ThunderRob

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colour me derp...i took alot of mythology classes in HS and college..but that was 35-40 years ago so forget alot of shit..probably because noone connects Sweden with Norse anymore just Norway..my niece's Dad is Swedish and even he knows nothing about Norse stuff ...my memory is outta whack and i gotta refresh my olden tymes education regular..
 

rory68

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Very promising start!Nice renders,good sense of humor andinteresting plot!!Good luck Azrayal!
 

Azrayal

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ummm..why give the choice to retitle characters at the start when they immediately go 100% dad mom etc ...lol...that makes landlady and roommating not as fun...so sad :(
Hi ThunderRob, thanks for your feedback. Initially the relationship default was "cousin" but my lack of knowledge in ren'py coding, if x = y then etc, made the dialogue seem even more confusing at times than it already is. I then set the default to "daughter", I feel it may be worth removing this option choice for future updates.
also..please..do not mock cute SWEDISH dame Astrid about Valhalla..which is Norse..and is Norway/Iceland and nothing to do with Sweden :p
Forgive my ignorance if this is the case. I'd always assumed Valhalla encompassed Scandinavia.
 

JokerLeader

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I think this game has potencial, nice story, nice characters, good passing, hope to see more soon, good luck DEV
 

consumptionist

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ya..it does..but i'm old and CTE and memory loss makes me forget shit i learned in school decades ago :p most equate Norse stuff to Norway but ya..its all of Scandinavia..i've said it once..i've said it a million times..noone should ever listen to me :D HAHAAA ya hear that 80+ followers!!!!
otherwise...i enjoyed this(except boinking the sis..incest is icky AF and should be banned from porn..HAHAAAA!!!...let the hate flow...i can feel it building..BWAHAHAAA!!!!!!! aint i adorable? :p ) the writing was top notch..story intriguing..and the English..very English..so much so in fact..i'd swear they were from England :O

(clears throat and fakes mild rage which makes me look constipated) HOW COULD YOU? no to incest?? the blamphemy :D

well, you DID set it up, would be bloody rude NOT to rise to it :D
 

PixelRepublic

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Really good start to the story! The premise was really nice, and I liked the characters. Very enjoyable, and I'll be looking out for it in the future.

I wasn't too much a fan of Deb's slang dialogue. I don't normally mind slang dialogue, but that felt overdone and became distracting to me. It made me start to hate a character I wanted to like.

Anyway, keep up the good work, and best of luck with the project in the future.

I feel it may be worth removing this option choice for future updates.
Please don't. The story made sense to me, with her as the daughter. But you may want to remove the suggested relationships for Patreon.
 

Eerie Entity

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A very promising start, I'm intrigued by the story, writing and English is great too, and like Rob said earlier, it's VERY English, I found myself trying to pronounce some of the words the way the characters and Brits would, haha. Had good laughs too playing this. MC's sister is oddly yummy to me, and 90% of the time my preference is ladies with more curves, but I do find her delicious :) And MC's daughter, her washboard abs? I want her right now! Haha, I have a thing for chicks with sexy abs too :p

Anyway, enough rambling, just wanted to say that this game/story is indeed off to a good and promising start, I'll keep an eye on future updates. Keep it up Azrayal :)
 

Avaron1974

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There is one glaring issue I don't get that makes the wifes "well thought out" plan seem like it wasn't very well thought out even though it's for plot reasons it's still incredibly silly.

So, the daughters life is in danger, his ex new this and sent documents to him saying she'd lied to the daughter to keep her safe.

Why then, if she is in so much danger and only her dad can help, did the ex not also send something to the daughter to let her know she lied therefore she would go to her dad and be a bit safer?

Convoluted plan has glaring plot holes.

Normally I can overlook them, like I said, I know it's for story reasons but it's a big damn hole.
 

Korentin

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There is one glaring issue I don't get that makes the wifes "well thought out" plan seem like it wasn't very well thought out even though it's for plot reasons it's still incredibly silly.

So, the daughters life is in danger, his ex new this and sent documents to him saying she'd lied to the daughter to keep her safe.

Why then, if she is in so much danger and only her dad can help, did the ex not also send something to the daughter to let her know she lied therefore she would go to her dad and be a bit safer?

