Anmity
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Which were in large part consequences of his decisions.
His sisters hate, the bully, stephanie. They all follow the same theme in that what happened with him was because old mc never really bothered to look at the people around him. He was looking entirely at himself, feeling sorry for his unrequited love of cathrine and fleeing into games and porn.
And with that people started to drift away from him. His little sister grew resentfull over his unwillingness to spent any time with her. His older sister became ever more distrustfull towards him. His childhood friend got ever more angry and lashed out stronger and stronger over her unrequited feelings and stephanie, without any support network, fleed herself into debauchery.
That's the major theme of the seduction route here. That mc finally starts to look at the people around him and emphatizes with them. Giving emily the attention she craved, giving stephanie the intimacy and support she desired, emphatizing and helping with alyvia's struggling and finally understanding what made victoria so angry.
It's really rather sad that at this point for the AVN, we have to provide Cliff Notes to help some viewers catch up with plot and character development that has been pretty clearly described and referenced numerous times throughout the story.
It's almost as if people are just looking at the images, and not really reading the words . . .
That said, this is a remarkably concise assessment of the character dynamics at play to this point; with the addition of one final note for clarity:
The MC is an "Ugly Bastard" - a common theme or "plot device" in anime / porn fantasy - and the phrase is used as a description of his attitude and personality at the starting point of the story. But, as the story unfolds, we are told that Jacky married his father when she was still a student (about age 16) and became pregnant with Alyvia soon after.
His father died when he was still quite young, and he doesn't clearly recall much about him (yet), while Emily barely remembers him - so her character also lacks the influence of a clearly defined "Father Figure", and she has lingering resentment over this without really understanding why. This is another aspect of the bond between the MC and Emily as the closest male she knows while growing up.
Final point: MC's father was a talented photographer, but he fully embraced his responsibility to support his growing family - and so he gave up on his dream to establish a studio for his desire to provide a steady income for his family - and after he died, the fact that Jacky never achieved any higher education meant that her earning potential was severely limited, so she had to work long hours at menial jobs, and money was always tight. This is another big motivator for the MC during his "second chance" . . .
Can we keep it short and sweet during the lewd scenes
Anmity
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Load your save, go to the top left heart menu for characters, select Jacky (the mom) and in the bottom part of the screen, click the icon to the left of the right-facing arrow. She'll be the only character who has the button clickable at this point.
Why? The excess is part of the charm of this AVN.
Mograx
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You will literally never get back the chance for your first post on this website dedicated to smut, lewds, and debauchery..
Of all the comments or requests to break your site virginity with.. THAT'S what you write? And pressed SEND?! On this site?
he is from vanilla team
COME ON WE NEED MORE CORRUPTION /DARK ROUTE games...
more as pregnancy and pregnancy sex , add some tears please too ...and some ahego please T.T
DONT GO TO THE LIGHT NOOOO
not really, people like to have strawberry on cake does not mean they like the whole cake full of strawberry.
I also prefer romantic than lewd.
Dogorti
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Finally you make some sense man.
That's fine. But I'd say the game has already established its identity, and that's to have a mix of the romantic AND over-the-top excess in terms of both the prose and the lewds. Asking it to be something different than what it is seems pointless. Still, you do you!
DatWanGai
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If you like to have strawberry on a cake, then choose a cake that mirror your preference. It's pointless and even idiotic to eat a cake full of strawberries and then complain to the baker about how he made the cake instead of....idk...finding another cake that's not full of strawberries.
