[Translation Request] NTR Mesugaki Magical Girl Flan / NTRメスガキ 魔法少女フラン [OreNoHut]

[avervon]

Hi, update.

50% done, which is about 10000/20000 lines completed.

27/98 scenes completed. It seems like that’s not that much considering I’m halfway through, but a lot of the scenes are much smaller in comparison to the main scenes, some even being as little as 5-10 lines long. A lot of them fall under what the game calls “Mini-events,” so those should be easy to bang out.

I've essentially finished the main "story" of the game, with the rest of the game being a scene viewer for different girls.

As a benchmark for the game, I'm going to lay down a bit more information about the characters, the tags, and some other small details in advance. These are an optional read, and will spoil some things about the game, so spoiler warning.

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So yeah, halfway done. I'm looking to find other games in the NTR/Mind control sphere of F95, any good recommendations? Preferably games that are not as big as this one, I need a break after Flan.

 

[Carryon]

Extremely good stuff.

Note on the Character Details though: the supporting cast of Aya, Satori, and Eiki are also based on Touhou alongside the Scarlet sisters.

 

[avervon]

Extremely good stuff.

Note on the Character Details though: the supporting cast of Aya, Satori, and Eiki are also based on Touhou alongside the Scarlet sisters.

Huh, would you look at that, they are. I'll see if I can glean any traits from their actual Touhou counterparts. Thanks for that.

 

[Carryon]

Not a bad idea! It's worth noting though, that Touhou characters are often subject to massive flanderization in fan works. For example, the "Strict Yet Reasonable and Well Meaning Adult-ass Woman" Canon Eiki is often (though not always) portrayed as a screeching and self-righteous loli with breast envy in fan works. Just something to keep in mind.

 

[avervon]

Not a bad idea! It's worth noting though, that Touhou characters are often subject to massive flanderization in fan works. For example, the "Strict Yet Reasonable and Well Meaning Adult-ass Woman" Canon Eiki is often (though not always) portrayed as a screeching and self-righteous loli with breast envy in fan works. Just something to keep in mind.

Ah. Funny you mention that. In this game she's the latter, she's a self-righteous loli-esque character with breast envy. Who may or may not be loud and screechy.

Also haha get it flanderization and the main heroine is called Flan okay I'll shut up now

 

[Eizen_Edna]

Hi, update.

50% done, which is about 10000/20000 lines completed.

27/98 scenes completed. It seems like that’s not that much considering I’m halfway through, but a lot of the scenes are much smaller in comparison to the main scenes, some even being as little as 5-10 lines long. A lot of them fall under what the game calls “Mini-events,” so those should be easy to bang out.

I've essentially finished the main "story" of the game, with the rest of the game being a scene viewer for different girls.

As a benchmark for the game, I'm going to lay down a bit more information about the characters, the tags, and some other small details in advance. These are an optional read, and will spoil some things about the game, so spoiler warning.

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So yeah, halfway done. I'm looking to find other games in the NTR/Mind control sphere of F95, any good recommendations? Preferably games that are not as big as this one, I need a break after Flan.

Finally it's halfway done!! Really thank you for your good work. Btw kinda surprised Remilia is elder sister, i thought she is the "imouto"

 

[Carryon]

That's another fandom affectation. The dynamic between the sisters varies from 'Flan is an unperturbable brat (or unhinged bloodthirsty maniac) always in control whilst Remilia is a childish buffoon that cries to her maid about everything' to 'Flan is an innocent sweet bean and Remilia is the responsible older sister', depending on who's doing the writing. That first one tends to be more popular in less tonally serious works such as this one, though.

 

[Eizen_Edna]

That's another fandom affectation. The dynamic between the sisters varies from 'Flan is an unperturbable brat (or unhinged bloodthirsty maniac) always in control whilst Remilia is a childish buffoon that cries to her maid about everything' to 'Flan is an innocent sweet bean and Remilia is the responsible older sister', depending on who's doing the writing. That first one tends to be more popular in less tonally serious works such as this one, though.

