Okay, later than intended, but here's my first pass at the event file. I would have had this done sooner (or done more) but I am still unfortunately still ill. Did a quick run-through to make sure it didn't break anything (TIL Python doesn't like tabs) and it seems to run OK.
I have tried to stick to just cleaning up existing text (spelling, odd word choice, etc) but I did do some more involved rewrites towards the end of the event. I have made a few more significant changes if I felt they broke backstory or didn't make sense, and I think I put in comments with my reasoning for all of these. There's also a few comments on lines I didn't change, where I wasn't sure what was being said, and could probably do with some feedback on those. And Finally, there's also comments on a few lines which are basically just notes to myself but written like question. Unless I'm saying something like "i don't know what this is trying to say," it's not a question for you, though may also be something you want to comment on. Haven't touched the WIP sections.
I wouldn't mind doing more in future, but I think it may be worth holding off on another pass until the other branches are fleshed out. I'm not planning anything drastic like a new scene or anything like that, but putting more description in the sex scenes (and some others) seems a given.
Also, after digging in the main files, I found some Matt scenes off on their own, and noted that the game switches quite a few of Chelsea's responses based on her club in the main game, and it doesn't seem too hard to switch out; I thought it might be worth trying to incorporate those into the events, either just as flavour text (Yearbook = meek, Runner = confident, Cheerleader = kinda in the middle) or with outright different outcomes. Text is something that can be done easy enough later, but different event outcomes outright is probably best suggested now. Like, it makes sense to me that Runner-Chelsea might realistically get away by running, but the other two wouldn't. Cheerleader might have better luck if acting seductive, or fighting? Yearbook is kinda a shy wuss who seems to be intended to be a bit of a victim so IDK if she really qualifies for a special outcome.
