jPk vns]

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Fantabulous

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The entire prologue felt unnecessary. Do we really need to meet the wife and daughter if they are simply killed off immediately. If you won't take the time and give proper weight to important events, you might as well just start us off after the fact and fill in with flashbacks as needed.
The prologue is necessary for you to feel as much as possible in the MC's shoes. To live the experience of love and then lose it all and learn to live with that. Flashbacks have their place but don't carry the same weight. My opinion of course.
 

Adhdclassic

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Yeah but they don't get endings so you can't even reject them.
no endings you mean ok. Thought you just wanted to reject cause in the beginning you get to reject the receptionist your friends wife brings kinda fun to see the wifes reaction.
 

Sayora

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On the advice of one of the forum participants, I tried the charity route with Lisa and was not disappointed, the story is interesting and catchy.
After that, I decided to check out the other paths and I would rather not do it. seriously

If the path with Sarah is still possible to swallow.
Тhen the route with Hailey is just awful, the female characters are written so poorly that I cursed my curiosity more than once.
everything is bad - motives, actions, intentions, everything looks like some kind of circus. Immersion is completely lost and instead of empathizing and waiting with interest for the development of events, you want to quickly fast forward and forget this misunderstanding.
I am very surprised by such a strange development of this route. The impression is that it was done in a hurry just for the sake of quantity. (
 

Sayora

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Guys, seriously.

Intern in a serious real estate company.

20 years without work experience and she is put in the top boss's assistant
where she immediately throws herself on his neck.
even if we assume that this will happen
a man 20 years older than her, experiencing the most terrible loss in his life, he will not even look at her and even if he does look, he will fire her immediately to avoid possible further lawsuits. Not a single self-respecting businessman will get involved with underage schoolgirls, even with huge boobs. By the way, Haley's friend is depicted as a very realistically typical underage whore Goldiger. But unfortunately, this is where the realism ends

This "route" is a complete fucking failure.
From a dramatic sad story to garbage novels for girls.

who and for what might like this?
 
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The unseen

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Guys, seriously.

Intern in a serious real estate company.

20 years without work experience and she is put in the top boss's assistant
where she immediately throws herself on his neck.
even if we assume that this will happen
a man 20 years older than her, experiencing the most terrible loss in his life, he will not even look at her and even if he does look, he will fire her immediately to avoid possible further lawsuits. Not a single self-respecting businessman will get involved with underage schoolgirls, even with huge boobs. By the way, Haley's friend is depicted as a very realistically typical underage whore Goldiger. But unfortunately, this is where the realism ends

This "route" is a complete fucking failure.
From a dramatic sad story to garbage novels for girls.

who and for what might like this?
Okay.
 

Maviarab

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Guys, seriously.

Intern in a serious real estate company.

20 years without work experience and she is put in the top boss's assistant
where she immediately throws herself on his neck.
even if we assume that this will happen
a man 20 years older than her, experiencing the most terrible loss in his life, he will not even look at her and even if he does look, he will fire her immediately to avoid possible further lawsuits. Not a single self-respecting businessman will get involved with underage schoolgirls, even with huge boobs. By the way, Haley's friend is depicted as a very realistically typical underage whore Goldiger. But unfortunately, this is where the realism ends

This "route" is a complete fucking failure.
From a dramatic sad story to garbage novels for girls.

who and for what might like this?
Underage where exactly?

Are you also aware, in the real world (not the one inside your rainbow coloured sparkly thoughts) how many very successful rich business men have young girls around to keep them company?
 

Bombmaster

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Guys, seriously.

Intern in a serious real estate company.

20 years without work experience and she is put in the top boss's assistant
where she immediately throws herself on his neck.
even if we assume that this will happen
a man 20 years older than her, experiencing the most terrible loss in his life, he will not even look at her and even if he does look, he will fire her immediately to avoid possible further lawsuits. Not a single self-respecting businessman will get involved with underage schoolgirls, even with huge boobs. By the way, Haley's friend is depicted as a very realistically typical underage whore Goldiger. But unfortunately, this is where the realism ends

This "route" is a complete fucking failure.
From a dramatic sad story to garbage novels for girls.

who and for what might like this?
She is a broken bird, Did you read about her abuse? As you mentioned MC knows about suffering, so it makes sense he is not going to willingly mistreat her. The worst that can happen is leaving her for another LI. and thats it.

No lawsuits this is fiction.
 

