SAME! God, emotional tension, hesitation, slow burn and the like are massive for me, and I figured there are others out there like me. It's like the frosting on the cake. Sure, the cake by itself ain't bad, but the frosting just MMF. Seals the deal.
I wanted to build the story in such a way that one playthrough is all it takes to see everything you wanna see.
You've made a fantastic novel.
The girls interactions with Aurum and each other seem heartfelt and real, as though you're actually getting to know them.
From the shy and sweet, bold and overt, the strength of personality and of arms, verbal sparring and actual sparring, camaraderie, quick wit, and genuine kindness, are terrific. Whether it be a blush, wink, smirk, hearty laugh, or gentle touch, there have been a ton of great moments throughout the story so far. All laid out with engaging conversations and wellmade action.
Having a protagonist who's intelligent, caring, willing to learn, and patient, while also being a talented martial artist in good physical condition, is quite a different combination from most of the visual novels I've found. His backstory and character arc are compelling. Going from a man who is essentially in hiding, or at least trying to stay under the radar, working as a janitor, to stepping out of obscurity by joining the security force so that he can better help those around him, is an outstanding storyline.
You've done an excellent job of creating tension, and I find myself actually hoping that people wouldn't get hurt.
First by Cecilia, and now by the former janitor mad scientist.
When he had River cornered in the changing booth I realized I was white knuckled and scowling at the screen, internally growling "Don't hurt her, you Bastard". Anxiously anticipating both him and Jack getting a healthy dose of karma in the future.
Interested to see where so many of the character's stories will go.
Whether it be to help some of them come further out of their shells,
seeing if there's a way to help Nook recover, a possible redemption arc of sorts for Cecilia, getting the trapped elves out of their stasis tubes, the looming threat of those creatures that ravage planets, and whatever the plans of that basement dweller creep might be. Sorry, I'm awful with names, so in my head he's 'the creep' whose name starts with a W, and Jack is 'the potentially violent asshole', unless their names are onscreen.
Looking forward to what comes next.
