VN Ren'Py Abandoned The Princess of Zunuria [v0.14] [SerpenSoldier]

[SerpenSoldier]

ok, its been a while since I 'chipped in my 2c' but I've just finished ver .12 and I've noticed several things that IMHO bring the game down. I started with high hopes in ver .06 but as the 'story line' goes forward (?) the dev keeps adding 'cliff hangers' and 'switch plots' (IE hey, a new life threatening danger just popped up!) to the point it is now distracting. I Like good SF and sex stories as much as anybody but I don't feel like we're getting anywhere. This feels like a 'matinee serial' and we're only on episode 3 of 36. That plus the black screens to add more artless dialog, and lack of any new H-scenes (since ver .06) just stretches it out and have lowered my enjoyment of this game. On the plus side, I like the art even when it's 'cartoony.' I appreciate the Dev has tried to make a 'Saga' of a game. And I think it has potential. I just hope he can start 'tying some ends together' to move his plot along or inject something to remind us 'readers' of the GOAL of this story.. . it does have a goal, doesn't it?

Hi, just want to say I appreciate your review and like you, I have been frustrated at times like "why can't I get quicker to the point of this story!?" ... And I assure you I tried my best to figure it all out... I think the slow buildup of the story stemmed from my distaste for games that go immediately straight to the point and immediately become corny to me. I hate games that are like "Hi I'm the hero, wanna do sex?" Woman: "Okay." But I'm aware that I may have built it all up too slow.. I'm trying to get better at this.. (Getting straight to the point but not rushing at the same time..)

Anyway, this has been quite a learning experience for me (first game I ever made) and I agree I may have gotten too much into the "saga/drama" aspect of my story rather than the sex elements. And as for your comment about "episode 3 or 36", I agree that my style of storytelling may have been influenced by episodic HBO dramas with cliffhangers sort of like WW, GOT, etc.. Guess it's my personal belief that story is the most important thing and I like slow stories that build up over time rather than just a quick story... I'm a fan of DBZ too lol.

One thing I will say is everything that has occurred in the story is setting it up for more sex scenes soon..and the sex scenes will actually have a purpose that has to do with the magical elements of the story... I have a fairly complete vision of how the story will end up and how the relationships will build up to and that's what motivate me the most just to see it all come to life through the game.. I suppose I may have spent too much time on introducing the characters and relationships, but my intention was simply to make it so when the characters do engage in more sex scenes, you actually are more invested in the characters already at that point, and their stories interweave with each other. Is it possible to make an epic fantasy saga porn game that can actually be taken seriously as a story? That was my goal afterall..

As for the lack of content, I do the best I can to program, write story, create art, learn software every month with the time I have to work on this project. It's really my ultimate wish to work fulltime on this project and even hire friends to work on the project but my patreon has been averaging about $70 a month so it's just not an option financially right now..

Anyway for all of you that support the project or leave feedback, I really appreciate all the support and thanks for sticking around.

 

[SerpenSoldier]

I agree mostly. But the intro? And "godess" was used half a dozen times. I had to say something.

Rest of the game seemed fine, though.

I actually appreciate any kind of feedback, including spelling. I hadn't noticed the goddess mispelling until you said something! So I corrected it and it will be fixed in the next update. Thanks again!

 

[SerpenSoldier]

Haven't played it yet, but I gotta ask: is there a plot reason for the women look like exactly as each other?

Meh, anime reasons (A lot of female characters tend to look alike in both 2d anime and 3d anime) I don't know. it's just my style. I won't make up any BS excuses lol. I might make a more realistic looking game in the future with more varied looking women but for now my game just has the style it has.. Also I think it's a stretch to say the women "look exactly like each other". They have different hair styles, eye colors, outfits, clothing, slight physical differences, still right?

 

[SerpenSoldier]

Also, don't forget, if you want to skip through a scene just hold onto the cntrl button on your keyboard (but some scenes may not be skippable.)

 

[professorx10]

Hi, just want to say I appreciate your review and like you, I have been frustrated at times like "why can't I get quicker to the point of this story!?" ... And I assure you I tried my best to figure it all out... I think the slow buildup of the story stemmed from my distaste for games that go immediately straight to the point and immediately become corny to me. I hate games that are like "Hi I'm the hero, wanna do sex?" Woman: "Okay." But I'm aware that I may have built it all up too slow.. I'm trying to get better at this.. (Getting straight to the point but not rushing at the same time..)

Anyway, this has been quite a learning experience for me (first game I ever made) and I agree I may have gotten too much into the "saga/drama" aspect of my story rather than the sex elements. And as for your comment about "episode 3 or 36", I agree that my style of storytelling may have been influenced by episodic HBO dramas with cliffhangers sort of like WW, GOT, etc.. Guess it's my personal belief that story is the most important thing and I like slow stories that build up over time rather than just a quick story... I'm a fan of DBZ too lol.

One thing I will say is everything that has occurred in the story is setting it up for more sex scenes soon..and the sex scenes will actually have a purpose that has to do with the magical elements of the story... I have a fairly complete vision of how the story will end up and how the relationships will build up to and that's what motivate me the most just to see it all come to life through the game.. I suppose I may have spent too much time on introducing the characters and relationships, but my intention was simply to make it so when the characters do engage in more sex scenes, you actually are more invested in the characters already at that point, and their stories interweave with each other. Is it possible to make an epic fantasy saga porn game that can actually be taken seriously as a story? That was my goal afterall..

As for the lack of content, I do the best I can to program, write story, create art, learn software every month with the time I have to work on this project. It's really my ultimate wish to work fulltime on this project and even hire friends to work on the project but my patreon has been averaging about $70 a month so it's just not an option financially right now..

