- Nov 3, 2018
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Transformation brought me here. Screw these other people who for some reason show up into every thread to complain that the game isn't tailor made for them.
- May 2, 2022
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Thanks, i will see what i can do to keep it tidier for the next update.
Thanks for the advices ! And yes, i am trying to minimize the scrolling as much as i can, but i am also worried about the number of passages and how will twine handle them if they get too much.
- May 30, 2017
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Twine can handle tons of passages. I remember early in my game's development I had 30ish and one of the devs on that Discord forum teased me and called them rookie numbers. lol.
Also, if you're not doing it already, you may want to consider using Tweego and Visual Studio Code. The guy's on that Discord can give you details. With the right plugin it will highlight your code and color it for you so you can see at a glance if it's a string or whatever. It may only work for Sugarcube but I think it's for any Twine project.
- Oct 12, 2020
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Please do not take what I am about to say as a criticism against your efforts at game making or as a person.
If it is possible, then I would suggest trying to locate an English as first language proof reader / story editor to go over all of your text. Your game is littered with hundreds of minor issues with the language. While some of the issues may be writer's errors, something even possible among best selling authors, most of them at a guess are probably caused by something else. Probably either it being written as a second language, due to handicaps such as dyslexia, or even just a poor school system.
Let me assure you that your game as is can work fine, so don't give up on making it or fall into debt trying to get this fix completed. Your game can function without this overhaul, but a facelift would definitely go a long way to making it seem more professional.
EDIT: Just to show that the English language is an easy one to make minor mistakes in, I just did a read over of my own post to you and noticed that I originally wrote "may be" all as one word when it should have been separated in that specific case. So please don't take this post as a slight against you as these sort of things really can happen to everyone.
If it is possible, then I would suggest trying to locate an English as first language proof reader / story editor to go over all of your text. Your game is littered with hundreds of minor issues with the language. While some of the issues may be writer's errors, something even possible among best selling authors, most of them at a guess are probably caused by something else. Probably either it being written as a second language, due to handicaps such as dyslexia, or even just a poor school system.
Let me assure you that your game as is can work fine, so don't give up on making it or fall into debt trying to get this fix completed. Your game can function without this overhaul, but a facelift would definitely go a long way to making it seem more professional.
EDIT: Just to show that the English language is an easy one to make minor mistakes in, I just did a read over of my own post to you and noticed that I originally wrote "may be" all as one word when it should have been separated in that specific case. So please don't take this post as a slight against you as these sort of things really can happen to everyone.
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- May 2, 2022
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Yeah, english is not my first language so i assumed there are mistakes, i usually try to double or even triple check things after i write them, but in the future i may look for a proof reader.
- Jan 15, 2019
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I enjoyed it like I generally do with image rich cyoa type games. I concur with Selaiko on the need for spell checking, but the selection of images is nice (except that one smegma dick.. urgh). The premise also allows for a bunch of creativity, so thats really nice.
- Aug 5, 2016
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This game is fantastic only one word is sufficient and as for advice go same with WendyTheRed try to make paras short no scrolling. I myself loose interest when there is too much to read or scroll.
Waiting for Your further update plzz continue and don't abondon it, don't break our hopes.
All the best .
Waiting for Your further update plzz continue and don't abondon it, don't break our hopes.
All the best .
- May 30, 2017
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Twine can handle them but why have a ton of passages when you can keep down the number by reusing them. I play all events in one location in one single passage. If you don't want to make an event system like that, it's easy to just use a variable to split up a long linear passage into say 4 parts.
- May 30, 2017
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I just realized something I totally forgot to mention in my original reply about scrolling. For stuff that's all on one page you don't have to split it up into multiple passages. I use Sugarcube and use a plugin called CtP that one of the guys on the Discord wrote. It lets you break up the text on a single passage into multiple pages for the player and it's super easy to use.
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- May 2, 2022
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I balked at the transformation tag but then I saw both male and female protagonist so I thought maybe the transformation will be a choice? Disappointed.
