VN Ren'Py Twisted Memories [v0.9b] [BaiBai]

[Justonemore20]

Justonemore20

My posts come up on the first page when I search, but I don't know if those results are skewed cus they're my posts. (I just noticed that you typed 'proofreadING' so that might be why) I'm just posting these since I'm doing them anyway, pretty cool though if ppl enjoy them. I completely abandoned doing a change list cus it took too long. I'm already going through everything in the text file and then another time in-game. Whether my changes are good or not is up to you, but if you find anything wrong feel free to say so. The game's great, and going through it again while really paying attention to the text and renders (uh-oh) has been really enjoyable.

Well, I've already edited my previous post to show some things I'm unsure about in your proofread, but thanks for doing this. It's clear you've put a lot of time into this.

 

[Kai dlc]

So you want each day to have more content with the mc also doing more stuff at night, but you also want the dev to crank out days twice as fast as the current pace. I do not think that will work.
Personally I am fine with waiting. I'm not chomping at the bits to get to any particular point as fast as possible. What makes this game special imo, are the interesting and varied characters that go through character development at satisfying pace. Rushing out more content would just ruin that.

Don't be an idiot, I mean I should focus on the story of the main girls because if you don't realize if you only play the main routes there isn't much content and now you're going to wait more than 3 years for the weekend to detonate Catherine or other main girls.

 

[jvbatman]

Don't be an idiot, I mean I should focus on the story of the main girls because if you don't realize if you only play the main routes there isn't much content and now you're going to wait more than 3 years for the weekend to detonate Catherine or other main girls.

Yeah, you should focus.

 

[Alandir]

Don't be an idiot, I mean I should focus on the story of the main girls because if you don't realize if you only play the main routes there isn't much content and now you're going to wait more than 3 years for the weekend to detonate Catherine or other main girls.

'If you ignore half the content, there isn't much content'. Yeah no shit. And you call me an idiot, how ironic.
Bitch and moan all you want, it's not magically gonna make the dev work faster.

 

[Justonemore20]

Found another mistake, the walkthrough has the description of these options swapped, both in the original and in the proofread from wWbcbc.

Spoiler: Mistake

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[Justonemore20]

You know, my time reading the script brought up a question that I hope someone here can help me answer.

I noticed that in the script all the characters are represented with an acronym:

-The mother's is just "M".
-Stephanie goes by "FF", which should be "Female friend"
-Leo goes by "MF" or "Male friend".
-Mrs clements goes by "T" of "Teacher".
-Viktoria goes by "B" (which I guess is how her name is originally written in baibai's native language, or she simply goes by "bitch", who knows ).

And so on.

But alyvia's and emily's acronyms make no sense to me. Alyvia goes by "GS", while emily goes by "KS". I have no idea what that's supposed to be, I guess it's something related to Baibai's main language, but I don't know what his native language is. colobancuz joked about him being German, but I don't know if that's true.

Normally I wouldn't bother to ask about this since it's a script thing, but there is actually one case where this bleads into the game.



So, ¿does anyone here know what that's supposed to be?

Edit: I guess KS could be "Kid sister", but what about "GS"?, ¿Grand sister? ¿Great sister? Giant sister? ¿G-cup sister?, Never heard someone use the first two to refer to their big sister before.

 

[Clarence2992]

You know, my time reading the script brought up a question that I hope someone here can help me answer.

I noticed that in the script all the characters are represented with an acronym:

-The mother's is just "M".
-Stephanie goes by "FF", which should be "Female friend"
-Leo goes by "MF" or "Male friend".
-Mrs clements goes by "T" of "Teacher".
-Viktoria goes by "B" (which I guess is how her name is originally written in baibai's native language, or she simply goes by "bitch", who knows ).

And so on.

But alyvia's and emily's acronyms make no sense to me. Alyvia goes by "GS", while emily goes by "KS". I have no idea what that's supposed to be, I guess it's something related to Baibai's main language, but I don't know what his native language is. colobancuz joked about him being German, but I don't know if that's true.