Small-pp-22
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This is stupid then, you can't buy a cake full of strawberries and ask the baker to remove the strawberries, go look for another cake, or make one that suits your needs, or even order one, don't buy one already made then complain
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an apple pie so you don't fight with the strawberries. Ingredients 3/4 Stick Butter at room temperature (68 g) 1/2 Can LA LECHERA® Condensed Milk 1 Piece Egg 1 1/2 Cup Wheat flour 1/2 teaspoon baking powder 1/2 Can LA LECHERA® Condensed Milk 1 Can Applesauce (230 g) 2 Pieces Egg 1 teaspoon cinnamon powder 3 Pieces Yellow apple slices 2 Tablespoons Sugar Let's cook! Base 1. 1.- Preheated oven at 180° C. For the base, beat the butter until creamy, add ½ can of LA LECHERA® Condensed Milk, the egg, flour and baking powder previously passed through a sieve, beat until obtaining a paste with a smooth texture; Cover it with plastic wrap and refrigerate for 15 minutes. With the help of a rolling pin, spread the dough on a floured table and cover a previously greased and floured cake pan. Stuffed 2. 2.- For the filling, mix ½ can of LA LECHERA® Condensed Milk with the applesauce, eggs and cinnamon; Place the apple slices on the base of the cake and pour the LA LECHERA® Condensed Milk mixture. Add small pieces of the dough for the base and sprinkle with sugar; Bake at 180°C for 45 to 60 minutes or until the apples are soft. Offer warm or hot.
Stories with Romance can be nice but for this VN I'm all for more corruption and turning all the woman into your personal sluts. The only thing that maybe could be turned down a little bit, is the MCs obsession with getting everyone pregnant as quickly as possible. But I guess the dev and a lot of people here are into that. Probably wouldn't have much luck with such a suggestion
YogSothoth1982
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It looks like an ad of LA LECHERA®.
In the romantic route he doesn't seem particularly obsessed with getting LIs pregnant. Although maybe it's a matter of perception.Stories with Romance can be nice but for this VN I'm all for more corruption and turning all the woman into your personal sluts. The only thing that maybe could be turned down a little bit, is the MCs obsession with getting everyone pregnant as quickly as possible. But I guess the dev and a lot of people here are into that. Probably wouldn't have much luck with such a suggestion
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Development update
I didn't quite get done with all the renders but as good as. There's only about one variation left which I should be able to finish in the next coming days. Then its time for translating. As always, I have quite a bit of text to go through for translating so that can take awhile. After that I still need to do some audio, a few coding things (mainly reworking the scene gallery with code I understand and maybe a build in walkthrough mode), proofreading and finally some bug testing.
There is still quite a bit to do but the biggest chunk of work is done and all in all I'm pretty confident at this point that I won't need more than one more development showcase, meaning the v0.9 release should be next month.
I didn't quite get done with all the renders but as good as. There's only about one variation left which I should be able to finish in the next coming days. Then its time for translating. As always, I have quite a bit of text to go through for translating so that can take awhile. After that I still need to do some audio, a few coding things (mainly reworking the scene gallery with code I understand and maybe a build in walkthrough mode), proofreading and finally some bug testing.
There is still quite a bit to do but the biggest chunk of work is done and all in all I'm pretty confident at this point that I won't need more than one more development showcase, meaning the v0.9 release should be next month.
This is one of the biggest complaints about this VN though. You can have your winding prosaic musings; but its implementation here is amateurish, repetitive, and needless bombastic. I don't have a problem reading long texts. I can read through Hugo, de Balzac, Milton, the Greek epics, etc. just fine. The problem with BaiBai's writing is that he's attempting soaring rhetoric and it's just bad a lot of the time.
He's making a decent attempt at using proper narrative and rhetorical mechanics, but ends up overwriting, being repetitive without it being in service of a rhetorical tool like parallelism or some sort of assonant structure, and if you know anything about proper fiction writing it's just a slog to be subjected to. He should honestly take a few hours out of every day for 2-4 weeks and learn how to use rhetorical devices for effective fiction writing and it would make this whole enterprise a lot more compelling, and probably make the writing process easier on his part.
He should probably also read a couple of Hemingway novels, learn about the utility of concision in fiction, and then explore why you use more explicative modes of writing in fiction to begin with. I know that's a lot to ask for from a smut writer, but he's the one who chose to engage in large amounts of exposition without really understanding what makes exposition work in the first place.
Genuinely couldn't tell if that post was intended to be satire or you were just up your own ass for the first two paragraphs. Sadly, I suspect it's the latter. My goodness. I hope you find what you're looking for.