Anyway for all of you that support the project or leave feedback, I really appreciate all the support and thanks for sticking around.

Sir Dev: Thank you for taking my review in the way I meant it, as helpful criticism. I like your 'world' you're creating. I like your art style. I'd love to see the 'saga' storyline develop the way you want. May I suggest a couple of things to help your plot? To answer your question about making a porn game to be taken seriously as a story, I suggest checking out "Long Live the Princess" for one that does a very good job of letting a porn story develop into an epic slowly but with good plot writing. I understand that the balance of Plot vs H-scenes is tricky because you want the H-scenes to mean something for the plot while your players long for more more more...more...which can ruin the plot. Another good story/H-scene balance is "Space Paws" who's strong point is multiple paths and results. In each example you can read the 'walkthru' files and get an idea of the plots and layout if you're short on time (aren't we all.) Finally if you're trying to learn software, Create Art, write a great story Saga all on your "off time" maybe you're a little 'too ambitious'? I saw a game recently called "First Contact" which the Dev said it was a short story as he was using it to learn the software, both game and art and how to plot something. Not a great game but looked like he managed his goals. Once you got the 'tools' down you can create the flesh out the plot you worked out earlier and be able to get your game to be more like what you (and I) would love to see it become. Best of luck and I hope you get more success in the future with your patreon donations. Oh, PS: for episode endings, try mystery instead of new character introduction/dangers. I don't spend time on the new TV matinees but I've seen a lot of classic ones and the better ones try to avoid just having 'cliff hanger' ones. jus a thought.

 

[Wet & Wild Production]

Random spelling mistakes don't bother me too much, but if the entire game is a cryptographic adventure (lol) I get a little annoyed at having to decipher what it's saying.
And, if the entire game has the same words misspelled over and over, showing it wasn't a mistake, but the dev seriously can't spell a basic word, it can be a little bothersome, but I don't think it's as big of a deal as some people would make it out to be. I could see someone not realizing there are 2 Ds in goddess, but the ones who can't use "your and you're" correctly, or use "should of, would of, and could of" instead of "would've, should've or could've" ...that bothers me. lol

I agree with you! It can be very confusing when a word is misused and means something completely different from what the creator has originally intended. Spelling errors are ok for the most part, but can be distracting too.
Just don't forget, the majority of the developers are not native english speakers, which makes it understandable in most cases.

I'm not a native english speaker myself. For my own game I have someone who does proofreading my script. Funny thing is, that she is also not a native english speaker, but of course better than me. My games focus is to tell an unique and entertaining story and most reactions are very positiv, so I think the result is fine

 

[jaimenazr]

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It came early! Here is PoZ v.14 ! Hope you enjoy!
Note: I will be away from computer a few days before any more news..

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[Alexander Krisnov]

Updated PC version to 0.14 if anyone got the mac version holla me

 

[CGames]

Is there any Raury and Alisya sex scene yet ?

 

[smokebox]

It was my first time playing the game, the character models are different from everything i ever saw, i loved their petite bodys, the 3d part is great, the drawn part is great, and the story is also great, i love sci-fi and i saw some references to movies that i like in the game ( at least i think i saw), also is very cool to see the story from different perspectives and how also everything connects and the plot twists are incredible, congratulations your work is not just good but its different from everthing i ever saw here, i am here 99% for the story, the sexual part is just a bonus in this amazing story.

 

[abagel]

I'm loving this game, but I really preferred the original art style, it was amazing and the characters looked distinctive, kind of cartoony but realistic enough. Just right. However I'm overjoyed to see this project is still going, so I'll support it to the end. Love all the slapstick kind of enf situations, the girls can't keep their clothes on, the story is twisty turny and fresh and interesting. As long as it stays like that it will be a fun ride.

Edit- nevermind, the whole shifting art style thing is amazing, haven't seen anything like it before.

 

[ILCjr]

Hmm, maybe I am doing something wrong, but when I get to the point that the three face Brock, no matter what choice I make, it goes badly, any ideas?

 

[Serkana]

Great update

 

[SerpenSoldier]

Is there any Raury and Alisya sex scene yet ?

No, sorry to say there isn't one of these, and I most likely won't have anything like this soon. I toyed with the idea but it just felt too weird to me. I mostly intend on Raury having a lot of "spying on" sex scenes where he's watching others have sex scenes.

 

[SerpenSoldier]

Hmm, maybe I am doing something wrong, but when I get to the point that the three face Brock, no matter what choice I make, it goes badly, any ideas?

Yeah, it's one of those scenes where every option you choose will have the same outcome. And it's supposed to

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[the66]

per request, here is my unofficial android port of The Princess of Zunuria v0.14.

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[themagiman]

I've read from a review that there is hypnosis in this game. Can anyone confirm?

 

[SerpenSoldier]

I've read from a review that there is hypnosis in this game. Can anyone confirm?

Not really hypnosis but there are brainwashed characters.

 

[Retro]

marked on hold, the dev posted in august that he's putting the patreon on pause

 

[curlyNadine]

So you can get a game over screen with alsmost every choice you pick nad if you didn´t save than fuck you your problem? screw you for this shit! Such games should not be supported on princible!

Totally forgot about this post.. I don´t remember what it was but i´m pretty sure i was angry bevor becaus of something else and let out on you. Sorry for that, that wasn´t fair and generally exeggerated. I still think its a negativ thing to ad diolog choices which automaticly leads to game over, since a lot of players want to try everything in a game and i never heard of someone who was glad about the game over screen. Someone said choices had to have weight, or something like that, and i agree, but it shouldn´t be a game over but something else that let you still enjoy the game.

Should have said it that way the first time. Hope you can exept my apology.

Like the art by the way.