May I first say thank you for the well thought out response. This is exactly what I was looking for when I asked for feedback. Now I have plenty of really good suggestions to work with. I am currently parsing through each part of this post, and writing notes that will help me with the redesign. I would love for you to join the Discord so you could give me feedback, as I will be releasing small updates there along the way until I have a more polished version for release here.
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Already done. The story is about the 19th birthday approaching. In the process of rewriting the script to take in the great suggestions I have received. Should have an update on discord in a few days.
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Having a lot of options is unironically the most limiting option of all. They are all fighting for development time.
Time and time again, this problem crops up. Even in the games I like. Especially in the games I like.
I haven't played this yet, only read the description. Have a few questions to try to figure out if this will be something I will enjoy. First, can anyone explain to me the mind control elements of the game? Also, the description makes reference to becoming a hero, but will that be the only path available to us? Or will we have a darker, leaning toward villainous option as well?
Curious because, if the MC is the one with mind control powers(not sure if that is the case), normally that power trends toward more villainous or at least morally grey characters.
Curious because, if the MC is the one with mind control powers(not sure if that is the case), normally that power trends toward more villainous or at least morally grey characters.
The final outcome hero or villain will be based upon player choices. The MC will have innate mind control abilities, power of suggestion type abilities. The strength of these abilities will vary based on MC choices. It is not the only power in the game though, and was only added in to the tags because it exists in the game. It will not be the main focus of powers unless the correct darker choices are made.
Hope this helps.
I appreciate the answers, thank you. Sounds like it will trend toward something I will enjoy, so I will give it a go.
To be clear, it’s okay for the MC to be under 18 on this site, heck he could be 14 as long as he doesn’t look too young, the problem is with Patreon not here.
Though it’s always a good precaution to make sure that any characters that will be in sexual situations are over 18 even if they aren’t. There are so many games on this site with 18 years old characters that are clearly not…
Also deciding on the controversial tags early too especially the three letter word. There are some, including me, that won’t touch your game even if it’s optional.
Thank other devs for that when there’s a nasty surprise when you avoided that content.
Good luck on your game!!!
Man I think you should put the answer to the quotes below and not above them. It kinda confused me lol. Well I may as well be the only one so maybe there's no need. I honestly did't play the game, I always wait for a game to be past the 1st vers. b4 playing it. I wrote my com reacting to another's.
So, I don't rly know what to think abt the chunk of text you wrote (mc needing motivation, b-day plot, him being affraid to approach his crush...). From what you're saying there is a lot of room for improvement. I hope dev/s will take a look to what you wrote.
But yeah, I like the fantasy genre when done correctly, the fights (even if it's been so long since I last saw a game proposing good fight scenes), the epicness... From the front img and the overview (even if let's be honest the overview rly doesn't say much), I thought we'd get smt similar however that guy's com rly put a stop to that. How can you have epic fights if for every imgs you have a whole chink of text....
It's not possible, I dislike that even in "non dynamic" VN. Idk, the idea is jut not attractive and those more than often put me to sleep lol. It's like when some games describe some seggs scene like we didn't have a litteral (see what I did here lol) visual representation of it. Just a little description suffice, let the player's mind, story's build up, renders... do the rest.
I just find it's breaking the immersion the player has.
lol I kinda let myself go, so you were saying
I don't rly understand what you mean and I don't want to go down a misunderstanding. SO here's what I think, Initial concepts/genres (I mean they are tightly correlated lol) are of great importance to me. For exemple, there was a time when I enjoyed BAD, Acting Lesson... "concepts" but nowadays even if the narrative is rly good in those they just don't attract me (not attracting me doesn't necessarily mean that if I try them I won't enjoy them).
This game seemed somewhat near my type of games. The only thing is, the game seems a bit too generic but a lot of stories start that way and develop their own signature as the story advances.
THX
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Second that.
Many games have mc at 18 yo, with face of 12 yo, but hey, since mother look like 18 and grandma 25 maybe it's something to be expected
You took a better way in this, but dont go so far ahead. Alex looks like 30+ tired alcoholic, and MC i will give at last 25.
In general, entire game population looks older.
And good luck, i'm still ready for antoher urban fantasy setting
Yeah i kinda felt the same, as stated im redoing all renders and redesigning a bunch of characters as well. plan to rework Kate Alex and MC at the very leastSecond that.
Many games have mc at 18 yo, with face of 12 yo, but hey, since mother look like 18 and grandma 25 maybe it's something to be expected
You took a better way in this, but dont go so far ahead. Alex looks like 30+ tired alcoholic, and MC i will give at last 25.
In general, entire game population looks older.
And good luck, i'm still ready for antoher urban fantasy setting
Netori, being the one who steals instead of being stolen from is my preference.
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Well, I'm hoping it's only going to be Netori...anything else that falls under the NTR or sharing tag's, will push away most of the harem crowd (Also, harem fans are not just some people, they are a very large group that are particular about some of the controversial kinks, and want to know how they are going to be handled.)
Maybe consider looking at the popular title called Grandma's house, to see how that first time developer created a decent gene section that has present, future and never present tag information in his gene section (he did this at his first release, to secure a decent sized fan base).
As well by providing this kind of detailed information at or near first release...it saved him having to continually answer repeated questions in the forms. Thus saving his time, and avoiding a potential shit show that can happen in the forms by trolls trying to spread misinformation about what content is not actually there. That can easily hurt a title's future.
Having a decent gene section can become the "one stop place" for content information, for a new potential fan looking for answers to their question about content details (it can grab the attention of potential fans).
Well just some friendly advice. Best of luck on your future harem endeavor...well at least I hope it's an old school type harem story (where MC is the focal point for the girls to be attracted to, instead of each other).
Regards.
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Once I finish the rewrite I will be releasing for all platforms that renpy allows for. Although I cannot test the Mac versions.
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Quick update, still working on the rewrite. Version .2 will take some time, but there is a full rework and massive polishing coming. All renders are being redone, some characters are redesigned, new mechanics, and first full week will be released. All of Chapter One will be released. Some storyline elements have changed order, and dialogs rewritten to better fit the media.