- May 19, 2020
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"Kari is supposed to be the nicest, sweetest girl you could ever hope to meet. "
I don't think sneaking around behind MC's back with another guy that MC told her was a sleaze and kissing him right on MC's doorstep represents those traits very well. That might be what is giving us the wrong idea. Maybe if the kiss was unexpected and not something she verbally agreed to? Then again, she would still be lying to MC in order to hide the fact that she's dating someone else from him. Not the nicest or sweetest thing to do. If it's supposed to show how naive she is that she still trusts Randy after being warned, imagine if MC was wrong about Randy? Kari is (at least according to Pete) REALLY into the MC, so if Randy wasn't such a bad guy after all, her leading him on when she's much more interested in someone else wouldn't be the nicest or sweetest action either. Nevermind the sneaking around involved.
Lois has been great so far. Her character is a lot of fun. I'm very interested in seeing where you go with her story. Mallory as well, to a lesser extent. I'm intrigued by the little mysteries starting to crop up around ASi, too.
Keep up the good work, though you might want to rethink the execution of the Randy stuff. I don't think it's coming across to the audience the way you intended. Just my opinion, of course.
I don't think sneaking around behind MC's back with another guy that MC told her was a sleaze and kissing him right on MC's doorstep represents those traits very well. That might be what is giving us the wrong idea. Maybe if the kiss was unexpected and not something she verbally agreed to? Then again, she would still be lying to MC in order to hide the fact that she's dating someone else from him. Not the nicest or sweetest thing to do. If it's supposed to show how naive she is that she still trusts Randy after being warned, imagine if MC was wrong about Randy? Kari is (at least according to Pete) REALLY into the MC, so if Randy wasn't such a bad guy after all, her leading him on when she's much more interested in someone else wouldn't be the nicest or sweetest action either. Nevermind the sneaking around involved.
Lois has been great so far. Her character is a lot of fun. I'm very interested in seeing where you go with her story. Mallory as well, to a lesser extent. I'm intrigued by the little mysteries starting to crop up around ASi, too.
Keep up the good work, though you might want to rethink the execution of the Randy stuff. I don't think it's coming across to the audience the way you intended. Just my opinion, of course.