Ren'Py The Sin Within [v0.5.0] [CigarRex]

[CigarRex]

I don't think Nick wants to feature his family in this little scheme. But I also don't want to leave family enjoyers empty handed, what would you want to see?

Maaybe Nick decides he wants to have a private photoshoot for funsies back home, featuring Penny and Robin together. He plays it off as an artistic kinda thing. Penny and Robin freak out about the photos they took in his phone at the Resort if you did that scene

(not a promise btw, the update isn't about the family.)

 

[sukupuku21]

I don't think Nick wants to feature his family in this little scheme. But I also don't want to leave family enjoyers empty handed, what would you want to see?

Def love the family content, especially the lezcest (though I know the build up to this needs to happen, otherwise its boring...)

Maaybe Nick decides he wants to have a private photoshoot for funsies back home, featuring Penny and Robin together.

Now we're talking... Rex-sama.

 

[ArhraCole]

Found a Typo in the prologue at the breakfast table talking about Robin:

"Maybe grandma teatched her some cool stuff" said by our main character
teatched needs to be switched to taught to make it past tense.

 

[CigarRex]

Accessing the general results from the photoshoot poll, as well as sharing insights & who will make the cut ~

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[ArhraCole]

Personally I wish Abbie, Emily, and Chell had gotten more votes, but looking forward to how things come out.

 

[ArhraCole]

Another typo in the prologue:
Emily talking with Abbie about her smoking habit and telling her: "I can borrow mine if you want."
Should be You instead of I, or extend the like to add in let you to read either "You can borrow mine if you want." or "I can let you borrow mine if you want."

Not sure how I missed these my first play through. Sorry for not reporting sooner.

 

[CigarRex]

Personally I wish Abbie, Emily, and Chell had gotten more votes, but looking forward to how things come out.

For the record, the poll is not a concrete decision on who's in and who's not.

 

[Carrot3]

For the record, the poll is not a concrete decision on who's in and who's not.

Good, cause if Beatrice is in, I fully expect her mother to get scenes as well. Especially after that scene on the ride home.

 

[givemelinkspl00se52]

Played this with medium expectations and was kind of blown away. Great UI, great models, nice writing, good scene animations AND pacing. Eagerly awaiting more Ms Claire scenes.

 

[ArhraCole]

Chapter 1 a couple continuity typos for tensing while getting ready to go to pick up Robin form the airport.

First scene in the car talking about the car being fixed: "I had Mari stay over tonight to fix it in time." - likely needs to be changed to fix the time line and past tense phrasing to "I asked Mari to stay over last night in order to fix it in time."

Second same scene the Nick thoughts: "What if Mari saw me this night?" -- this should be removed here and replaced with last.

 

[ArhraCole]

And one more shortly after the first two above.

Third after they are arriving at the airport and Penny is sleeping on his shoulder. "Hah. Seems Penny didn't sleep well today either." - I think here, it would read better if you just remove today from that sentence.

 

[ArhraCole]

Airport scene before Robin

Mom - "Look over Penny, Son." - while this provides amusing permission for Nick to ogle Penny with moms permission, it should probably read "Look after Penny, Son." implying responsibility instead of inspection.

Edit: I missed that this was immediately made into a joke form Panny so ignore. Though, the joke line is also using over and not after.

 

[ArhraCole]

One thing I missed my first play through that I find really great this time is the hint with Dr. Cassie

Spoiler: Just in case people haven't played through far enough yet.

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Nice work with the subtle clue drops and foreshadowing there.

 

[Paul Kagame Superfan]

Some of the sounds (slaps, moans, screams, е.t.c.) untied from any volume slider. I'm trying to regulate the sound, only to hear some of this soundeffects very loudly.

 

[CigarRex]

Some of the sounds (slaps, moans, screams, е.t.c.) untied from any volume slider. I'm trying to regulate the sound, only to hear some of this soundeffects very loudly.

Yeah, I noticed why that's the case recently. There's a patch to fix that a few pages ago if you can find it - it'll be included from now on for new updates.

 

[ArhraCole]

Very minor typo in the Penny scene choice when given the option between tequila, sake, and wine once the game is about to open up. MC nick commenting on Penny's clothing in her bedroom after pouring the first shots and setting up the drinking game.

Line reads "Your look cute in these, Penny..."

Your should be You in this instance.

 

[ArhraCole]

Got another minor one. MC thought line while Penny is dancing after the

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outfit.

"She's letting her crush on my slip through!"

My should be switched to me for that sentence.

 

[ArhraCole]

Got another one, this time from Alice.

First time you go to see her at the coffee shop and they are back in the office.

The line from Alice:

"Mom!!! She's... luring him?"

Nothing wrong with the dialogue line, but Alice doesn't have (thoughts) with her name signifying it's being said out loud instead of in her head like I expect was intended for the line.

 

[CigarRex]

Got another one, this time from Alice.

First time you go to see her at the coffee shop and they are back in the office.

The line from Alice:

"Mom!!! She's... luring him?"

Nothing wrong with the dialogue line, but Alice doesn't have (thoughts) with her name signifying it's being said out loud instead of in her head like I expect was intended for the line.

Nice catch! It's intentional, though. Alice always thinks out loud.

 

[ProfDoc]

Small bug(?) report :
If you choose to take pictures of the book instead of reading it, you don't unlock the Lizard King entry in the contact app even after seeing it in the gallery within your playthrough.

Maybe it is the intended behavior but then I don't see the point of choosing the read later option instead of now since the scene where you give it to Greed implies Lust read it anyway ?

Anyway, played the entire update and I eagerly wait for what you're cooking next !