Normally I wouldn't bother to ask about this since it's a script thing, but there is actually one case where this bleads into the game.

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So, ¿does anyone here know what that's supposed to be?

Grown sister and kid sister?

 

[Justonemore20]

Grown sister and kid sister?

Grown... of course, thanks. don't know how I didn't thought of that one.

 

[colobancuz]

You know, my time reading the script brought up a question that I hope someone here can help me answer.

I noticed that in the script all the characters are represented with an acronym:

-The mother's is just "M".
-Stephanie goes by "FF", which should be "Female friend"
-Leo goes by "MF" or "Male friend".
-Mrs clements goes by "T" of "Teacher".
-Viktoria goes by "B" (which I guess is how her name is originally written in baibai's native language, or she simply goes by "bitch", who knows ).

And so on.

But alyvia's and emily's acronyms make no sense to me. Alyvia goes by "GS", while emily goes by "KS". I have no idea what that's supposed to be, I guess it's something related to Baibai's main language, but I don't know what his native language is. colobancuz joked about him being German, but I don't know if that's true.

Normally I wouldn't bother to ask about this since it's a script thing, but there is actually one case where this bleads into the game.

View attachment 4938426

So, ¿does anyone here know what that's supposed to be?

Edit: I guess KS could be "Kid sister", but what about "GS"?, ¿Grand sister? ¿Great sister? Gigant sister? ¿G-cup sister?, Never heard someone use the first two to refer to their big sister before.

It's not a joke, there were screenshots from PC BaiBai here in the thread that had German on them, besides some points (like the marriage tax reduction) also hint at Germany.
In German: Große Schwester - older sister, Kleinere Schwester - younger sister.

 

[Alandir]

You know, my time reading the script brought up a question that I hope someone here can help me answer.

I noticed that in the script all the characters are represented with an acronym:

-The mother's is just "M".
-Stephanie goes by "FF", which should be "Female friend"
-Leo goes by "MF" or "Male friend".
-Mrs clements goes by "T" of "Teacher".
-Viktoria goes by "B" (which I guess is how her name is originally written in baibai's native language, or she simply goes by "bitch", who knows ).

And so on.

But alyvia's and emily's acronyms make no sense to me. Alyvia goes by "GS", while emily goes by "KS". I have no idea what that's supposed to be, I guess it's something related to Baibai's main language, but I don't know what his native language is. colobancuz joked about him being German, but I don't know if that's true.

Normally I wouldn't bother to ask about this since it's a script thing, but there is actually one case where this bleads into the game.

View attachment 4938426

So, ¿does anyone here know what that's supposed to be?

Just write Alyvia and Emily.
My guess for what happens with the Acronyms is that he conceived the ones for the family in german and then switched to english for the rest of the girls. But stuck with the original acronyms when the new ones relate to the family again, which means some are a mix of english and german. This way it would make sense and they would be:
GS = Große Schwester (Big sister in german)
KS = Kleine Schwester (Little sister in german)
M = Mutter (Mother in german)
And then for the other girls:
FF = Female Friend.
B (Viki) = Bully
C (Catherine) = Crush
Cbf (Aden) = Crush boy friend
GSFF (Mya) = Großé Schwester female friend
KSFF (Lola) = Kleine Schwester female friend
BM (Julia) = Bully Mother
TD (Abigail) = Teachers daughter

I was thinking that he comes from a german speaking country for a while now. One of the reasons why is that one of the pecularities of baibai's english involves characters constantly saying the word "nonsense" as a short response to something. Which doesn't make much sense in english, but if you translate it directly into german its exactly how germans use the word "Unsinn".

