Obvious? hmm... What is a writer but someone who writes (or if you want gets paid to write)? Whether you personally think someone isn't great at writing doesn't make them not a writer. It might make them not a "professional" writer in your opinion. I guess what threw me in your useless rambling was your definition or should I say opinion of what constitutes a "writer". Sorry if I misunderstood what point you were trying to make.
Unless you're a linguist, I'm not sure you have the basis to claim that English is more amalgamated than any other language. Having studied linguistics, amalgamation and influence of other languages is a natural course of events (even in sign languages). Where some languages have it over English are that they are largely spoken in one concentrated area, and in some cases there are actually committees that make decisions for those languages, like major changes. English probably is so complicated because it is spoken worldwide, and in each area there is potential for language contact to influence it, making the dialect in those areas different than others.
I absolutely don't agree with you ...
I'm with you on this one. I absolutely love the writing and this game has had me laughing out loud many times. I absolutely do not agree that the dialog and character development is all over the map. I actually think that the development of the main characters (Mom, Jenna, Katie) have been slow and deliberate, and that the peripheral characters have also been developed consistently as well. I have nothing but thumbs up for the writing and story so far, and that's why I (like many others) are disappointed in the delay, but waiting with baited breath for the final (longer) release of the next chapter.
I would have agreed with you a few updates ago. The writing is clearly staring to go downhill though. I mean that scene with Lily just comes out of nowhere and has nothing to do with anything (I understand it was because of a poll but come on). Then there is the obvious change in writing style when talking to katie in the park. Of course there is also the very rushed sex scene with katie. I mean it happens literally right after the talk in the park, their lines were short and to the point making it almost robotic and a time skip in the middle of a sex scene? There is no way you will be able to convince me anyone put any serious thought or effort in to that scene. Hopefully they get shit in order before anyone elses arc suffers because of it.
People tend to be harsher on things that are trying to take themselves seriously. Ptolemy sets a pretty high bar for that as far as writing goes. People also tend to be less harsh on things that cater to their fetish. Which I suspect is a big reason so many get a pass on mediocre writing.
Have you checked out Haley's Story. Viitgames has done an outstanding job of plot and character development. Perhaps the best I've seen on this site.
[As if you didn't already!]Yes and it is easily one of the best on this site. I think ptolemy is also a writer for Life with Mary. Not as good but it is still pretty good.Have you checked out Haley's Story. Viitgames has done an outstanding job of plot and character development. Perhaps the best I've seen on this site.
Warning: It's about the MC and his twin sister (Haley) and is labeled as 'incest', although it hasn't happened in the game yet. So, anyone who hates that particular fetish, should just forget everything I said.
Each of his posts gradually pushed me towards not being able to help myself.....The sound of this guy running down from his ivory tower and galloping in on his high horse has woken my petty demon. Now get off your high horse, you're embarrassing yourself! (And your horse). And remember, it's a porn game, not a Booker prize candidate.)Don't waffle, tell us how you really feel.
I am going to regret this, but for those that know me, you will know I cannot help myself when I'm bored/tired.
No writer? Sorry to break it to you, but I AM a writer. Guess what? I wrote this game, so I'm a writer!
Am I a professional writer? No. Do I claim to be a great or even good writer? No. I might even be, in some people's opinion a terrible writer and I'm OK with that. But good or bad, the fact is you are wrong and I am a writer! So, for someone who seems to be so particular about accuracy, it's a bit awkward that you start off with an error.
Oxford English definition of writer: "A person who has written something or who writes in a particular way."
P.S. I have written something. And I do write in a particular way. The fact that you think my "writing" is particularly bad sort of proves the point that I have written stuff! ***Cringe***
Can you give me an example of a misused colloquialism? I'm not saying I don't have any - I've just never heard of one, so I'm curious what you would consider as an example of where a colloquialism has been misused.
"Foible" is really only applicable when describing a person's character or behaviour. So you could accurately say I have some foibles, but it's incorrect to use the term in the context you used it in. A piece of writing cannot have " grammatical foibles". The writer has to have the foibles, not the writing. And "foible", by it's very definition implies a minor or small flaw, so it should never really be preceded by a diminutive adverb, such as "minor". Don't worry about it. I misused the word plenty of times too, until my 1st year (secondary school) teacher corrected me.
