- Thread starter Gon D. Eser
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I like the story, even it is a little hokey. Getting B-movie vibes from it, which is fun.
One thing I don't understand is why we have a Quick Time Event leading straight to a game over that comes out of nowhere. It's not even a real skill check, just forces you to jump from visual novel mode to twitch reflex mode.
One thing I don't understand is why we have a Quick Time Event leading straight to a game over that comes out of nowhere. It's not even a real skill check, just forces you to jump from visual novel mode to twitch reflex mode.
- Jul 30, 2017
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Hilarious that you made a typo to the alleged typo. But the I is next to the O, so I wonder if it is.
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I agree with the others. Please do NOT add free roam/sandbox. There's far more negative than benefit to it. More "freedom"? Add more choices/branches during dialog. Repeatable sex scenes? Add a "gallery". Stats/time/grind? No just no. Why add time wasting work to a game when most people just want to have fun, relax and jerk off.
That being said, I'm saying this because I really like some of the character models you made and think this game has potential. Keep up the good work.
That being said, I'm saying this because I really like some of the character models you made and think this game has potential. Keep up the good work.
Thanks, actually I have planned to add a gallery, but for now, the game still lacks lewd scene because I'm still focusing on storyI agree with the others. Please do NOT add free roam/sandbox. There's far more negative than benefit to it. More "freedom"? Add more choices/branches during dialog. Repeatable sex scenes? Add a "gallery". Stats/time/grind? No just no. Why add time wasting work to a game when most people just want to have fun, relax and jerk off.
That being said, I'm saying this because I really like some of the character models you made and think this game has potential. Keep up the good work.
Ah, well, the first game on a crappy laptop, not a native English speaker... guess I can't go too hard on him but still won't be pretty:
1. the story looks like it's written by a 10-year-old fantasy RPG lover. It's bland and mostly incoherent.
2. The characters are more than superfluous, they just jump on the dick and fuck and that's it
3. Engrish is unbearable and almost robotic turning a nonsense story into a completely undigestible mess
3. renders are really crappy and grainy
So, yeah, let's take a step back.
It's nice you wanted to create a VN and gave it shot but, in this state, it just won't do.
You need a writer who can put your ideas into a sensible narrative, you need an editor/proofreader for the story to make sense, and, obviously, you need a better rendering rig.
I am not saying this to put you down.
If you intend to attract some following and earn some money doing this you will first need to invest some money to make things right and, most of all, create compelling story players can immerse into.
1. the story looks like it's written by a 10-year-old fantasy RPG lover. It's bland and mostly incoherent.
2. The characters are more than superfluous, they just jump on the dick and fuck and that's it
3. Engrish is unbearable and almost robotic turning a nonsense story into a completely undigestible mess
3. renders are really crappy and grainy
So, yeah, let's take a step back.
It's nice you wanted to create a VN and gave it shot but, in this state, it just won't do.
You need a writer who can put your ideas into a sensible narrative, you need an editor/proofreader for the story to make sense, and, obviously, you need a better rendering rig.
I am not saying this to put you down.
If you intend to attract some following and earn some money doing this you will first need to invest some money to make things right and, most of all, create compelling story players can immerse into.
Thanks for your advice, but actually, I don't really care whether or not people like my VN, and...
1. The story was written by myself, and I didn't really expect it to turn out big because I didn't have a background as a writer. Even so, I will continue to develop this VN.
2. hmm.. really?
3. and 3. again. You already know the situation and condition
So I want to tell you that I actually knew from the start that if I wanted this VN to be big, at least I needed a writer, editor/proofreader, and even a professional 3d artist,(hmm..
maybe a programmer too, NO, it's not necessary it's just VN, right?), but I just wanted to do my own work that's all.
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The MC default name is Cebong. So, i'm assuming the dev is from wkwk-land?
Nope, your assumptions are wrong.The MC default name is Cebong. So, i'm assuming the dev is from wkwk-land?
I'm from the spatial world because I'm a Great Mage
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PLEASE NO SANDBOX, I hate it and most of us hate itI agree with the others. Please do NOT add free roam/sandbox. There's far more negative than benefit to it. More "freedom"? Add more choices/branches during dialog. Repeatable sex scenes? Add a "gallery". Stats/time/grind? No just no. Why add time wasting work to a game when most people just want to have fun, relax and jerk off.
That being said, I'm saying this because I really like some of the character models you made and think this game has potential. Keep up the good work.
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