 

[Justonemore20]

Just write Alyvia and Emily.
My guess for what happens with the Acronyms is that he conceived the ones for the family in german and then switched to english for the rest of the girls. But stuck with the original acronyms when the new ones relate to the family again, which means some are a mix of english and german. This way it would make sense and they would be:
GS = Große Schwester (Big sister in german)
KS = Kleine Schwester (Little sister in german)
M = Mutter (Mother in german)
And then for the other girls:
FF = Female Friend.
B (Viki) = Bully
C (Catherine) = Crush
Cbf (Aden) = Crush boy friend
GSFF (Mya) = Großé Schwester female friend
KSFF (Lola) = Kleine Schwester female friend
BM (Julia) = Bully Mother
TD (Abigail) = Teachers daughter

I was thinking that he comes from a german speaking country for a while now. One of the reasons why is that one of the pecularities of baibai's english involves characters constantly saying the word "nonsense" as a short response to something. Which doesn't make much sense in english, but if you translate it directly into german its exactly how germans use the word "Unsinn".

Thanks, that clarifies things. Not gonna lie, I kinda forgot that viktoria is supposed to be a bully, we haven't really seen her be one. All the bullying she did are things MC says happened in his previous life, but we haven't seen. And from the moment MC came back to the past she hasn't succeeded in bullying him even once. And after the last update, she's even less likely to successfully bully him, most likely she won't want to. So in my brain she was never a bully, just a brat. Although I guess "B" also applies to "Brat".

 

[Justonemore20]

I find this really funny, I know Leo provoked him but the fact that this happens right after she acknowledges his maturity is hilarious to me.

Spoiler: Maturity at its finest

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[XKL27]

I feel like he thought about what he was saying and rightly decided to go for the jugular.

 

[aereton]

I feel like he thought about what he was saying and rightly decided to go for the jugular.

Well deserved I say, that little shit needs to get cucked into oblivion btw, sometimes I lament the fact that MC seems to have forgotten his ugly bastard roots.. He became way too nice.

 

[wiseold6996]

Well deserved I say, that little shit needs to get cucked into oblivion btw, sometimes I lament the fact that MC seems to have forgotten his ugly bastard roots.. He became way too nice.

Yeah it was not as if leo was his best friend for long. They grew apart in h.s. But aden and viki's father would be the victims of true cucking. Hopefully the game introduced mr clements too so we can do the same to him. Too bad alyvia actually broke up with dillan. It would be have been fun to cuck him too.

 

[Sekiryuuten]

Yeah it was not as if leo was his best friend for long. They grew apart in h.s. But aden and viki's father would be the victims of true cucking. Hopefully the game introduced mr clements too so we can do the same to him. Too bad alyvia actually broke up with dillan. It would be have been fun to cuck him too.

Viki's father is probably going to die. I mean, he has heart problems, remember? So he won't be cucked for long.

 

[colobancuz]

Well deserved I say, that little shit needs to get cucked into oblivion btw, sometimes I lament the fact that MC seems to have forgotten his ugly bastard roots.. He became way too nice.

Yeah it was not as if leo was his best friend for long. They grew apart in h.s. But aden and viki's father would be the victims of true cucking. Hopefully the game introduced mr clements too so we can do the same to him. Too bad alyvia actually broke up with dillan. It would be have been fun to cuck him too.

Viki's father is probably going to die. I mean, he has heart problems, remember? So he won't be cucked for long.

What kind and sweet people...

 

[aereton]

What kind and sweet people...

Kind and sweet people get cucked.

 

[Justonemore20]

Another walkthrough description that is wrong. ¿Do I even need to post examples for this one? If you read the choices and their descriptions in the walkthrough you will immediately see what is wrong.

Spoiler: Walkthrough mistake

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And one more thing that has bothered me for a while now (this one is text heavy):

Spoiler: The SFX problem

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[nalgonas4ever]

What kind and sweet people...

Some people get way to coocked, when you stare to much at the ntr void it looks back at you so you can't see any piece of media without thinking about it.