Crimsonfiend76

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not yet anyway. We'll see what jpk has in store for us later. I wouldn't rule it out, though it would be weird as fuck for me. Very interesting, but I self insert a lot in this AVN, so yeah... it would definitely feel weird.
I get it, you do you, but with all due respect, that kind of thing happens more often irl than you would think... specifically ending up married or in a committed relationship to your dead spouse's sibling/cousin/best friend. Grief has a way of bringing people together, and in several cases what starts off as sharing that grief can also help kickstart a relationship.

My only concern is if she will be an actual main LI since we apparently will need to choose our main girl at some point and I dont want to miss out on content waiting for something that won't happen.

I've also seen several other potential "side girls" and wanted to ask:
1. Will there by any penalty or bad consequences for pursuing these side girls?
2. Any chances for some throuple combinations?
 

jadepaladin

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Underage where exactly?

Are you also aware, in the real world (not the one inside your rainbow coloured sparkly thoughts) how many very successful rich business men have young girls around to keep them company?
Senior Mav, you better respect him and his +5 knowledge of who takes what coffee because after all, he's an intern.
 

XuFu88

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Man, very pleasantly surprised by the size of the update. Considering the content I didn't have my hopes any higher than a handful of scenes. From the beginning this has been the definition of a slow burner which is a bold choice for the genre to begin with but add to that the emotional weight of the content from the outset and I imagine this would be a daunting task for most writers to take on in any genre. I mean the hero's journey usually starts off by killing off the parents, at least in part, because doing the opposite is just heavy. Both in tone and demands on writing ability. Kudos to the person or persons taking that on because they've done an exceptional job. Easily some of the best writing I've encountered in gaming full stop. Some parts are a little short of the mark but only when set against the rest that isn't. For almost any other game the lows would be highs. Though, and I can't believe I'm saying this with as much of a slow burn as it is but the Hailey content seems a bit rushed. Even only if it's because by that point the pace has been set and anyone who's made it that far has clearly already accepted it. Just my take anyway. All-in-all though well fucking done. I mean I rarely bother to write a comment or review for anything. Keep doing what you're doing and I look forward to future updates.
 

Rammstein1

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Do we know how old the MC and the LIs (including the misc LIs) are are
Hailey is nearly 21 and MC states he's nearly twice her age, so I'm giving him somewhere around 36. Sarah seems to me to be in her early to mid twenties and Lisa I'd say she is pretty much the same age as our MC
 

Joan6969

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Guys, seriously.

Intern in a serious real estate company.

20 years without work experience and she is put in the top boss's assistant
where she immediately throws herself on his neck.
even if we assume that this will happen
a man 20 years older than her, experiencing the most terrible loss in his life, he will not even look at her and even if he does look, he will fire her immediately to avoid possible further lawsuits. Not a single self-respecting businessman will get involved with underage schoolgirls, even with huge boobs. By the way, Haley's friend is depicted as a very realistically typical underage whore Goldiger. But unfortunately, this is where the realism ends

This "route" is a complete fucking failure.
From a dramatic sad story to garbage novels for girls.

who and for what might like this?
C'mon! Tell us how you really feel.:sneaky::whistle:
 

CrazyRabbit

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Dunno if the question was asked already but is Madelyn (the sister) a new main LI or just a Misc or even nothing ?
 

DIKHammer

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Hailey is nearly 21 and MC states he's nearly twice her age, so I'm giving him somewhere around 36. Sarah seems to me to be in her early to mid twenties and Lisa I'd say she is pretty much the same age as our MC

Sarah is 28 or 29 I forgot which

Dunno if the question was asked already but is Madelyn (the sister) a new main LI or just a Misc or even nothing ?
I don't believe she is sadly, hot take but i like her more than the 3 LI's
 

Vaassaa

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Yeah most people but you seem to like it. Imo its what makes this avn unique and plenty like the backstory as it is, imo it does what it is supposed to do.

If thats not the story you want to read, thats fine but dont pretend like youre talking for some kind of majority lol?
I doubt he's the only one. This game is pretty decent and yet it doesn't get as much attention as others of the same type. I reckon the prologue has a lot to do with that. Once it's established and you get into it, it's sort of fine, but actually watching it happen really throws a wrench in the whole thing. "There you go, worst thing imaginable, now go smash some cuties". A lot of the dialogue also feels like it doesn't really fit in after.

In a way, I feel like the daughter thing was too much. Because the game is sort of about dealing with the wife.

And yeh I also would have just played and probably never commented it if I didn't see you specifically talk about it when I tried the game just now. As in, you'd likely not see the people unhappy with it.
 
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