- Apr 21, 2018
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"It wasn't shown because it was implied that nothing happened there out of the ordinary." I'm gonna be honest, it may have been your intention that it was implied that nothing happened that night, but I didn't pick up on it. Maybe I'm the only one that didn't get it, but I didn't, hence my comments.
"As to why nothing happened(and also why Jessica didn't justify taking her bra off) - I like to sometimes leave things to imagination." I'm gonna be frank with you on this one, and I only intend this as constructive critique, but this game is a slow burn game, it is a teasing game, it is a showing of the gradual progression and changes in a relationship between two people (and the justifications and inner thoughts that come with it), and it is very much a visual game; leaving things to the viewer's imagination in this way is a detriment to the finished product, and goes against the style you have been building up until now.
In fact, the previous time you left it up to our imaginations was done really well (the time-skip/calendar) as it showed their relationship and skinship had never lessened, but that nothing new had gone on between them. And when something new did pop up in their relationship, you immediately showed it. It was, again, really well done and I have absolutely no complaints about using my imagination in that capacity.
"You already know Jessica will justify it with whatever silly thing she comes up with, it's about "being decent and morally correct but somehow help Danny" for her." Yes, and as silly as it may sound, I would love to be privy to those justifications she makes. All of them. Every justification she makes to herself about changing her relationship with Danny, because it's hot, and because it's a new step in their changing dynamic, and its what this story is about: The teasing, the exhibitionism, and her actions and reactions in her relationship and how she takes care of Danny.
"it's not 100% about "being decent and morally correct but somehow help Danny" at this point for her anymore. It slightly shifts from that to her desire as a reason to do stuff. It's a mix now." And I want to see that shift. Because I didn't see it until you pointed it out. You've done so well at spelling out the steps she took to get to that point in how she treats Danny, that I missed it (in the sense that I might miss someone I haven't seen in a while) when it didn't happen. And I apparently also missed it (in the sense that it completely passed me by) when it became an action born of desire and not her silly justification to help Danny.
"And I'm sure you, as a reader or player or watcher, can imagine different ways for her to justify it." I'm going to be solidly forthright here: I can, I just don't want to. I want to hear her justifications for it, not my own. Because nothing I can come up with will be hotter to me, than the canon truth.
"So. As to the reason why nothing happened in the "tucking" scene. Also - several good reasons were posted. If you want to know the real reason - Danny was sleepy, he didn't notice anything. So the highlight of all of that was the very fact that Jessica went there braless. That's why next morning she has thoughts about Danny not knowing anything. Because he didn't last night. Maybe that was the reason she found courage to wake him like that." - I can understand all that, it makes sense that she wasn't seen because of the lack of light, and your explanation that she felt more comfortable doing it in the morning because nothing happened at night is an excellent step in moving the story forward and an excuse for her to continue to dress that way.
I just missed it, and it took going to the forums and a note from you to understand that that happened. Perhaps a simple inner thought to herself about the previous night and lack of reaction, as she goes to wake up Danny so others users don't miss it? People process information differently, so while some may understand intuitively, other's may miss it, such as myself.
You may think I am making a bigger deal about this than it needs to be, but I am only trying to give constructive feedback on a problem that I saw. Truly it's the only one I found with your game. Everything else I found is excellent. I love this game. You know what they say: the largest critics are the ones that love it the most. And in the future I hope to avoid situations where your viewers may miss the sub-context. Also, those silly justifications are fucking hot. Like really. I fucking love corruption games, but too many developers equate seduction to corruption. It is not, this is a true corruption game, in my eyes. And those silly reasons that she gives herself are a part of it.
I also love slow burn games, the slower the better. But too many developers again equate slow to be slow burn. It is not. You need an actual burn for it to be a slow burn. Which is why the teasing here is gold. Don't listen to the other people in the forums about needing to speed it up. This isn't that sort of story, and there is no need to ruin a good thing with something they already don't like. If they want a "slow burn" *scoffing noises* there are plenty of other games that can give it to them.
A good suggestion.