These are only questions, not statements, because I genuinely don't know for sure (But I bet you'll know). Should it be:
{Actually, no. Without a writer....} instead of {Actually no, without a writer...}
{"Where the Heart is" is filled with...} instead of {Where the Heart is, is filled with...}
and lastly, regarding {Which is the point I was quite obviously making.} - Can I suggest that if you need to re-iterate your point or give more detail / context, then maybe it wasn't that "obvious."
I never claim to be a grammar guru, although when I'm not rushed (which is never the case when it comes to WTHI), I usually do alright. And with approximately 27,000 lines (that's lines, not words) of dialog/ code written, with very little time given to proof-reading, I expect lots of minor errors.
It's difficult. Hell, you couldn't even write 4 lines without an error!
As anyone who reads this forum regularly knows, I am always open to constructive feedback and in most cases I'm pretty receptive to it. I agree that there are typos & grammar errors in every episode and I usually thank people for catching these. I'm responding to your comments in a negative way, because your tone throughout your posts just reeks of pretentiousness and self-righteousness and I've a low tolerance of those attributes in people (and horses!).
And I've sprinkled a few typos and grammatical errors into my response just to give you something to do. (All intentional of course
Your pal,
Cheeky
You're grammatically foible-free in a non-negative intended pejorative fashion. Shit, I'm starting to sound like him. What I mean to say is: Yes, you're right!Don't waffle, tell us how you really fee.
You write the way you write, I write the way I write, we're both right, right?
The bitch slap heard around the world!!!
I am going to regret this, but for those that know me, you will know I cannot help myself when I'm bored/tired.
No writer? Sorry to break it to you, but I AM a writer. Guess what? I wrote this game, so I'm a writer!
Am I a professional writer? No. Do I claim to be a great or even good writer? No. I might even be, in some people's opinion a terrible writer and I'm OK with that. But good or bad, the fact is you are wrong and I am a writer! So, for someone who seems to be so particular about accuracy, it's a bit awkward that you start off with an error.
Oxford English definition of writer: "A person who has written something or who writes in a particular way."
P.S. I have written something. And I do write in a particular way. The fact that you think my "writing" is particularly bad sort of proves the point that I have written stuff! ***Cringe***
Can you give me an example of a misused colloquialism? I'm not saying I don't have any - I've just never heard of one, so I'm curious what you would consider as an example of where a colloquialism has been misused.
"Foible" is really only applicable when describing a person's character or behaviour. So you could accurately say I have some foibles, but it's incorrect to use the term in the context you used it in. A piece of writing cannot have " grammatical foibles". The writer has to have the foibles, not the writing. And "foible", by it's very definition implies a minor or small flaw, so it should never really be preceded by a diminutive adverb, such as "minor". Don't worry about it. I misused the word plenty of times too, until my 1st year (secondary school) teacher corrected me.
These are only questions, not statements, because I genuinely don't know for sure (But I bet you'll know). Should it be:
{Actually, no. Without a writer....} instead of {Actually no, without a writer...}
{"Where the Heart is" is filled with...} instead of {Where the Heart is, is filled with...}
and lastly, regarding {Which is the point I was quite obviously making.} - Can I suggest that if you need to re-iterate your point or give more detail / context, then maybe it wasn't that "obvious."
I never claim to be a grammar guru, although when I'm not rushed (which is never the case when it comes to WTHI), I usually do alright. And with approximately 27,000 lines (that's lines, not words) of dialog/ code written, with very little time given to proof-reading, I expect lots of minor errors.
It's difficult. Hell, you couldn't even write 4 lines without an error!
As anyone who reads this forum regularly knows, I am always open to constructive feedback and in most cases I'm pretty receptive to it. I agree that there are typos & grammar errors in every episode and I usually thank people for catching these. I'm responding to your comments in a negative way, because your tone throughout your posts just reeks of pretentiousness and self-righteousness and I've a low tolerance of those attributes in people (and horses!).
And I've sprinkled a few typos and grammatical errors into my response just to give you something to do. (All intentional of course
Your pal,
Cheeky
Hey Cheeky. You forgot pretentious asswipe that's full of themseves and whose favorite sound is their own voice.