Convoluted plan has glaring plot holes.

Normally I can overlook them, like I said, I know it's for story reasons but it's a big damn hole.
I don't know if I'd say her plan was "well thought out", so why call it a plot hole instead of not very well thought out only?
 

Avaron1974

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I don't know if I'd say her plan was "well thought out", so why call it a plot hole instead of not very well thought out only?
They did talk about spending time coming up with it enough that she planned wayyy ahead to get him out of jail and in a position to do something. The one person she wanted keeping safe she left completely in the dark and wanting nothing to do with the person that could help her.

Seems like probably should have been the first thing she did.
 

Nightless

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Good Start so far, I like the chars and story is not that bad either, expect for the Maria never talking to her "love" about all the shit before she exploded :)
 
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MLBnoob

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I got engaged in the drama the letter gave. Honestly if the wife is somehow alive I hope we get the option of stopping MC's love for her and flaunt the other women she doesn't know. This is a nice engaging drama rather than a sudden turn of events in the middle of a vanilla story like a game here in this site.

Despite not being an English person it feels nice to see some English slangs and ways of saying things, its refreshing especially since the one of two other game I played that is taking place in England doesn't feel like the character actually is living in England with the lack of these slangs and what not.

I hope you keep going with this story and I hope it will be consistent writing.
 

Jonny Skull

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LOL that wife!

Wife: Alright dear you are the one and only love of my life. So here's what's gonna happen. First I'm abandoning you. Next I'm gonna trick you into never seeing your daughter again. Oh and get this! I'm gonna turn her against you. I love you so much! Okay so now that I'm dead I want you to take care of her again. Now I know what you are thinking, this is happening because I was killed. So what was the long term plan if this whole murdered thing didn't happen. Hmm well I guess you never would have seen me or her ever again. I love you so much! Wait why did I leave you and become some dudes beard? Oh and also I cut our daughter off from her grand parents too. That I did as a laugh. Love you!

MC: ....uhm. Sigh. Well how will I win back my daughter. It'll be impossible.

MC's thoughts: We could give her her mother's handwritten confession?

MC: It's impossible!

Love the sister btw. More brother/sister lovers dynamic! I want father/daughter/aunt threeway! (I'm just gonna ignore that the sister was still in contact with the wife. I think the MC has gone through enough without that too....fuck the more that I think about it the more messed up it is. Especially with the way the sister is presented as being in love with MC. That's all kinds of levels of betrayal.)
 
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DA22

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ya..it does..but i'm old and CTE and memory loss makes me forget shit i learned in school decades ago :p most equate Norse stuff to Norway but ya..its all of Scandinavia..i've said it once..i've said it a million times..noone should ever listen to me :D HAHAAA ya hear that 80+ followers!!!!
otherwise...i enjoyed this(except boinking the sis..incest is icky AF and should be banned from porn..HAHAAAA!!!...let the hate flow...i can feel it building..BWAHAHAAA!!!!!!! aint i adorable? :p ) the writing was top notch..story intriguing..and the English..very English..so much so in fact..i'd swear they were from England :O
Actually it also encompasses most of the Germanic tribes living in Germany, The Netherlands and what we now call the UK. They may have used slightly different names, but it is the same gods and mythology with slight changes.
 

Steinchen

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please let the mc not look like an idiot when he just forgives his sister for all the shit now.i bet he was or is a special force soldier or something like that so that would really let the mc look like a pussy there.

1.the mc and sister were in a "relationship" before the mc even married marie.they promised there each other "no lies ever" but she lied to him all this years and even told him she could not break her promise to marie that he never could know?? but she could break the promise that a bother and sister made??
why?? because she liked to fuck his wife without him knowing it??

2.she never told him she knew where his family is and i bet she knows the other shit marie did too.and i bet the sister was seeing marie regulary and fucking her even after the "dissaperence" of the family.

so please continiue in that way that the sister must suffer for her betrayel.if there will be a happy endfor them well lets see...

the sister even got arroused when she told the mc the "story" it does not look like she feels any guilt at all for all that betrayel and even called the mc "childisch???"
a sister that is sooo much in love with her brother should not react that way.
 
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