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i would hope DS has more respect for his writing than to just copy paste the same ending. However should he have Dan kill Lester, I predict he will do it by suffocating him with a bag of Cheetos. lol
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Or perhaps Dan will use his famous superpower of "pinching the bridge of his nose" on a loop until it drives Lester insane.Maybe Flaming Hot cheetos!
Great update to chapter 26. Love this chapter now. I love the dialogue he introduced in their sex scene, especially the "climbing the ladder using sex" bit. Tearing down her core identity as a respectable professional and transforming her into his whore. Loved that he made her thank him. Hopefully that becomes more regular but instead of the job, she should be thanking him for fucking her.
Minor criticism, I don't know why he put the "I love you" remark so early in to the sex and didn't follow it up. That should have been at the end. I liked that she said it without prompt but it was bizarre that Lester didn't react at all to it.
Minor criticism, I don't know why he put the "I love you" remark so early in to the sex and didn't follow it up. That should have been at the end. I liked that she said it without prompt but it was bizarre that Lester didn't react at all to it.
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But like SmartMan said earlier the only way Saul is being contact now is through a psychic or Séance. I don’t under the dynamics of making Mark a super spy like James Bond after being clueless for so long. Will Don pull such a stunt with Dan becoming a murderous ,vindictive husband or will it be Jesse who murders Lester cold blood so he can release his beloved Sarah from the clutches of Lester. Overall a violent end for an erotic cheating wife story. Hope this doesn’t foreshadow how Toxic Attraction will end.Thank you, I prefer your ending.
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While Luke has the force Lester has the power of Chester Cheetah to move an object like Sarah’s legsMaybe Flaming Hot cheetos!
It ain't easy bein cheezy...unless you have a mega-cock. I wonder if DS will put in a scene with Lester having Cheetos dust on his dick? Gracious...I can almost see the memes now.
There goes my "Lester v Saul: spawn of hotwives" idea.
TC was OK. I didn't hate the ending, maybe because I didn't care much for the story to begin with. It was a good short story stretched beyond it's potential. It does makes my think whether don will introduce the murder element into TA, not as an ending, but as a part of the decline of our main characters. We all know how sociopathicc Lester is but we don't know if he has caused any loss of life, atleast indirectly, so far. What if things get out of hand that either Lester or Dan or Jesse cause some serious harm and that will lead to the next stage of the story. Just spit balling here.
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I agree . I quite like the additions, though my criticism from alpha version still stands. Also, maybe I'm reading too much into it, I noticed in the final version there is a passage about Lester not caring about his dress as there is no one to impress or do it for him. Makes me think we might get a version your shopping spree idea after all!! *Fingers crossed*
Speaking of where the story is heading, there is a passage in the chapter where Lester wondering about taking her wherever he wants. Do you guys think he will bring her to his room for the weekend or take her in public, on a date in middleton? I would reckon he would try either of that before he makes a triumphant return to Dan's bedroom.
TC has lasted 4 chapters too much, and the conclusion is the evidence.
The end is totally unbelievable. Not Saul accident(murder?) itself, but mark being able to cancel of things from Saul’s phone and going to his house find and remove the HD, all of this without being caught by the police, in the 2025 with all cameras around and investigation methods.
More fantasy next time Don..
The end is totally unbelievable. Not Saul accident(murder?) itself, but mark being able to cancel of things from Saul’s phone and going to his house find and remove the HD, all of this without being caught by the police, in the 2025 with all cameras around and investigation methods.
More fantasy next time Don..
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I agree with you Caesar. Cut out the Mark sections and it would have been a good ending. Well better than what we got.
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Reading your comments made me realize something: Did anyone else feel a shift in their roles. Sarah seems to have accepted her feelings and role in Lester's life (if we get the same behavior next chapter it will confirm it for me), where as Lester seems to be pulling back. In the beginning Lester was the hunter and Sarah the prey, now it feels like Sarah will be pursuing Lester.
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Yeah, Jessie started as a perv, morphed into a stalker, and now that he's had a taste - he's a ticking time bomb. The moment he realizes that Sarah doesn't give a shit about him - he's going to snap and punish all of them. I'm not sure he's got the balls to do it but I could see him get to that psychological state.
There was a lot fixed in the final of 26, but I could be wrong, but suddenly Lester wants to turn Sarah into a prostitute??? I am not sure that makes any sense at all. My other big issue is that Sarah, on her own, tells Lester that she loves him and there is no reaction from Lester on this??? Really???
On the good side, there is a lot more exposed in their relationship and how they each see things at this point. This can only be good, but I sincerely do hope that this does result in 27 being the all hell let loose in chapter 27.
On the good side, there is a lot more exposed in their relationship and how they each see things at this point. This can only be good, but I sincerely do hope that this does result in 27 being the all hell let loose in chapter 27.
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It's not just you Psiber - I got the same reaction. It could be read two ways, because he says "getting fucked by me" and "getting paid to get fucked." I read it initially as a bread crumb that DS was going down the road of her becoming a literal whore for Lester, to cater to the fuck of the week fan club, or it can be read as she only gets paid/keeps her job if she only fucks him moving forward. The last paragraph of the chapter has me to leaning towards the latter avenue, but then none of us will know until DS tells us.
Yes. I hope they go shopping. Taking their relationship public is a crucial step in the development. I'm hoping there's a scene where lester is looking at another woman and Sarah feels jealous so she kisses him. Lester knows how to manipulate women and has already used this angle before.
Yup. I was baffled by this. How is there no reaction to her saying "I love you" without prompt considering his obsession with her saying it a few chapters ago?
That was really dark man. Would have worked just as well where the couple moves to another state but she's caught masturbating to Saul occasionally
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After all this time we finally get a I love you from Sarah without being prompted by Lester. However there was zero reaction by Lester, what an utter disappointment as Don and his editors weee too focused adding Otis to the storyline. Otis becomes the eye and ears for Lester and can literally open a lot of doors. So it’s an easy proposition for Lester to offer Sarah to Otis for favors. Jesse is becoming too obsessive about Sarah and could lead to a verbal and physical confrontation with Sarah, Lester, and Dan. If Don wants to plan someone’s murder in TA this could work
Really? I took it as he has no intention of ever inviting Otis around again. He, instead has a list of men for Sarah to fuck so he can show her that she is not a valued employee but a valued whore, I guess. Personally, I would have much rather had him say something when she said she loved him, like, really? and when she said yes, he calls her on it, but saying:
"no sex talk here Sarah. You are the only person I have on this planet. The only one who I care about and I think, if you weren't lying, cares about me. I feel something there but after all this back and forth Dan stuff, I can't handle being played with. Do you really love me? Be honest, please." If Lester can produce tears thinking about his grandmother's death or something, even better. However, I really got the feeling that he wasn't looking for repeat business but more of a building scale. I just wish he was heading toward love from Sarah and supplanting that which once belonged to Dan, instead of convincing her that she is not a smart business woman but my whore.