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Calm down, pregnancy takes a while, your belly will grow after 4 months. It will take a while for it to show other signs of nausea. The question is whether Dan will lose his wife and she'll become a slut or not. It's a shame that the authors with this plot in their stories are all standing still.that's definitely the problem with setting up the expectation and deadline. If we assume he has a full time job and hopefully a social life, hobbies, etc. this much writing is a lot - especially 20 chapters in and trying to make it still good. The real problem he's come to is that he's refusing to push the story closer to the finish so I'm confused.
Chapter 21 might be the worst. All of those words just for Sarah/Dan to repeat the usual 'giving in to Lester' with little resistance - UNEARNED mind you. There was nothing new from Lester's end. They just easily gave in. Like wtf? Then the sex scene was routine. The only good part was the blow job. As a writer, he put himself in a corner and didn't know how to get out, so he went back to the well. Ch21 should've left Lester alone and started something new for her. Maybe he didn't want to get in the 3some right away and wanted a slight intro to it first. But that could've been done with Jesse and Dan or something. Or just move this along already.
If she was in the room with Jesse and Byron, she would've gave in because we've already established the seeds of a 3some in her mind, and the naughtiness of it all - the withdrawal from Lester - would've had her craving that next level orgasm again (assuming they'd have bigger dicks than Dan as a cherry on top). Bam, that's it. Let's go to finish line already. How the fuck is she not pregnant yet? Explain it already if she's on birth control, otherwise what are these 'precautions' she mentioned. Unless the amazing irony is that Lester's boys cant swim.
This is where Don messed up in the writing, he keeps trying to take baby steps and repeating himself and it's hurting the story immensely.
Thank you Snafu4977 for saving the day and sanity of the crewFinal version of chapter 21
only skimmed through it, doesn't look any different to the alpha draft ?Thank you Snafu4977 for saving the day and sanity of the crew
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I try to look on the brighter side and hope Don could right the ship, but you are correct Snafu. Don‘s early chapters of Toxic Attraction generated a lot of buzz online which drew my attention to his stories and this forum. He gained my respect for someone who could generate story after story continuously each month, especially compared to other authors who would start a series and then disappear. It would be crazy to think any author would relinquish control of their story to the highest bidder. Why sacrifice your integrity and reputation when all it takes is creating quality content. If the content is good people will come back and buy more. All this to vent, but I am too invested to walk away from Toxic Attraction. I will see this train wreck to the bitter end, but my excitement level has definitely waned after reading this chapter.i think he lost control of the story a few chapters ago, he seems to be writing to please the requests from his highest paying members on patreon now.
That could explain how Don ”meets” his monthly deadlines. What do you think of Don’s other long form stories? Neighborhood Encounter? Tainted Conception? I’m waiting for Don to write more chapters on each so I can binge read and become invested in the characters. For a short story, I did enjoy Don’s Detestable Liaisons which had similar vibes to Toxic Attraction just condensed. Hopefully the story comes to a conclusion soon so will not evolve into Toxic Attraction lite.Some of them might be writing the chapters
Not sure there are any. Antarctica is close but not quite as good. Avid has started writing again and it's pretty terrible. And someone restarted Neighbor Chronicles as a 'redux' but it's only alright.Maybe everyone could chip in on any Don Silver alternatives
I agree with you SmartMan. What made Toxic Attraction unique was the plot was different from any other hot wives story. She was not a slut banging every guy in the world while cuckold her husband. There is some believability a loyal wife like Sarah would slowly be corrupted and manipulated by someone beneath her. That is what attracted me to the story at first. That’s why we can’t have nice things. Don wants to cater to his paying fans, but abandon what made him unique and popular in the first place. I liked I wish there was an alternative story, but you are correct some stories recommended are not appealing or the authors stopped writing chapters for a long period of time people forgot about them.Not sure there are any. Antarctica is close but not quite as good. Avid has started writing again and it's pretty terrible. And someone restarted Neighbor Chronicles as a 'redux' but it's only alright.
There's plenty of hotwife/cuckold writers out there but what I liked about NC/TA was that it was a woman who was corrupted by a singular gross man well below her status that won her over with his sexual abilities. Most writers just turn the woman into a turbo slut who fucks every single person she meets which is just completely uninteresting to me. An otherwise faithful woman being disloyal for one man is vastly more exciting to me than a woman who is just a massive whore who will fuck any person at any time. And that seems to be the path Don is taking as well. Having seen the top tier paypig comments that definitely seems to be what they're hoping for.
At this point I can't think of any writer sticking to the original path because it also means you can't write a never ending story to make money off of.
Same, I was excited for Tainted Conception originally as I thought it was going to be a quick burn. I could've sworn he said on Patreon it would be five chapters but I may just be misremembering. Either way I agree it's become the same repetitive formula as TA with no escalation or end in sight. NE I didn't even bother reading after a chapter or two as it seemed to be the same old strokes while also having the strange element of 'country boy cucks city folks' which really does nothing for me.I want to believe Don will right Toxide Attraction, but after binge reading Neighborhood Encounters and Tainted Conception last night I’m losing hope because those storylines were not good
Yeah the whole redneck and city folk angle turned me off real quick in NE and purposely slowing the tempo of the storyline. I found another forum’s thread on TA and most spout the same rhetoric as you described in Don’s Discord SmartMan. They find the story more to their liking since Sarah turned into a slut and now want her to screw everyone: Bryon, Richard, Jessie, the whole D&D group, and the homeless man. Seems like this forum is the only sane bunch who wanted to enjoy an unique cheating wife story based somewhat in reality not some fantasy, off-the-wall caricature Sarah is becoming. I can find those types of slut stories on a whole host of other platforms, but none of those sluts have kids in the story which makes the direction even more weird.Same, I was excited for Tainted Conception originally as I thought it was going to be a quick burn. I could've sworn he said on Patreon it would be five chapters but I may just be misremembering. Either way I agree it's become the same repetitive formula as TA with no escalation or end in sight. NE I didn't even bother reading after a chapter or two as it seemed to be the same old strokes while also having the strange element of 'country boy cucks city folks' which really does nothing for me.
Nope, it is the same, with the same issues I mentioned earlier and I accepted Chiily's wise words of waiting until this version came out, because Don is known for big changes or additions in the final but I see none. My review of thise chapter remains, 1 Meh down.only skimmed through it, doesn't look any different to the alpha draft ?