Love the first chapter, it's an absolutely awesome start. Eve and Desiree are such sweethearts, Zoe (and Bianca) is intriguing, Saki and Fiona are also interesting, Rebecca and Anna are funny, and Lexi is relatively likable as well.
The one real criticism I have is to do with Lexi. If a dev wants to make a slutty LI that's their prerogative, but please don't insult my intelligence and try to tell me that said LI is not a slut. She says that she's really picky about the guys she sleeps with, as if that means she's not a slut. However, the fact that she's hooking up with multiple guys from the club means that she is a slut. So unless she's just lying and she's actually so picky that she isn't hooking up with any guys at all, then she is, in fact, a slut.
The one real criticism I have is to do with Lexi. If a dev wants to make a slutty LI that's their prerogative, but please don't insult my intelligence and try to tell me that said LI is not a slut. She says that she's really picky about the guys she sleeps with, as if that means she's not a slut. However, the fact that she's hooking up with multiple guys from the club means that she is a slut. So unless she's just lying and she's actually so picky that she isn't hooking up with any guys at all, then she is, in fact, a slut.
