- Thread starter EthanKrautz
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So, the good news is you have two fantastic models for your main girls. The family dynamic seems interesting.
The dialogue, story flow, and story in general could use some work.
Examples: why would Emma introduce herself like that ("the feisty and outgoing one is here"). The same terms the MC used to narrate to the audience. Very unnatural. In real life I would feel like she has a major inadequacy complex and forces herself to act that way to differentiate herself from her sister.
Jumping to "stay 2 weeks with your Uncle" with no planning or explanation.
Imo, adding a sci-fi/fantasy element to your story to make it stand out rarely works out. I usually just find it a distraction, and this one managed to be distracting in a 5 minute intro. If that's the story you want to tell, go for it, but don't feel like it's a requirement for these types of games.
The dialogue, story flow, and story in general could use some work.
Examples: why would Emma introduce herself like that ("the feisty and outgoing one is here"). The same terms the MC used to narrate to the audience. Very unnatural. In real life I would feel like she has a major inadequacy complex and forces herself to act that way to differentiate herself from her sister.
Jumping to "stay 2 weeks with your Uncle" with no planning or explanation.
Imo, adding a sci-fi/fantasy element to your story to make it stand out rarely works out. I usually just find it a distraction, and this one managed to be distracting in a 5 minute intro. If that's the story you want to tell, go for it, but don't feel like it's a requirement for these types of games.
would have been nice to have incest content to go with the incest tag
i bloody hate false advertising
i bloody hate false advertising
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It would be nice to be able to select the ages.
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This is how they would look a few years later. Young adult?
Very nice. Careful with the young looking girls though lol, some games get removed for that
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Yeah, the normal version will not be published here.
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Normal Version? Where might one find such a thing?
Great start , looking forward to updates.Here's a Fan Sig, a small token of my appreciation.
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It looks promising, dev, just fix the font to the text, it almost doesn't look good because of the brightness and it would be great
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Yes, I plan to do that for the 1st update, correct the font, also add music and more sound effects.
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Hi. I was already thinking about it, even started to do one for the intro (actually it's almost finished...). But I decided to stop again, it's not needed. The game has already sound, so far no choices either. And I've read that music is also planned later. Doing a Mod makes therefore no sense for me.
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Finally got around to try this one out. Sure was short though, very short.
Now, I could've sworn that I played an identical VN, back in march/april, called "Unforgettable Summer"
(altho that one was just a 'demo'). Now I'm curious if its the same game.
(and no, Im not "promoting" another game, as that one never got any updates, and I suspect that Sunset Fairies might be the same game?)
Now, I could've sworn that I played an identical VN, back in march/april, called "Unforgettable Summer"
(altho that one was just a 'demo'). Now I'm curious if its the same game.
(and no, Im not "promoting" another game, as that one never got any updates, and I suspect that Sunset Fairies might be the same game?)