So Remilia is older sister even from original series? That news for me, since i never played touhou. Maybe I'm gonna try it before play this

 

[Carryon]

Remilia is the older sister in the canon, yes, but be aware that one of the main reasons that fandom interpretations of these characters vary so much is because the plot and characterization in the actual games is very thin. You have a couple paragraphs of plot exposition in total per game, and what we can glean from the characters such as the Scarlet sisters (who serve as level Bosses in the mainline Touhou games) come from the few lines of dialogue they have with the protagonists before they duke it out.

(There are some canon supplementary comics too, but characterization in them is not entirely consistent either between titles)

 

[Diddlekid]

Avernons doing the work of 10 men, what a hero.

 

[avervon]

Avernons doing the work of 10 men, what a hero.

Welcome to the world of freelance, where if you’re working on a decently sized project on your own you’re probably doing 15 different jobs at once.

It’s fun though, and if I’m being honest the sphere of common sense alteration and NTR related English translations is pretty niche/MTL bloated so it’s nice to fill in that gap a bit.

 

[carolbubby]

Hey all, I figured I should give my own progress report. I haven't counted them exactly, but I think I'm around 60-65% done with just Flan's pictures. A lot of them are duplicates or variations from here on out, so it should be easier for sure.
Here's one of the edits I was prouder of; it has a lot of elements that make it tricky to change the text.
I've run into something that I want feedback on, though.

Later into the game, these more uniform bits of body writing start popping up. What's more, some of them like this are absolutely tiny, and I doubt I'll be able to fit the text with anything but a tiny font size. Does anyone know of a suitable font?

 

[Carryon]

I have nothing particularly helpful to add, but I just got to say that I love how absolutely over the top everything in this game is. Like, that's a novel right there.

Regardless, impressive stuff!

 

[Nerro]

+++++1

 

[Yukariin]

Hey all, I figured I should give my own progress report. I haven't counted them exactly, but I think I'm around 60-65% done with just Flan's pictures. A lot of them are duplicates or variations from here on out, so it should be easier for sure. View attachment 2465697
Here's one of the edits I was prouder of; it has a lot of elements that make it tricky to change the text.
I've run into something that I want feedback on, though.
View attachment 2465718
Later into the game, these more uniform bits of body writing start popping up. What's more, some of them like this are absolutely tiny, and I doubt I'll be able to fit the text with anything but a tiny font size. Does anyone know of a suitable font?

honestly no need to translate everything perfectly, it's OK to summarize.

 

[avervon]

Hi, update. 60% done, which is about 12000 lines, 34/98 scenes complete.

Progress is slightly slow due to crunch time at my job and taking on an additional project, but I'm pushing through.

Most of the work is now being put into Remilia and the three sub-girls rather than Flan, so that's a good change of pace.

That's all for now, cheers.

 

[Kaz108]

Hi, update. 60% done, which is about 12000 lines, 34/98 scenes complete.

Progress is slightly slow due to crunch time at my job and taking on an additional project, but I'm pushing through.

Most of the work is now being put into Remilia and the three sub-girls rather than Flan, so that's a good change of pace.

That's all for now, cheers.

That's awesome man keep up the great work and don't push yourself to hard, also quick question will you be able to finish this month since you finished the Flan portion?

 

[avervon]

That's awesome man keep up the great work and don't push yourself to hard, also quick question will you be able to finish this month since you finished the Flan portion?

So there's three reasons why I'm probably not going to allow me to finish this month.

One, since I am working with carolbubby, I can't guarantee that the game will be finished by then since we are operating on two separate schedules, and I would rather not rush a deadline when he could just work on his portion naturally.

Two, I actually need to playtest the game, like making sure there are no grammar mistakes and making sure I haven't missed any dialogue, as well as making sure the pictures carolbubby has translated mesh well with my translation. That in itself may take a few days. I "could" release the translation as soon as I'm done, but I want it to be shipped out knowing it's the best it can be.

And three, there is still technically 8000 lines to get through, which is still a lot.

 

[Carryon]

I mean, when you first picked this game up, I thought it would be in a laid back capacity that would take like a year plus. Not for a second dared I hope we'd be getting a translation (probably, taken current pace) before Summer with picture edits to boot.

No rush, essentially, the speed here is already insane.

 

[Jhonsonkfc]

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